My tongue in cheek answer to Santita’s ‘Under the spell’ poem:
Not all of us are ‘forsaken fools’! 😊
His steel-blue eyes light up her fire
Helpless body on a burning pyre
His lopsided grin makes her swoon
Piercing her heart like a sharp harpoon
The manly scent of his after-shave
Sparks an incredibly sexy crave
Glancing at his hands so strong, yet tender
She is ready for unconditional surrender
One shy look at his chiseled face
Delivers her into a dream-like space
Watching muscles rippling under his shirt
She knows this is much more than a flirt
The thought of kissing his gorgeous lips
Creates delicious tension below her hips
Just imagining his powerful erection
Triggers a tomato red complexion
He comes to her and holds her tight
Her heart is pounding, her eyes are bright
He has swept her completely off her feet
Arousing feelings of lust and heat
Like a slave she will please her man
Anytime, anywhere, any way she can
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Alfred Peyer (Pseudonym) (
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Ooooh - I blushed reading it - ah the memories - great stuff Fred
Thanks Michael, just thought that I have to write something to counter-balance Santita's poem.
I wasn't sure how a tomato would get in such a poem! heehee. Anyway, I've swooned. A fine write Fred.
If it was Kate Price (or a most hideous USA female) he would have chucked tomatoes at her! She puts me off my food when she is in the paper, which is nearly every day! Yuk!
Well orchidee, in the poem's case it is the girl that gets tomato read in the face, not the guy! And btw, I am happy you 'swooned', with or without tomato!
Must be an English thing, Santita. I guess the only Kate that counts over there is the one in Buckingham Palace!
Look up that Price woman online Fred. I warn you, it's a horrible sight! lol.
All too easily the ladies forget that inside every gentleman is the lusty animal we control or, if you prefer, keep in reserve. Nice to see you let that lusty man out for a walk this morning my friend. A good read indeed.
Thanks so much da, you are right, inside of us are many different faces!
This is very good! Great work!
CR x
Thank you Chloe, not my usual fare, but special circumstances require special writing!
Very good write and reply to Santita write.
Thanks Goldfinch, it was fun to write!
Agree with Martina - - where has that other side of you been hiding Fred - - am watching now for a "tomato-red complexion" to show when I am around !!! Great read.
Thanks so much Fay, I guess we all have "hidden talents"! But I think if you would see me, you would go white instead of tomato red.
Imagination amazing
Thank you Aleem, being a guy I had to use my imagination to depict the female response. Have no idea if it was accurate! 🙂
I love it! Well done Fred!
Thanks so much for your kind comment, Adam!
so true on many human levels which in capturing your creation brings about the reality of a swooning one in love. great poem Fred.
Thank you Kevin, after reading Santita's great poem, I just wanted to turn it around from male to female. But it is meant as tongue in cheek! Not my usual fare!
I do not know about you, I need ice cream.
What happen in Hawaii, storm?
Well, you know, here in Hawaii all the guys only wear a small piece of cloth to cover up you know what, and all the girls run around topless wearing grass hula skirts, while having sex on the beach (the drink!!!!). 🙂
Wow Fred. What is it now. I blushed reading your poem. Revelation. I'm swooning now too, not only Orch. So hot I need an ice cube on my forehead. Congrats on your writing. Sooo good.
Thank you, I just wanted to write something to answer Santita's poem. Was not sure how it would be received! Am glad you are ok with it.
Oh yes. You did it good. You showed us that is not Antonio that can write erotically poems. You too have the animal even though you keep it leached. Thanks, it is a gift.
Thanks, I am sure you could do it much, much better than me. I had to imagine what a women might feel and was worried to be way off the truth.
You did great. Truly awesome.
I'm glad I read this! Very powerful sensual poem; Everyone (I hope) in love has experienced this and you capture it so well in your poem! Bravo!
Mahalo Christina, glad you like it. Just like you I had a lot of misgivings before actually posting it. But I have to admit that it was fun to write, and I am also so thankful to all the members here on MPS for their very nice comments.
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