Night Sky

FredPeyer

Void filled star spangled night sky

Seducing lovelorn red necks

Imprinting visions of patriotic grandeur

 

Void filled star spangled night sky

Mirroring in lover’s eyes

Promising everlasting love

 

Void filled star spangled night sky

Rescuing the souls of the lonely

Dim light brightening their future

 

Void filled star spangled night sky

Guiding light for the lost

Returning them back to the path

 

Void filled star spangled night sky

There for all to see

But received only by the few

Comments13

  • orchidee

    An eloquent and fine write Fred.

    • FredPeyer

      Thanks so much, orchidee, not as eloquent as yours, but getting there!

    • Michael Edwards

      A grand write Fred

      • FredPeyer

        Thank you! Coming from a master, this is high praise, indeed! 🙂

      • Accidental Poet

        By inspired poets such as you and I. This write is as beautiful as the night sky. One of my most favorite past times is star gazing. Thanks for posting Fred.

        • FredPeyer

          Thank you AP, where I live, there are no street lights and very little other light sources, so if is a cloud-less night, the sky is just incredible!

          • Accidental Poet

            You must be able to see most of the Milky Way. I get a little more light pollution where I am.

          • kevin browne

            a fine touch of writing, FredPeyer.

            • FredPeyer

              Thanks so much, Kevin! I try, I try.....

            • Goldfinch60

              Very good and very true Fred, so few see.

              • FredPeyer

                Thanks Goldfinch. Too many people are looking down at their feet instead of up!

              • Fay Slimm.

                Night sky so appealingly described in this perceptive write Fred - true it's majesty is "there for all to see - but received only by the few"

                • FredPeyer

                  Thank you Fay! Sometimes we do not see the forest because of the trees!

                • Tony36

                  Great write

                  • FredPeyer

                    Thanks so much Tony! I appreciate you reading and commenting!

                    • Tony36

                      Welcome

                    • Louis Gibbs

                      I'm afraid I'm one of the few who do not see the "Star spangled night sky". Damn night-blindness! But hey, I'm blessed to have the vision I have!
                      I like the lead-in lines of each phrase repeating as the poem progresses. Nice effect, good write, Fred!

                      • FredPeyer

                        Thanks so much, Louis! I am so sorry about your night-blindness. You don't see anything at night? How about during the day? My sister has MS and her sight is slowly going bad to a point where she has to use a magnifying glass to read the newspaper.

                        • Louis Gibbs

                          My day vision is fine. My eyes just don't dark-adapt at all. I see but a very few of the brightest stars. Thanks for asking, and have a wonderful Thanksgiving, Fred!

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                        • myself and me

                          Reading your poem under the night sky, fell asleep with star sparkle above.

                          • FredPeyer

                            ...and stars in your eyes!!! Thank you m&m for a very nice comment!

                          • rrodriguez

                            Awesome writee Fred.

                            • FredPeyer

                              Thanks so much, RR!

                            • poetboy5454

                              A very beautiful write with brilliant imagery and message, nice one Fred!

                              • FredPeyer

                                Thanks so much, poetboy, for reading and commenting!

                              • WL Schuett

                                Always wanted to live in a dark sky area where you can see the Milky Way everyday I have a pretty dark sky where I live but not dark enough ! Like your poem

                                • FredPeyer

                                  Thanks WL! I love to watch that night sky and am lucky to be able to on most days.

                                • skyebellasario

                                  Beautiful write Fred! You captured the night sky wonderfully

                                  • FredPeyer

                                    Thanks skye, and it goes so well with your name!

                                    • skyebellasario

                                      Haha it does, I didn't even notice!



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