Under the stars ✨

The party was churning inside everyone looked so phony
despite all the people together, they both felt so lonely.
Empty hearts, looking for fulfillment.
She went out and sat on a bench.
He without thinking, went following her scent. She was only sixteen, looked quite innocent. He saw her sitting alone thought he might take a chance.
The night was deep blue,
The moon was shining crescent
They both sat there, looking down,
Without any movement.
Something should happen
to eternize that moment
So they could identify
Seize the time, be present
when he looked at her,
Cupid set an event, was just an arrangement far above from the skies
a star changed her path sending light into her eyes.


  • Michael Edwards

    Sweet innocence eh what - nice one Malu

    • malubotelho

      Thanks Michael. I'm sweeten my thoughts while I get rid of a flu I've got.

    • Louis Gibbs

      A precious depiction of innocent introduction to love, Malu, and your icon picture is precious as well! Enjoyed.

      • malubotelho

        Thank you Louis. It was a bit of reality and imagination all together. Took me back to when I was sixteen and had a sweet heart ready to fall in love.

      • WL Schuett

        Sweet love , shooting stars innocent time ..well done

        • malubotelho

          Yes, thanks WL. Sweet sixteen time. Music and love in the air.

        • Santita


          I love this sweet write, dear. A tender depiction of young love. Happy to see a post from, you!


          • malubotelho

            Oh honey, I'm trying to be sweet but my head is bitter squeezed with sinuses. I've got a flu or cold or whatever and this is the fourth day. But I will be better soon. Outside the days don't help much because it is dark and rainy. It is like a lake around the house. Dark days for me. 🤧😷😪

          • rrodriguez

            Indeed a sweet poem

          • malubotelho

            Thanks Roberto.

          • Accidental Poet

            aah, to be sixteen again. Beautiful write malu. Hope you're feeling better by tomorrow. ; )

            • malubotelho

              Thanks AP. I'm feeling much better today. I believe when you catch a cold or flu it is because your sistem is weak and you need rest. It happened to me. I've been abusing of my body a bit. Thus the results.

              • Accidental Poet

                Rest up young lady, and write a poem. Very therapeutic for the immune system. ; )

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              • Goldfinch60

                super write, the innocence of young love shines in the stars.

                • malubotelho

                  Thanks Goldie. I would live it all again.

                • FredPeyer

                  A really nice poem about innocence and love, even though they might not have know yet what love is.
                  Hope you get better soon, Malu!

                  • malubotelho

                    Thanks Fred. The excitement of learning is great.

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