Heather T

hatter mad

oh vitreous day

for shattering teeth

you must see my glass eating act

 

the dogs sneer and laugh

from their seats in the trees

so I twinkle them with my bat

 

they saw their reflection

with some introspection

in shards and did not like the sight

 

so hideous pretty

a bit like this ditty

they growled in caviling light

 

no

 

they growled in carnival light

 

*hiccup*

 

they growled in carnivore light

 


fleas rage their sermons

the bandersnatch claws

both bark at my open door

 

confessing nothing

I grin bloody

and proceed to gnash some more

Comments10

  • P.H.Rose

    Love this heather
    I like this kind of
    Poem....
    Not laid out, makes you
    Think... well I had to anyway

    • Heather T

      I hope you didn't have to think too hard! Just me goofing around. Thank you!

    • kevin browne

      always a spark full event when sitting down to embrace your writings. this is a great one Heather T and I think you're not hatter mad. thanks for allowing us to read it.

      • Heather T

        Thank you, Kevin!

      • FredPeyer

        Tell me Heather, did you have a little nip "hiccup" while writing this? Love the poem, nip or no nip, it is not easy to even come close to the esteemed Mr. Carroll, nee Dodgson, but I would venture to say you may have done it!

        • Heather T

          I could have used a nip, but had to settle for imagination instead! I'm thinking I might need to add a couple syllables there at the end to fix the flow. What say you?

          • FredPeyer

            You want more syllables at the end? Here is a possible solution, but I am sure you could come up with something a lot better:
            Confessing barely nothing
            I show my bloody grin
            Last line unchanged

          • burning-embers

            OK when is the screen play coming out? Its gonna be some event but i wanna sit with the dogs in the trees cos they've the best seats. Bat twinklingly good fun.

            • Heather T

              My favorite comment! Whittle me a good toothpick while you're up there, case I have to pick a few of you out of my teeth. Thank you, b-e.

            • Nicholas Browning

              Sinister, wicked, and a tad bit of humor. Wonderful stuff.

              • Heather T

                Thank you, friend! It was a fun scribble.

              • Michael Edwards

                Well goofyfied - gave me a good smile at 5.30am so here's to a good day!!

                • Heather T

                  Goofyfied!!! My auto correct kept changing that to "goofy died". Thank you, Michael!

                • Frank Prem

                  Well goofed Heather. Nice tight rhythm to follow.

                  Bravo.

                  • Heather T

                    Thank you much, Frank. It was fun.

                  • Goldfinch60

                    Gnash away Heather. Good write.

                    • Heather T

                      Thank you, I shall.

                    • ShannonXx

                      Loved this! All your poems are so descriptive which I love

                      • Heather T

                        Love that you love it, miss! Thank you

                      • Candlewitch

                        dear Heather,

                        Lewis Carroll would have fallen in love with you and this poem!!!

                        *hugs, Cat

                        • Heather T

                          Oh, I hope that he would have. I loved his brand of coo coo. Thank you, Cat!



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