MEN OVER 30 AVOID MIRRORS ~ BECAUSE THEY SEE
THEIR DAD GRINNING BACK AT THEM ~ HORROR !
EVERYDAY we grow older
HAIR turns greyer
LEGS refuse run anymore
EYES grow dimmer and dimmer
LUNGS breath wheezilly
HEART beats arhythmically
BRAIN becomes fuddled
MEMORY is lost bit-by-bit
You are HOUSE bound
You cannot live ALONE
ALONE live cannot you
Bound HOUSE are you
Bit-by-bit lost is memory
Fuddled becomes BRAIN
Arhythmically beats HEART
Wheezilly breath LUNGS
Dimmer & dimmer grow EYES
Refuse LEGS run anymore
Greyer turns HAIR
Older grow we EVERYDAY !
Thanks for visiting ~ Comments welcome ~ Love BRIAN
In a REVERSE & REVAMP Poem NOT only is each of
the ten lines written in reverse order (10 9 8 etc) but
each line is also reversed. The miracle is that the .......
Reversed and Revamped Poem still makes sense !
Why not try one it's more difficult than it looks ~ BRIAN !
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BRIANSODES (Pseudonym) (
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- Comment from author about the poem: However hard we try we cannot REVERSE or REVAMP the Ageing Process ! REAL MEN don't even try we just grow older disgracefully ! Fortunately my DAD is still quite a handsome MAN ~ so when he smiles back at me from my shaving mirror I don't get too depressed ! There is a lot we can do to look and keep YOUNGER ~ but it is mainly cosmetic ! My Mantra is "Be your AGE ~ But look your BEST !" The majority of my Students are younger than me (34) so I need to make an effort each morning ! Thanks for reading comments welcome ~ A good quality of LIFE & LOVE to ALL ~ BRIAN XOX
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Interesting structure, and cannot argue with your points. Am getting there myself.
Thanks FRED ~ Pleased you liked it ~ Sorry you related to it ! I am always experimenting with new Poetic Structures ! A Reverse & Revamp Poem ~ sentence structure ~ needs to be thought through ! Yours BRIAN
Excellent point! I really enjoyed this one. I may give this a whirl sometime, seems fun!
~SS
Thanks SS ~ All Poetic Structures are a challenge ~ BUT as you say also FUN. Reverse & Revamp Poems require linguistic dexterity ~ if the Reverse Poem hopes to make sense ! They read as on older form of English as in "Older grow we everyday" etc ! Yours BRIAN
Interesting structure Brian! Very neat poem. I think the same goes with mirrors and ladies! lol kidding. Sisterly hugs-Christina
Thanks for your encouragement CHRIS ! I made a comment about Men & Mirrors ~ but I guess you catch glimpses of your MOM ! She must have been a very beautiful Woman ! Yours as always ~ Brotherly Hugs BRIAN !
Thank you for that kind compliment!
It is the one thing we cannot stop but I am going to have a good try at enjoying all the life I have left.
Just one thing that always pleases me though is that although I have a few grey hairs I have fewer than my YOUNGER brother.
TEMPUS FUGIT Andy and us with it ~ We can attempt to look Younger but ultimately we are betrayed by our Hatched ~ Matched ~ Dispatched Certificates ! In the 21st C UK Men seem as concerned with hiding their Chronological Age as our sisters ! Despite our claims to altruism we are (secretly) smug at our School Peer Group Reunion when we look (and act) YOUNGER than our PEERS !
It is such a difficult structure to follow and you did it. "growing older", no one could avoid.
Thanks M & M ~ Yes it is difficult ~ but satisfying when it works OK although the language structure in Stanza 2 is a little antiquated ~ BUT it still makes sense. Next time I post one (A Reverse & Revamp Poem) I will compose it in manuscript and then post it with Stanza 2 FIRST ! Thanks BRIAN
A fine write Brian. I shall sing me hymn-poems backwards AND forwards. oh no! Meoowwwoo! I've started. lol.
Thanks STEVE some modern SGNOS POP sound much better backwards ! Thanks for all your DROLL COMMENTS ~ BRIAN
That young heart there (yours!) ain't beating non-rhythmically. You must be positively young, cos I'm millions of years old! lol
GRACIA CARA MIA ~ It is not as easy as I make it look ~ but I like a WORDSSMITH challenge ! I always like to make you smile ! Besos y Abrazos Picantes ~ BRIAN Tu Primo Amigo en MPS !
Caro Amico Brian,
Growing older is not easy...
just ask my mom! It’s fine
if there are no aches or pains!
All we pray and wish for is
a good quality of life!
Liked the structure!
Very interesting!
Saluti e abbracci...
~Laura~
GRAZIE LAURA
I agree ~ as we mature the QUALITY of our everyday LIFE is more important than the QUANTITY. If we are CHRISTIANS we have assurance of Eternal Life in Heaven after our demise which is great comfort for the elderly ! ABBRACCI MOLTI per TU ~ BRIAN ~ @@@@@@@
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