Did I miss a chance
At kindness today?
Could I have thought of
A nice thing to say?
Is this life about
Our structured routine,
Or how we fill in
The spaces between?
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Author:
Louis Gibbs (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Thought I'd try my hand at a 'formal' poem. I don't know how it would formally be categorized, but it consists of two, four-line stanzas, each with 5 syllable per line metre and with second and fourth-line rhyme.
- Category: Reflection
- Views: 43
- Users favorite of this poem: Fay Slimm.
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Comments7
Not sure it falls into a specific category other than quatrain but has as it's so structured it has elegant form - good write Louis.
Shucks, I thought for sure it would be a 'something-or-other classic form' example. I knew you would know if it was. Oh well. I'll just stick to free-form. Thanks for your comment, Michael!
I don't 'do' formal poetry but it is a good write and very meaningful.
Thanks so much, Goldie. So much for my formal poetry attempts.
I'm no expert on poetic forms. I suppose most of mine is formal, e.g. lines 1 and 2 rhyme, and lines 3 and 4 rhyme, etc. A fairly simply layout, otherwise too complicated and it would take hours to write!
Stanza 2 - Erm, yes! Both I think.
Thank you so much for your thoughts, 'O'. Both ... neither? I guess we'll find out.
Very good Louis, your formal poem worked well did you enjoy writing it as much as a free formed poem ?
Can't say that I did, WL. To me, following a strict framework interrupts the muse too much. I prefer a free-form style. Thanks for your comment and inquiry!
A good write, as we ponder the structures of life.
Much to ponder, indeed, LG! Thanks for your comment.
Whatever the form this reads so appealingly with a super last line Louis - a gem of poem and must be put in my favourites.
Oh, thank you so much, Fay, both for your comment and for making it a fav! I appreciate you.
My structured routine has passed.
Now it’s all about how I fill
the spaces between!
I have to make the most of it!
Well written and thought provoking!
Definitely a favorite!
~Laura~
Thank you so much for your thoughts on my poem, and for making it a fav, Laura. Good luck with filling the spaces!
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