Turbulence.
The great breast of sea swells tonight
and her efforts to rise are heightened
when heaving breaths inflate her skin
to swollen balloons that topped thinly
in spume burst for the sea is in labour
intent on birthing convulsive breakers.
Wild she roars with timely pitch to get
to shore, finds her efforts are checked
then sweeps out once more to tumble
somersaults over spilt foam grumbling
in turbulence and submarine pounding
as waves explode with ferocious sound.
Face bloated yet movement no slower
her bellows ignored white saline flows
down liquid cheeks as rollers navigate
beach for this sea must deliver hastily,
she needs to abort and bare all tonight
in tortuous embrace with a Neap~Tide.
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Author:
Fay Slimm. (
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I can see it, I can hear it, I can smell it, a super work Fay
Thank you for being there with the feel of that enormous energy Michael - my words could never depict the violence of Neap-Tide at times on the ocean.
Good write Fay.
Thank you dear Orchi.
Wonderfully written, so descriptive I feel like I'm there. Splendid work!
Do so hope you never got wet by the enormous spray dear Christina - the poem depicted the force that Neap Tide can have on oceanic water. Thank you my friend for your comment.
A masterfully constructed piece composed of powerful imagery! Visually, as well as message-wise, this one is a beauty, Fay!
I am so pleased the imagery excited you Louis - I meant to re-live the moments when spray came over my face and I thought of the labour the sea underwent to produce such force. Thank you for the comment dear friend.
I was by that sea Fay. Thank you for taking me there.
Glad you ;never felt the extra violent spray when those waves made their play to be first on the shore Goldie - thank you a load for the comment.
Her efforts to rise are heightened with effort of swelling. breaths inflate her skin to swollen balloons. We also see thinly super burst. With timely pitch she gives roar. Waves explode with ferocious sound and this amazes mind with turbulence and submarine pounding . Brilliant perception of sea is very well described in this poem. We get reality of sea while reading this. This is definitely an excellent drafting.
So good to see your kind comment on my poetic endeavours dear Pintu - - many thanks for the concise and refelctive view of my work.
Took me there it's all I could ask , well done
An honour that the poem took you to the scene my friend and thank you for your kind comment.
After this poem Fay, every time I will be standing at the ocean's edge, I will think of you!
Ah - you are so kind Fred and good that you enjoyed the ocean's labour when tides demand more than the usual.
Wonderful writing Fay. The ocean makes me feel very small with is grandiose mass. I love to sit at the beach and listen to it. Such an enchanting melody. Thanks for this vivid imaginary.
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