Reaching out. (a haiku?)

Garry

I reached out for you. 

You just smiled and walked away 

Walked out of my life. 

  • Author: Garry (Pseudonym) (Offline Offline)
  • Published: April 2nd, 2017 16:57
  • Comment from author about the poem: First attempt at a haiku. I found it really hard. Not sure it was worth the effort. Maybe try again.
  • Category: Haiku
  • Views: 21
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  • BRIAN & ANGELA

    Thanks GARRY ~ Great HAIKU ~ 17 syllables in three line 5~7~ 5 syllable pattern. Each line is complete in itself and there is an action (line one) and a reaction (line two) and a finality (line three). Strictly speaking because it is about people it is a SENRYU ~ but most MPS Members call all 5~7~5 three line ~ free verse (non~rhyming) poems HAIKU so it is OK. Thanks for sharing ~ BRIAN (UK). Please check my poems ~ Thanks B

  • Garry

    Thank you. That was most informative. I will look up senryu and do more research on haikus.
    Your support is much appreciated.

  • Michael Edwards

    Absolutely - it's spot on - keep em coming.

    • Garry

      Thank you. You're too kind, but i aporeciate it.

      • Garry

        You must be an early riser! Your comment appears to be 2 hours earlier than mine and i posted at 6:30. (My daughter's an early riser!)

        • Michael Edwards

          About 4.30 am - even this was a bit early for me - usually up and about at about 5.30

          • Garry

            Roger Mcgough wrote a poem about his favourite time of day being 6am and the the things he could then.
            But finishes by saying something like, (only much better)
            .....
            If only i could discover it
            Cos I'm still tucked up warm in bed.

          • WriteBeLight

            Great job Garry!

            • Garry

              Cheers. Not really sure they're worth the effort involved. But hey ho



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