oh vitreous day
for shattering teeth
you must see my glass eating act
the dogs sneer and laugh
from their seats in the trees
so I twinkle them with my bat
they saw their reflection
with some introspection
in shards and did not like the sight
so hideous pretty
a bit like this ditty
they growled in caviling light
no
they growled in carnival light
*hiccup*
they growled in carnivore light
fleas rage their sermons
the bandersnatch claws
both bark at my open door
confessing nothing
I grin bloody
and proceed to gnash some more
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Love this heather
I like this kind of
Poem....
Not laid out, makes you
Think... well I had to anyway
I hope you didn't have to think too hard! Just me goofing around. Thank you!
always a spark full event when sitting down to embrace your writings. this is a great one Heather T and I think you're not hatter mad. thanks for allowing us to read it.
Thank you, Kevin!
Tell me Heather, did you have a little nip "hiccup" while writing this? Love the poem, nip or no nip, it is not easy to even come close to the esteemed Mr. Carroll, nee Dodgson, but I would venture to say you may have done it!
I could have used a nip, but had to settle for imagination instead! I'm thinking I might need to add a couple syllables there at the end to fix the flow. What say you?
You want more syllables at the end? Here is a possible solution, but I am sure you could come up with something a lot better:
Confessing barely nothing
I show my bloody grin
Last line unchanged
OK when is the screen play coming out? Its gonna be some event but i wanna sit with the dogs in the trees cos they've the best seats. Bat twinklingly good fun.
My favorite comment! Whittle me a good toothpick while you're up there, case I have to pick a few of you out of my teeth. Thank you, b-e.
Sinister, wicked, and a tad bit of humor. Wonderful stuff.
Thank you, friend! It was a fun scribble.
Well goofyfied - gave me a good smile at 5.30am so here's to a good day!!
Goofyfied!!! My auto correct kept changing that to "goofy died". Thank you, Michael!
Well goofed Heather. Nice tight rhythm to follow.
Bravo.
Thank you much, Frank. It was fun.
Gnash away Heather. Good write.
Thank you, I shall.
Loved this! All your poems are so descriptive which I love
Love that you love it, miss! Thank you
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