Just Don't Film It

Garry

This set out initially to be a funny poem but something happened along the way

I used to have two goldfish
But one got sick and died
It happened on a Monday
And made me sad inside.

The other went on Tuesday
It was eaten by the cat
I simply threw the bowl away
And really that was that.

Peter was my hamster
I kept him in a cage
On Wednesday I got angry
And squashed him in a rage

I also had a rabbit
In the garden in her run
On Thursday I was.bored
So I killed her just for fun

Then on Friday  I get nervous
And I don't feel too good. 
The only  thing  that calms me down
Is the sight and smell of blood

It's the weekend when thingshappen
Just my dad being friendly, see
But then he brings his mates around
And they're not kind to me.


January 2017

  • Author: Garry (Pseudonym) (Offline Offline)
  • Published: May 6th, 2017 10:18
  • Comment from author about the poem: Meant to be funny along the lines of "Solomon Grundy born on Monday...." But it went horribly dark instead.
  • Category: Unclassified
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Comments6

  • Garry

    He is writing it on Friday. So tense is fine, isn't it?

  • swingline

    Dark as dried blood .

    • Garry

      That's dark. Thank you. I think i am about to rework the "Friday" verse following Ephraim's correct observation.

    • Garry

      Quite like the friday and weekend verses. Thank you for the input. Really appreciate seeing how other minds work. Cheers. G

    • Mizzy

      I laughed so much. This is my kind of poem. Wicked.

      • Garry

        Glad it made you laugh. I presume you mean the first few verses?

        • Mizzy

          No the whole thing did.

          • Garry

            Interesting. Did you not think the last verse,a vit dark for laughing? (i think iit is all quite funny despite the darkness)
            What do you think the last verse is about?

            • Mizzy

              no I just thought it was you showing the character descending into raving loony madness but because of the beginning part I kind of dismissed it as being the characters end result.

              • Garry

                Good a reason as any. Thank you for you comments. I enjoyed reading them.

                • Mizzy

                  Any time, I hope I made some sense.

                  • Garry

                    Indeed you did. More sense than the poem.

                    • Mizzy

                      lmao youre funny lol

                      • Garry

                        Imao?

                        • Mizzy

                          laugh my arse off

                          • Garry

                            😊

                          • Michael Edwards

                            Yup - my kind of poem also - good 'un

                          • Goldfinch60

                            Good dark write.



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