Chains

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  Michael Edwards October 6th, 2017 00:15

  An enigmatic message here - I do like poetry that males you think and leaves it to the reader to interpret - great work Fred.

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    FredPeyerOctober 6th, 2017 00:18

    Well you did it to me with your Latin title poem, Michael. The least I can do is return the favor!
    Thank you so much for your great comment.

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  Louis Gibbs October 6th, 2017 00:15

  Those chains could well tip the scale of buoyancy, Fred. I'd hesitate too. Nice piece!

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    FredPeyerOctober 6th, 2017 00:21

    Thanks Louis! Maybe they are metaphorical chains? Actually, I will tell you a secret: When driving home today from town, that first line 'Weighed down by the chains of his past' popped into my mind. I have a voice recorder app on my phone and recorded the line. Had nothing else. Then, once I sat down at the computer, the rest kind of followed. Now you know how the chains got to be there, but how heavy they are I won't tell! 🙂

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    Louis GibbsOctober 6th, 2017 00:34

    Yes, those metaphorical chains do get heavy. I assumed that's what you were referring to. I used to carry an old fashion hand-held recording device in the car too. Nice way to capture a thought!

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  orchidee October 6th, 2017 01:43

  A fine write Fred.

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    FredPeyerOctober 6th, 2017 10:54

    Mahalo, orchidee, for reading and commenting.

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  Goldfinch60 October 6th, 2017 02:13

  Good write, the chains must be discarded then when he jumps he will float into a wonderful life.

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    FredPeyerOctober 6th, 2017 10:55

    Thanks Goldfinch, that would be the theory. But many times the praxis is a different ballgame.

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  Christina8 October 6th, 2017 06:37

  Very good metaphorical write! Loved how you left this open to interpretation. Very very good!

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    FredPeyerOctober 6th, 2017 11:03

    Thanks Christina, for your kind comment. Figured I'm gonna make the reader to some work too! 🙂

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  WL Schuett October 6th, 2017 06:39

  Cool poem Fred and I never even thought of using the phone as a recorder

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    FredPeyerOctober 6th, 2017 11:09

    Thanks WL, I wanted to buy one of these small recorders, then got the idea to check for a phone app that would do the same thing. And there are many of them, a lot of them free. I chose one called 'voice recorder'. You record, after you stop it asks you for a title (while driving I just hit any one letter only) and save. Very simple, very effective.
    So many times, like this time with that one line 'weighed down by the chains of his past', something pops into the head at inappropriate times and with my memory is gone before I hit the next red light.

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  lasergraph October 6th, 2017 09:00

  Our fear of the unknown always hinders forward progress. Well expressed

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    FredPeyerOctober 6th, 2017 11:11

    You are so right, lasergraph! Thanks for the comment. But jumping in blindly is not always good either. I guess we need to find that balance.

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  malubotelho October 6th, 2017 13:34

  If it is literally to jump in the see, I would get a floater before jumping or would not jump at all once I cannot swimming. If is metaphoric I always jump to see what happens. I love adventures. Great writing Fred.

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    FredPeyerOctober 6th, 2017 15:48

    Thanks Malu, you are the adventurous one. Some people are held back by past experiences (chains), others just jump into their future and worry about what will happen later.

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  dusk arising October 6th, 2017 17:06

  When those chains are heavy and youve dragged them around through your lacklustre life.... along comes an opportunity..... safety of more lacklustre years or a chance of happiness and joy.... wouldn't you risk it?

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    FredPeyerOctober 6th, 2017 17:08

    Thanks da, I would go for a risky future as opposed to a predictable but safe one any time!