Fay Slimm

Take One.

 


Take One.

 

Take one from a pair and trauma arises,
ocean buckles,
sunset ices,
waiting grows fists and memory sighs.

 

Take one from a duo and lost are smiles,
lonely ungloves,
solo arrives,
life loses bliss and future demises.

 

Take one from two and sorrow tightens
love uncouples,
oneness frightens,
lips stay unkissed and distress climbs.

 

Take one from other and spoil an item
parting troubles,
nothing revives,
     sudden grief hits with no compromise.        

Comments10

  • BRIAN & ANGELA

    Thanks for sharing FAY ~ a poignant picture and an elegant but sad poem ~ straight for your loving heart. I know you speak from experience and your poem throbs with reality. Thanks for caring ~ Thinking of you ~ Yours as ever BRIAN

  • FredPeyer

    Beautiful poem, incredible rhyming, nice structure, I don't think it can get any better, Fay.

  • Night Owl

    Took me right there- Yes-- Nicely done!

  • RAJ NANDY

    THANKS FOR SHARING FAY! -RAJ

  • Candlewitch

    dear Fay,

    a bitter-sweet poem. I think these lines sum it up perfectly:

    Take one from other and spoil an item
    parting troubles,
    nothing revives,
    sudden grief hits with no compromise.

    *hugs, Cat

  • Louis Gibbs

    Boy, does it ever hit with no compromise! Right in the heart and gut, with doubling-over pain. Your poem nails it, Fay! It resonates for sure.

  • Goldfinch60

    Super write and so very true.

  • orchidee

    A fine write Fay.

  • Santita

    You are gifted, dear Fay. Lovely piece.

  • malubotelho

    Take one from two and sorrow tightens
    love uncouples,
    oneness frightens,
    lips stay unkissed and distress climbs.
    I love this verse specially. Lovely Fay.



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