Unreal.
Shadowy movements of ethereal
music play nebulous games
with light's lacy fingers, weaving
watery lines on sleepy lake.
Tonight diaphanous curl of filmy
grey smoke whispers its
liquid journey along growing dim
with fervent limpidity.
Time holds breath as stars stack
essence of tiffany dew
on blackening trout's shiny back
in twilight's translucence.
Mist covers sky but above hangs
the gauzy sickle-shaped
glow of shade-blinkered lantern
trying to flicker again.
Clouds part and dome entrances
as the beautiful ghost
of a fading rainbow dances its last
and night closes the show.
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Author:
Fay Slimm. (
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Comments10
how did you manage to put the array of these beautiful words together because they sit side by side perfectly and the message is strong and clear which in itself pretty UNREAL. great worked out poem here and it so pleasant to read. well done Fay Slimm.
Really pleased you saw the sparkle of sunset message through the stringing together of words - thank you Kevin for your caring comment.
you're very welcome Fay.
Excellent again FAY ! You are such a blessing (in so many ways) to MPS and your awesome daily Poems & Pictures inspire us all ! The painting "Rainbows in the Evening" perfectly compliments your poem and is alluded to in your closing verse. All of Nature is Unreal but it is God's gift to the Human Race ! A Chance to thank Him tomorrow ~ BUT ~ How many will ? Love you for being you ~ BRIAN
I blush to think you feel me a blessing dear Brian for words are my way into stating the magic of nature and of creation - thank you dear friend for this perceptive comment.
This is pretty interesting. The way you string adjectives along like your plaything is admirable. Keep it up!
My thanks to you Nicholas - so pleased you enjoyed the read.
Beautiful word painting, Fay! You are indeed an artist. Your gift with words continues to impress and amaze me.
You honour my work with your compliment Louis - thank you and so glad you like my pen-painted sunset and twilight rainbow.
A fine write F.
Fay, this is so beautiful, don't know how to say it....you used up all the words! I tried to pick a favorite line or stanza and could not. The whole poem is a favorite!
Fred your comment is filled with encouragement and I am so glad your read transported you into my fantasy wording of brilliant sunsets and rainbows at twilight.
I love being taken along to Fay's world. I feel blessed when you write. Means I can come on in and sit a spell.
You are beautiful is your kind expressions and I humbly thank you dear Heather. So so pleased you liked the moment I experienced and shared.
Love you at twilight! Hugs.
Such a beautiful write Fay. Thank you.
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