I sit alone while the world sleeps In pure and bliss full slumber eye's closed and lashes to cheeks they dream without number
I sit alone while the world sleeps The night skies I am under from my walls a shadow creeps while in fear I wonder...
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Author:
Peekaboopeaches (
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- Comment from author about the poem: It's the first poem I have ever really written. So grammar and such are probably really bad. I wrote it during a time when I had super bad nightmares that would wake me up at night and I wouldnt be able to fall back to sleep. It's short and simple but I feel it expresses my feelings well enough
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WELCOME PEACHES (LOVE YOUR PEN NAME !) Thanks for your first poem and comment. It is "just right" in length and sentiment ~ lovely ~ more please. Yours BRIAN (UK) Please check my poems ~ Thanks B.
Welcome to MPS. Your write says a great deal. Well done for your first one.
I love the implied meaning by having the whole poem inside a single lengthy stanza. Wish I thought of that! It’s kinda like how sleep paralysis feels like it lasts for hours when I’m reality it’s only a few seconds. Don’t worry too much about grammar when writing poetry. With poetry I find it’s more about getting the artful flow of words and projecting meaning onto them, which I think you’ve done just fine. It’s not so much as about the hard and fast rules of the English language
Thank you for your thoughts i very much appreciate them coming from someone with such talent
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