Im drowning.

Not in water, but in pain

No scars, nor bruises

Just sadness inside my body frame.

I hopelessly stare at my reflection

My heads empty from my minds rejection.

Inside im begging for help.

Silent cries wont get me help.

Hear me.

Here I am.


Im drowning.

Not in water, but in pain

Please help me to feel sane.


  • R.A.Brown

    This is a truly relate-able S.Louise, i really enjoyed reading your work

    • S.louise

      Thankyou R.A 🙂

    • Moonflower15

      So deep and so real.

      • S.louise

        Thank you for commenting

      • FredPeyer

        A very emotional cry for help, and so well written!

        • S.louise

          Thank you for your comment

        • burning-embers

          Writing gives me such release. I hope it is so for you too. You will always find a 'ready ear' on this site and some very interesting, thought provoking writings.

          • S.louise

            Writting has always helped me in dark times. Thank you for your comment

          • BRIAN & ANGELA

            WELCOME LOUISE ~ Thanks for your first poem. . Well crafted and replete with Rhyme & Rhythm ! The subject PAIN is SAD but FAMILIAR because it is something we can all relate to. My experience (of pain) thankfully is excruiating but short ! Thinking of you ~ Praying for you ~ BRIAN (UK)

            • S.louise

              Thankyou for commenting with kind words

            • Jessie

              Great job! Almost anyone can get rhyme and rhythm but you have such great voice in your writing. I hope things are looking up for you.

              • S.louise

                Thank you for your kind words 🙂

              • Joaquin Finn

                I loved this it's to the point and relatable !

                • S.louise

                  Thankyou for reading

                • Goldfinch60

                  Good emotive write, may your pain soon subside.

                  • S.louise

                    Thank you for reading

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