Full moon,
two bodies
Engaged under clear sky
Slick rocks, breaking waves
Mighty tides
Rising strong high
lost in love
they never made out
for them
the next day, never came by.
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Author:
Malu (Pseudonym) (
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Sweet and sad. Thanks for sharing this one, Malu!
Thanks Louis. Yes, you are totally right. Sweet and sad. And true. It happened.
Good emotive write.
Thanks Goldfinch. I appreciate your comments.
Living on an island, your lovely poem reminded me of a few instances where people were swept out to sea, never to be found again. That's why never turn your back to the ocean.
I really like how you ended the poem 'for them, the next day, never came by'. So we must enjoy and make the best out of today!
Yes Fred, you right. Today is all we have. Better saying. This moment is all we have. For this couple I believe they had a great last night. Tragic next day though.
At least they crossed over with a smile on their face and love in their heart!
Oh yes.
The door left open with questions like all great writes - love it M
Thank you Michael.
Beautiful and sad....
Thanks dear. I appreciate the comments.
Love kills. Love chills. Love wills. Love fills. Love thrills. Love on the rocks, no big surprise. Amazing the dangerous places we have chosen to make love....... i'm not telling.
cor! this could be the sly-est way yet to ever get onto a ladies skype. why, twas only last week and the weather forecast for next week fortells...........
Who cares about the weather its time for making.........
must we stop meeting like this?....
Malu is lovely and wise, she knows all about love.... it will tickle her to see our antics
Someones going to say " get a room "
This is a true story about a couple that went to the rocks on the end of the beach in Sidney, Australia. They stayed there too long and the tides rose and took them. It happened to me once but I noticed the rising and left fast. Was a dangerous place. Thanks for your comments.
Well, I better go to sleep. I let you guys chat. You can use my room.
Phew!
Wow fabulous.! But poignant end all so poetic. I admire how much u can say in brevity. Intense apt imagery painted in words. Kudos.
Do have a look at my writings too, But comment only on the one u like best. I write on many sites and they do enjoy my poetry or get Sth from it.
Thank you very much. I will check your writing.
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