Goldfinch60

Hill of Life.

I came into this world and looked up,

Looked up at the Hill of Life before me,

I crawled towards it as I began the ascent.

The shallow foot hills were full of fun,

Just playing with friends,

Parents to protect me.

As age progressed the hill got steeper,

And I had problems to solve.

I solved them all,

Solved them until the hill rose up.

I climbed steadily until I reached a plain,

A plain where the love of my life was found.

Together we traversed the flat ground.

Crossing each hillock together,

Walking together into old age.

Suddenly a mountain stood before me

And I had to help my loved one

To reach the footholds,

That she could not find herself.

 

As we travelled on the clouds descended,

And darkened our way,

A storm approached us,

But we fought it and battled upwards.

We came out into the light

And travelled upwards towards it.

I looked up as we neared the top.

I saw the top and our reward

Saw the steps,

The steps on the top of My Hill of Life

That would take us,

Take us from this world

Into our eternal lives together.

Comments10

  • orchidee

    A fine write Gold. Sounds like 'Pilgrim's Progress' by John Bunyan.
    Meanwhile - my hill suddenly got much steeper. The wedding, you know!
    And - you packed your bags for Hastings? Were there hills there?!

    • Goldfinch60

      Thanks Orchi.

      I am Brighton at the moment, on my way to Hastings.

    • orchidee

      Now it's started me singing 'As Jacob with travel was weary one day' - the ladder. I must have known it from primary school, so millions of years ago!

    • FredPeyer

      A whole life in a poem, Goldfinch. You did a tremendous job here and I commend you. Love the whole poem, so poetic, but especially the last six lines. I guess because that is where I am at this time in my life.

      • Goldfinch60

        Thank you Fred, we too are near the top of the hill.

        • FredPeyer

          You know what they say, Goldfinch, up here the view is so much better!

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        • Accidental Poet

          But the pest part of this climb is you both made it together. Great write Goldie. ; )

          • Goldfinch60

            Yes we sure di, thank you AP.

          • Fay Slimm

            A tribute to courage as taught from the cradle and put into a poem worthy of reading again and again . Into my favourties with this beautiful verse of a whole lifetime of climbing dear Goldie.

            • Goldfinch60

              Thank you so much Fay, I am truly honoured.

            • WL Schuett

              Lovely , I am glad you can look on your current climb with such joy and optimism !

              • Goldfinch60

                As far as I am concerned optimism is all. Thank you WL.

              • Christina S

                A lovely poem. And one that you have traversed with your wife though most of. I think that's so beautiful!

                • Goldfinch60

                  Thank you Christina, yes I have been blessed to have her with me.

                • Louis Gibbs

                  A beautiful metaphor on your life's journey, Goldie, in which you are blessed to have shared with your mate. Not quite the path that I have traveled, but one to be admired, for sure. Well written!

                  • Goldfinch60

                    Thank you Louis, we all have different paths but I believe that we we all end up at the same place.

                  • tepo

                    having read
                    and still we laugh
                    i think i understood this better
                    im glad you made the plain
                    or the clouds footholds or mountain
                    i saw you
                    wonderful writing from a wonderful man
                    an utter pleasure
                    ta

                    • Goldfinch60

                      Thank you tepo, you are most kind, it is much appreciated.

                    • Diamond

                      A tremendous write Gold... really it's such a great analogy of life you draw here.

                      • Goldfinch60

                        Thank you Diamond, much appreciated.



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