I reached out for you.
You just smiled and walked away
Walked out of my life.
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Author:
Garry (Pseudonym) (
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- Comment from author about the poem: First attempt at a haiku. I found it really hard. Not sure it was worth the effort. Maybe try again.
- Category: Haiku
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Thanks GARRY ~ Great HAIKU ~ 17 syllables in three line 5~7~ 5 syllable pattern. Each line is complete in itself and there is an action (line one) and a reaction (line two) and a finality (line three). Strictly speaking because it is about people it is a SENRYU ~ but most MPS Members call all 5~7~5 three line ~ free verse (non~rhyming) poems HAIKU so it is OK. Thanks for sharing ~ BRIAN (UK). Please check my poems ~ Thanks B
Thank you. That was most informative. I will look up senryu and do more research on haikus.
Your support is much appreciated.
Absolutely - it's spot on - keep em coming.
Thank you. You're too kind, but i aporeciate it.
You must be an early riser! Your comment appears to be 2 hours earlier than mine and i posted at 6:30. (My daughter's an early riser!)
About 4.30 am - even this was a bit early for me - usually up and about at about 5.30
Roger Mcgough wrote a poem about his favourite time of day being 6am and the the things he could then.
But finishes by saying something like, (only much better)
.....
If only i could discover it
Cos I'm still tucked up warm in bed.
Great job Garry!
Cheers. Not really sure they're worth the effort involved. But hey ho
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