BENEATH A WANING MOON
Bouncing in the cart ruts
Bumping over the stones
Brushing past the hedgerows
Beneath a waning moon.
A black cloud drifts slowly
As rain begins to weep
And inside coiled snugly
A traveller fast asleep.
Bouncing in the cart ruts
Bumping over the stones
Brushing past the hedgerows
Beneath a waning moon.
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Author:
Michael Edwards (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Three four line stanzas with each line containing six syllables. Each line in the first stanza begins with the same letter. .Each line in the second stanza begins with the same letter but different to the letter chosen in the first stanza. The third stanza to be an identical repeat of the first stanza.
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My word, M, what a challenge. Reads nicely to my ear, so I'm thinking you've managed it well.
A different meter in the middle verse but I guess that doesn't really matter - thanks Frank
I couldn't tackle a form/structure like that, M. Not a strength of mine.
Very clever write Michael.
The painting spoke to me immediately, in my mind I seemed to know what it brought to me.
A bunch of flowers? Thanks Andy
No not flowers I will Pm you so as not to lead others away from their own ideas.
A fine write and pic M. No wonder you was a bit late (2 minutes) explaining that lot to us in your comment! heehee.
I'd already written it in Notebook so it was just a copy and paste job - thanks O
Great explanatory writing Michael. Great poem too.
Thanks m for your kind words
I like the simplicity. The way you connect the dots is unique in a sense. Well done.
Pleased you like them Nicholas
Did you create this format? Can't believe it, could never get it done. You have a brilliant way to put color together.
I've been wondering if anyone would question this - yes I 'invented' this form which with tongue in cheek I call a Raptup - because it's wrapt up in the last stanza by repeating the first stanza. Thanks for looking in and for your kind comment.
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