Ill

Nicholas Browning

Before, it would arrive,
And then withdraw;
I'm simply a little ill.

 

Shuddering perspective,
Questioning every line.
Is this what they truly meant when they said
I would lose my mind?

 

  • Author: Nicholas Browning (Offline Offline)
  • Published: August 17th, 2017 01:15
  • Comment from author about the poem: Just a simple work to pass the time my friends. I like poems that only have two stanzas. They're awesome. See you all soon!
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  • orchidee

    Hope it don't mean you're questioning every line of poetry that you write?! You would never finish a poem!

    • Nicholas Browning

      It's a painful thing, haha. No biggie though, the words are nice to me.

    • Goldfinch60

      Good write. Your mind is not lost if you can create these words.

      • Nicholas Browning

        A method to the madness, sir. Thanks Finch.

      • Michael Edwards

        I am more and more beginning to appreciate short works and rarely write anything much longer these days. They can pack a punch and often leave the reader wanting more - like this great shortie.

        • Nicholas Browning

          Thank you very much for your saying so my friend. They are indeed a wonderful thing.

        • burning-embers

          I must have lost my mind and then.... well questioning every line of a draft idea until its..... is 'publishable' a value statement or an excuse for my giving up? .... then there's mindfulness .... I'll stick to plumbing i think.

          • Nicholas Browning

            That's pretty much the gist of it, more or less.

          • orchidee

            You better now?! (heehee). I seem to get longer! doh! Well, I should not waffle then.

            • Nicholas Browning

              I dunno, got a bit of writer's block. lol. What about you? Doing okay?

              • orchidee

                Yes thanks N. Not to brag, because some days I write nothing at all, then others day one, two, or even three in a day. I got a queue of poems waiting at the moment!

                • Nicholas Browning

                  Well I'm glad to hear it. I'm going to attempt to make something decent, (Send help please), but happy writing and reading to you sir. If I don't see you later, have a good day as well.

                  • orchidee

                    Here\'s a bit of help maybe. Whether \'song-poems\' or \'said poems\', maybe have a set layout, eg 6666 or 8888; or bit longer 878787 or 888888 (syllables per line). Of course many words have more than one syllable. But it don\'t mean \'words per line\'. Well, it could do, for \'said\' poems. But is likely not to fit the tune if it is a \'song\' poem. Then it would be like some ghastly \'round\' thing that goes wrong, and \'murders\' a song!

                    • orchidee

                      Sorry it's put in loads of \\\\\ above!

                      • Nicholas Browning

                        It's quite alright, haha. I get what you mean. I tend to use my sense of hearing when I write. It's gotta have the right amount of flow to it. hmmmmmm.

                      • malubotelho

                        Awesome writing Nicholas. I have to visit you more times.

                        • Nicholas Browning

                          Thank you very much for your saying so, and for stopping by!

                          • malubotelho

                            I asked for your friendship because I tend to read more from my friends.

                            • Nicholas Browning

                              I accepted, haha.

                            • FredPeyer

                              To you Nicholas, it might have been 'just a simple work to pass the time', but to me this is a very relevant and well written poem. As I get older I do worry sometimes of 'losing my mind'. It is happening to a brother in law, and it is not funny!
                              Just think, the worst thing that can happen to a writer, be he good or bad doesn't matter, as long as he considers himself a writer, is losing his mind. What is the alternative? Mindless TV?
                              I love your writing, and would love to have you join my circle of friends. I usually read all 'friend' poems, and then, if I have time, I pick and choose from the general section. Sometimes I miss the ones I want to read.

                              • Nicholas Browning

                                I would be most delighted to join that circle, sir. Losing your mind is no joke, I understand that. It's not a good thing. Sometimes it cripples, and if you have no control over it then it can be a madness without a method. I'm honored you've said these things, thank you.

                              • poetboy123

                                A feeling that many of us encounter at times, great write Nicholas!

                                • Nicholas Browning

                                  Living within the truth is always complex, sir. Thank you for the read!

                                  • poetboy123

                                    It was my pleasure!



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