THE LITTLE THINGS

Louis Gibbs

 

Did I miss a chance

At kindness today?

Could I have thought of

A nice thing to say?

 

Is this life about

Our structured routine,

Or how we fill in

The spaces between?

  • Author: Louis Gibbs (Offline Offline)
  • Published: October 23rd, 2017 00:00
  • Comment from author about the poem: Thought I'd try my hand at a 'formal' poem. I don't know how it would formally be categorized, but it consists of two, four-line stanzas, each with 5 syllable per line metre and with second and fourth-line rhyme.
  • Category: Reflection
  • Views: 43
  • User favorite of this poem: Fay Slimm..
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Comments7

  • Michael Edwards

    Not sure it falls into a specific category other than quatrain but has as it's so structured it has elegant form - good write Louis.

    • Louis Gibbs

      Shucks, I thought for sure it would be a 'something-or-other classic form' example. I knew you would know if it was. Oh well. I'll just stick to free-form. Thanks for your comment, Michael!

    • Goldfinch60

      I don't 'do' formal poetry but it is a good write and very meaningful.

      • Louis Gibbs

        Thanks so much, Goldie. So much for my formal poetry attempts.

      • orchidee

        I'm no expert on poetic forms. I suppose most of mine is formal, e.g. lines 1 and 2 rhyme, and lines 3 and 4 rhyme, etc. A fairly simply layout, otherwise too complicated and it would take hours to write!
        Stanza 2 - Erm, yes! Both I think.

        • Louis Gibbs

          Thank you so much for your thoughts, 'O'. Both ... neither? I guess we'll find out.

        • WL Schuett

          Very good Louis, your formal poem worked well did you enjoy writing it as much as a free formed poem ?

          • Louis Gibbs

            Can't say that I did, WL. To me, following a strict framework interrupts the muse too much. I prefer a free-form style. Thanks for your comment and inquiry!

          • lasergraph

            A good write, as we ponder the structures of life.

            • Louis Gibbs

              Much to ponder, indeed, LG! Thanks for your comment.

            • Fay Slimm.

              Whatever the form this reads so appealingly with a super last line Louis - a gem of poem and must be put in my favourites.

              • Louis Gibbs

                Oh, thank you so much, Fay, both for your comment and for making it a fav! I appreciate you.

              • Laura🌻

                My structured routine has passed.
                Now it’s all about how I fill
                the spaces between!
                I have to make the most of it!

                Well written and thought provoking!
                Definitely a favorite!
                ~Laura~


                • Louis Gibbs

                  Thank you so much for your thoughts on my poem, and for making it a fav, Laura. Good luck with filling the spaces!



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