My lungs fill and exhale
I stand and rotate
No one understands how Cold
No one understands how my head stills
How can there be a cure for the unknown
Gathered from inconclusions
Drawn from emptiness
I need a solution that gives me happiness
Doctor, can you tell me what’s wrong?
What “cure” will I receive?
What wrong conclusion will you make?
I need a solution to make me alive
I want to feel what others feel
I need to feel Love
I need Forgiveness
I need Comfort and Touch
Come a Little Closer
You will not find what you need
You will find what I need
For I cannot give you want and need
The Cold cannot be driven away
Only locked away
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Author:
Hale Strider (
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- Comment from author about the poem: This poem is about self discovery and finding what you need. I recently have gone through a period of self reflection and this poem is about me discovering that even though my mind works differently than others I still need love and comfort.
- Category: Reflection
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Comments4
absolutely loved reading this.
Thank you! I am glad you enjoyed it!
WELCOME HALE ~ Thank for your first Poem and you comments for clarification ~ OK. The structure of the poem (5 quatrains and a doublet) it fine and it has flow and rhythm but very sparse rhyme ~ modern poems of course do not have to rhyme or scan ! The subject and content is quite intriguing. Your comment suggests the message of your elegant poem is self discovery ~ being different but still needing a "normal" relationship of being loved and comforted. In essence we can empathise with that because that is what most of us also want ~ To be DIFFERENT but to be loved and treated normally ! Thanks for sharing ~ Yours BRIAN (UK) Please check my poems ~ Thanks B
Thank you so much!
Brian has it right when he calls it elegant - good piece and hope you'll be posting more.
great write and true
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