Quiet, so quiet
Stillness impregnating the land
Few birds counted on one hand
Quiet, so quiet
Waiting with heightened perception
After the mayhem and destruction
Quiet, so quiet
Light winds blowing into our fear
Knowing much more danger is near
Quiet, so quiet
Barely visible in the distance
The cloud wall turns with persistence
Quiet, so quiet
Soon the quiet and peace will be gone
We will again become nature’s pawn
Roaring, roaring
Winds getting stronger bringing the rain
No more respite in the eye of the hurricane
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Author:
Alfred Peyer (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: October 25th, 2017 00:18
- Category: Nature
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This paints the picture so well - I can feel the impending - Well writ Fred.
Thanks a lot Michael. I was never inside the eye of a hurricane, but from reading about it, imagined how it would feel like. Being pounded by wind and rain, then suddenly everything goes quiet and you wait, knowing that the pounding will start again. Nature is incredible!
Very good write with great imagery.
Thanks so much, Goldfinch! One cannot fight nature, just endure it and go with the flow.
Good write Fred.
Thanks so much, Orchidee, for reading and commenting!
a gorgeous poem with your words and winds getting stronger, you hold you weight here, Fred, love your work.
Thanks so much, Kevin! I do appreciate your kind comment.
We certainly are nature’s pawn! My favorite line in this powerful write! Can painfully feel that hurricane coming! Nicely done Fred!
Thank you Laura, there are events in nature where we can only try to survive. The two events that would devastate our island would be a hurricane or a tsunami.
Created a wonderful picture in my mind, keep it up!
Thank you poetboy! I am really glad my words could paint that mind picture!
Great poem! love the repetitiveness really paints a picture!
Mahalo Shannon! Thank you so much for reading and commenting. I do appreciate it.
Great poem Fred love the structure and the anticipation of the impending storm
Thank you WL, I did try a different structure. Thanks for commenting on it!
A timely tribute to nature's power after this terribly destructive hurricane season, Fred! I like the clever way the lead line kept shifting to the right, drawing us in. Nice touch!
Thank you Louis, this site is teaching me a lot, including experimenting with different structures.
Me too!
The quiet took my breath away. Hope everything is fine in Hawaii.
Thanks for reading, M&M! Oh yes, the usual sunshine mixed with rain, but no storms! 🙂 Keeping my fingers crossed.
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