BENEATH A WANING MOON

Michael Edwards

 

 

BENEATH A WANING MOON

 

 

Bouncing in the cart ruts

Bumping over the stones

Brushing past the hedgerows

Beneath a waning moon.

 

A black cloud drifts slowly

As rain begins to weep

And inside coiled snugly

A traveller fast asleep.

 

Bouncing in the cart ruts

Bumping over the stones

Brushing past the hedgerows

Beneath a waning moon.

 

 

 

 

 

  • Author: Michael Edwards (Offline Offline)
  • Published: August 19th, 2017 00:02
  • Comment from author about the poem: Three four line stanzas with each line containing six syllables. Each line in the first stanza begins with the same letter. .Each line in the second stanza begins with the same letter but different to the letter chosen in the first stanza. The third stanza to be an identical repeat of the first stanza.
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Comments6

  • Frank Prem

    My word, M, what a challenge. Reads nicely to my ear, so I'm thinking you've managed it well.

    • Michael Edwards

      A different meter in the middle verse but I guess that doesn't really matter - thanks Frank

      • Frank Prem

        I couldn't tackle a form/structure like that, M. Not a strength of mine.

      • Goldfinch60

        Very clever write Michael.

        The painting spoke to me immediately, in my mind I seemed to know what it brought to me.

        • Michael Edwards

          A bunch of flowers? Thanks Andy

          • Goldfinch60

            No not flowers I will Pm you so as not to lead others away from their own ideas.

          • orchidee

            A fine write and pic M. No wonder you was a bit late (2 minutes) explaining that lot to us in your comment! heehee.

            • Michael Edwards

              I'd already written it in Notebook so it was just a copy and paste job - thanks O

            • malubotelho

              Great explanatory writing Michael. Great poem too.

            • Nicholas Browning

              I like the simplicity. The way you connect the dots is unique in a sense. Well done.

            • myself and me

              Did you create this format? Can't believe it, could never get it done. You have a brilliant way to put color together.

              • Michael Edwards

                I've been wondering if anyone would question this - yes I 'invented' this form which with tongue in cheek I call a Raptup - because it's wrapt up in the last stanza by repeating the first stanza. Thanks for looking in and for your kind comment.



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