Louis Gibbs

THE UNFOLDING FIASCO

A deadly veil obscures the

Mind and vision of multitudes

Who wring their hands and obsess

Over the fleeting dramas we create in

This joint production of our evolution.

 

It places FAR too much emphasis on

THIS body and THIS particular lifetime

Out of the many thousands of lifetimes

That have been and are yet to come, as

Well as on the countless bodily forms

We all have inhabited on the journey.

 

Knowing they must not interfere, yet

Recognizing the self-defeating and

Inevitably destructive course,

It is a sad thing to observe

From the perspective of

Those more advanced

Beings who witness

This unfolding

Fiasco.

Comments10

  • BRIAN & ANGELA

    Thanks LOUIS an interesting concept to make one ponder on HOMO SAPIENS ~ so early in the morning ! The fact of the Matter is if ADAM & EVE (check my Fusion for a picture of EVE !) walked into a NUDIST COLONY ~ they would look no different from 21st Century Man & Woman ! We never evolved from Simians we were created NOT a little Higher then the Apes but in "The Likeness of GOD" ~ just a "Little lower than the ANGELS !". We are Spiritual Beings infinitely different from the rest of the Animal Kingdom ~ AMEN ! Yours BRIAN

    • Louis Gibbs

      Thanks so much for your thoughtful input, Brian. You are appreciated.

    • orchidee

      Good write L. And yet there will be this emphasis, I feel, as man does not naturally think on spiritual things. In fact, it says in the good book that man can't naturally understand spiritual things, but needs 'help from above' to do so.

      • Louis Gibbs

        And that help is available in understanding, if one seeks it. Thanks, 'O'.

        • malubotelho

          You are totally right Orch. Man need help from above to understand spirit and those that only believe in the mind will die without understanding.

        • Fay Slimm

          Enjoyed this read about our journey through life on earth - and the fiasco made of what the experience should teach us. Thanks for sharing it and for the admirable form you used.

          • Louis Gibbs

            So glad you appreciated both content and form, Fay! I do love to experiment with form, as to me it can contribute so much beauty to a poem.

          • Michael Edwards

            Fay calls it a journey through life on earth and the poem has rather eerily depicted the shape of coffin - anyway, whatever, a great write Louis.

            • Louis Gibbs

              Hadn't thought about the coffin shape until now. Whether burned or planted, we all can look forward to a container of some kind for this body. Thank you for the gracious review of the poem, Michael!

            • WL Schuett

              Very profound Louis , you've spent sometime thinking about this , well done

              • Louis Gibbs

                I've spent most of this lifetime thinking about this .... not to mention time spent in other lifetimes. Glad you appreciated it, WL! Thanks.

              • FredPeyer

                Louis, you wrote from MY heart! While I could not write it as beautiful as you, the content speaks to me. It is a fiasco, let's just hope we can make up for it in our future lifetimes, where I am sure I will meet you again!!!

                • Louis Gibbs

                  I certainly will look forward to us meeting again, Fred! Your words have touched me ... thanks so much my friend.

                • Santita

                  This is profound, Louis. When you write like this, the words tinker around in my brain, finding places to nest, & bloom into deeper thoughts, & for that I thank you. Excellent writing!

                  • Louis Gibbs

                    I tend to get lost tinkering around in your amazing, expansive brain, Santita. I\'d drop breadcrumbs, but I hate to leave a mess in such a tidy place.
                    Your comment went straight to my heart ... you are greatly appreciated, dear Santi. Thanks for making it a fav.

                    • Santita

                      & your reply went to my heart, dear Louis! Thank you for that, my friend!

                    • Thoff1

                      This is very thought provoking. I like it a lot!

                      • Louis Gibbs

                        Thank you so much, Thoff. Provoking thoughts is a worthy goal of poetry.

                      • malubotelho

                        Louis, what a great write. Leave the word there for those that are interested. If is a fiasco or not who can tell. If anyone comes back to say about it, no one believes anyway. The God's comedy. Were we created for God's to play?

                        • Louis Gibbs

                          I agree ... in this particular culture, unfortunately, not many minds are open to believing anyone who speaks of such things. "Created for Gods to play" ... or created as aspects of Creator for 'the play'? Thanks for your input , Malu!

                          • malubotelho

                            I like the way you say it. Created from God's aspects for the play. I rather think the way you put it. It is insane to think that God created us to play with us.

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                          • Christina8

                            Very interesting write. I can tell you have thought about this a lot; Thanks for sharing your views. Again, great poem.

                            • Louis Gibbs

                              I appreciate your comment a great deal, Christina, and yes ... It is a lot to think about.



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