FredPeyer

Tropical Rain

The rainbow shyly kissed

The slopes of the Waianae mountains

Dark clouds pregnant with water

Moving in from the Koolau’s

Ready to give birth to tropical rains

 

The red and dry Mililani earth

Waiting like an excited virgin

To be embraced and blessed by

The cloud’s wet offspring

 Shivering in anticipation

 

The heavens opening up

Dropping the gift of life

Rain so heavy, so dense,

It obliterates the senses

And leaves us breathless

Comments14

  • FredPeyer

    You are making me blush! So stop it!
    But thank you anyway for your kind comment.

  • Michael Edwards

    Kat is spot on (if you'll excuse the pun) - this is such a good poem love 'the clouds wet offspring' - simply a great piece.

    • FredPeyer

      Thanks so much Michael, I appreciate it.

    • Poetic Dan

      You nearly took there, great writing

      • FredPeyer

        Mahalo Dan, glad you liked it.

      • whisperingquill

        First of all you are lucky as hell getting to reside in Hawaii I'm on the east coast
        So you are lucky

        "The heavens opening up

        Dropping the gift of life"

        "The cloudโ€™s wet offspring"

        "Dark clouds pregnant with water"

        Very great lines
        Enviable

        Really great piece Fred ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ

        • FredPeyer

          Thanks wq, I really appreciate your comment!
          Yes, it IS nice living in Hawaii, but there are some drawbacks as well. One, we are far away from everybody else, and two, it is expensive here. Paradise is not cheap!

        • kevin browne

          my nostrils are filled with your poem FredPeyer and that along side this piece is a very rainy achieving pleasurable moment. good work FP.

          • FredPeyer

            Thank you Kevin, I am happy you liked it. Seriously, while it does not happen very often, I did experience rains so dense, so strong, that it felt as if I was drowning.

          • burning-embers

            Tis a week of rainfall in my Cornwall excursion. Rainfall can keep u indoors and peering out thru windows of meditation.

            • FredPeyer

              Thank you b-e, and the rhythmic splitter-splatter on the roof is your meditation mantra.

            • Fay Slimm.

              Your poetic expressions of tropical rain are the best I have read - so real I was cringing with you under that waterfall shawl of dense wet - a first class write Fred.

              • FredPeyer

                Thank you Fay, your comment means a lot!

              • Louis Gibbs

                You paint us a lovely, wet picture this morning, Fred! It's a tough place to live, but somebody has to do it. Kudos!

                • FredPeyer

                  My sentiments exactly! Thank you Louis.

                • Goldfinch60

                  Super write, rain can be so special.

                  • FredPeyer

                    Thanks Goldfinch, in my book rain is VERY special. And there are so many types of rain, from a light drizzle to the tropical storm rain I refer to in the poem.

                  • ShannonXx

                    This is a beautiful poem!

                    • FredPeyer

                      Mahalo Shannon, I am so glad you liked it.

                    • malubotelho

                      Fred, from now on every time I look up to the sky I will check on the clouds to see if they are pregnant. Loved your so delicately written verses about nature. So beautiful.

                      • FredPeyer

                        Thank you Malu, and when you look up, you can even tell what month they are in!!!

                        • malubotelho

                          Haha ๐Ÿ˜‚Cute. Today I was pregnant with a poem and now the clouds are pregnant too. Are we in a fertile period?

                        • Bibbeck

                          Wow, wow, wow! Excellent expressive write FP; I can hear it coming down. Your words could easily be the introduction of a great novel, or someone reading an opening to the setting of a movie. I only wish I could use this description when it rains in UK, but it's rarely like this.

                          • FredPeyer

                            Thank you Bibbeck for your kind comment. I visited the UK a few times and did experience the rain there.Growing up in Switzerland I am very familiar with rainy days that are rather depressing. What is so nice about the rains here is that they are usually short with the sun coming out again. It happens every once in a while that when driving from my town to Honolulu (about 15 miles) I encounter three different rainfalls with sunshine in-between. These are usually rather light rains.

                          • Joel Carpenter

                            Great poem!

                            • FredPeyer

                              Mahalo Joel!

                            • Christina8

                              This poem is beautiful and uses such magnificent description, it almost felt like I was there. Absolutely amazing poem!

                              • FredPeyer

                                Mahalo Christina, for your nice comment, hope you did not get wet! ๐Ÿ™‚



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