You will have to change your poem they said
Some of your language in not appropriate
No I said
No
You do not tell me how to write
You do not tell me how to express myself
You do not tell me how to release the emotional flood within me
I write and still I get pulled down int the undertow
In the current of emotional thought
Yes some of my language is crude
But that is just the state my mind is in
You have no say
I have no say
The words flow from pure emotion
Unto the page
Every word is an out pouring of
Blood
Tears
Pain
Joy
An out pouring of pure emotional force
A true sign
That I am humans
Every word
No matter the wording
Is spilled from my heart and soul
I will not change a word of it
For to do so would be a betrayal
A betrayal to myself
A betrayal to who I am
A betrayal to human existence
Every word
The language
Rush out from the flood gates of the soul
I have no control over it
The flood cleanses
Heart
Mind
Soul
Body
I will change nothing
I will not deny the truth
That lies behind each world
The language may be crude for some
But
It is truth at it's essence
You will have to change your poem they said
Some of your language in not approprriate
No I said
No
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Author:
Tony36 (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Find this and many others at www.tanders-tma.blogspot.com. I was at a poetry slam one time, and one of the judges took a look at my poem and said I would have to change it because of some words I had used. I explained I was entering it in the adult catergoey. he told me that it did not matter I still had to change it. I told him thank you, grabbed my poem and walked away. When it was my turn on the mic, I raised the poem above my head and ripped it in two. Then started into the worlds written here
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Comments7
Brilliant - would love to do what you did .
Thank you
The words of Billy Joel come to mind. 'Don't go changing to try and please me. You never let me down before. Don't imagine you're too familiar, and i don't see you anymore'.
I wish i had been there sir!
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As you evolve as a poet you may learn to express your deep felt emotion in a way that becomes more acceptable, and thereby reaches a wider audience. Never stop expressing deeply. Good poem, Tony!
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Nice write. Greetings. You have a brave heart.
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You stood up for freedom of expression which in coming from heart and soul cannot be denied. This applies to all other writers and poets of course so - -- Bravo , I do admire you Tony.
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great fucking words! lol!
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ha! ha! ha! lol
So very true, you are right to do what you did, nobody should tell you what you write is not suitable, that is an individual opinion. As we all know some like our words and some do not but that is the way of the world. NOBODY should tell you/us that we should not allow others to hear our words.
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