It's hard to think about you
Knowing what I do
My love burns deep for you
But yours does for her too
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Author:
Abigail_ (
Offline) - Published: September 4th, 2017 02:28
- Comment from author about the poem: Please be as critical as possible I would definitely like to become a better poet.
- Category: Love
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Comments3
Well this is a lovely piece and although I've read it several times I can't find any suggestions as to how it could be improved - it's great as it is. And I do applaud you for the courage to ask for crits - not something many of us do - sadly.
Oh yes - and a warm welcome to the site - hope to see more of your work soon.
Thank you very much
WELCOME ABIGAIL (lovely name) Thanks for your first Poem ~excellent. A neat quatrain (4 lines) good rhyme (aaaa) and good rhythm ! Many of us can empathise with the subject and the dilemma it poses ~ the infernal triangle of LOVE ! MPS is an Open University of Poetry ! People post their poems as Haiku & Senryu ~ Sonnets ~ Acrostics etc so you can study a learn new Classical Styles of Poetry ~ if you want any help just ask ! We are very gentle critics ! Thanks for sharing ~ Yours Brian (UK). Please check my POEMS ~ Thanks BRIAN
Thank you very much for your feedback Brian and I will definitely try to advance my knowledge of writing and become better and I am extremely glad that unlike my friends you managed to notice the quatrain
Not a poet myself, I like reading and I do enjoy this piece. Welcome to this site.
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