Day's Eye.

Fay Slimm.

 

 

Day's Eye.

 

Stars like sparks splutter to bed
as birds catch fire.


Smut-red lips of sultry sun kiss
mouldering night
and in dawn's shimmering light
greet awakening sky.


Throat of thrush flintily strikes
other bird-minds,
inciting song while edge of day's
eye sets more alive
morning's explosions to electrify
small tongues in flight.

I stand dumbly admiring strident
trills of fervent dives
as winged searchers, self un-fed,
food must soon find
if newest nestlings are to survive.


Day's edge reminds
earliest risers of urgent business

as rays become daytime.

  • Author: Fay Slimm. (Offline Offline)
  • Published: July 1st, 2017 03:18
  • Category: Unclassified
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  • Frank Prem

    I think you really entered into this moment Fay, and it shows. I don't think hanging around the edges works - if you want to write it you really need to buy into the feeling of the tale.

    Well done.

    • Fay Slimm.

      Warm thanks to you Frank for the read and comment.

    • P.H.Rose

      This is wonderful Fay.
      Just gorgeous....
      My favourite is the
      Swallows... the paths
      They make in the sky
      Are just wonderful and
      Very hypnotic...

      • Fay Slimm.

        So pleased you enjoyed the poem P,H, - - yes birds like the swallow are so inspiring.

      • BRIAN & ANGELA

        Thanks for caring & sharing about NATURE ~ FAY Sunset ~Sunrise are all noted by the birds Their flocking and nestling at night ~ bids us rest. Their Dawn Chorus reminds us that Today really is a New Day ~ AMEN ~ Yours BRIAN

      • kevin browne

        a beautiful day's eye work in this stunner of a poem. it quite took my breath away. what magic.

        • Fay Slimm.

          Ah - - your kind comment stirs me onwards for more natural magic to pen and post - -a big thank you Kevin.

          • kevin browne

            you deserve it x

          • orchidee

            A fine write Fay.

          • FredPeyer

            Beautiful poem Fay, the second stanza just blew me away. We have these incredible mornings when the sun rises over the Koolau Mountain range in the east painting the clouds from pink to dark red. The same spectacle sometimes repeats the same day when the sun disappears behind the Waianae mountains in the west.

            • Fay Slimm.

              Am delighted the read brought your comment on those incredible mornings over your side of the pond my friend - those shades is sunrise over there sound sensational - thanks a tonne - from Fay

            • Heather T

              Smitten with your language, as always.
              "Smut-red lips of sultry sun kiss"
              Get outta here!! Just strangling every atom of beauty and dipping the quill in its residue. A stunner.

              • Fay Slimm.

                Ooh - Heather your support gives me gusto for more strangulation of nature's raw beauty- - and loads of appreciation for the visit and read of this verbose offering to dawn. Warm thanks my friend
                - from Fay in Cornwall U.K.

              • Augustus

                Great poem. Great photos.

              • malubotelho

                I loved your writing about the birds. Very well written. Stunning

              • Goldfinch60

                I was there Fay, beautiful wriye with great imagery.



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