Tried something new.
Every third line rhymes with the same sound,
all throughout the poem, but each word
has to be different.
Went to the shack
Our local watering hole
Looking for a fight
Hoping some locals
Would make fun of me
Just because I’m white
Sat at the bar
Ordered a beer
Sitting on my right
Not a bad looking girl
Nursing something green
Probably was there all night
Sitting on my left
Talking to his drink
A guy of average height
Thought he looked
Just a little drunk
When he ordered another Sprite
Nobody even looked at me
No wonder with the light
In the bar not being very bright
I tried to stir up trouble
Yelling at a complete stranger
“Why don’t you fly a kite!”
He turned around
Looked hard at me
Giving me quite the fright
I offered him
Some free drink
And everything was allright
The girl behind the bar
Décolleté and mini skirt
She was quite a sight
Tried to pick her up
The timing was really bad
She was off only past midnight
So I went back home
Couldn’t sleep
Went to have a bite
Finally in bed
Still couldn’t sleep
Pulled the covers real tight
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Author:
Alfred Peyer (Pseudonym) (
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Comments8
Good write Fred. Yes, I may reel off some of my poems, in AABB rhyming.
But this takes more thought, having to return to previous lines to make them rhyme.
Thanks orchie, what I really like about this site is that we can go ahead and put out some 'weird' or 'strange' work without getting laughed out of town!
And you are right, I kept on going forward and backwards when writing it.
Good write, I know it is quite a feat to do things this way, it worked well.
Thanks Goldie! It is fun to experiment. Sometimes it works, sometimes it doesn't, but at least we are writing!
Really clever Fred! And you told a story! Compact and neat!
Thanks Lorna, somehow all that rhyming must make some sense too!
Liked it very much
Thanks a lot Tony, both for reading and commenting!
Welcome
Gives it a great lilt and works so well and the story line carries you along.
Thanks Michael! Like that expression 'lilt'. I think I might use it one day!! 🙂
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Interesting rhyme scheme! I was awfully intrigued! Nice method of storytelling, and great poem.
Thanks so much Aislinn! What a nice comment!
This was a great poem that worked out well with your new rhyme scheme! Great job! I enjoyed the read!
Thanks Christina, it is fun to try new things once in a while! Even an old dog can learn new tricks!
sounds and reads fab, Fred, well worth the effort so you must be pleased. I know I am. thank you.
Thanks so much Kevin! Happy you are pleased. I do appreciate your comments, friend!
and I appreciate your pen, Fred, don't allow it to run dry!
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