RISING PAIN
In murmerous ripples tales were told
perceived by those who lived along
remote responsive shores;
though not disposed to obvious truths
they stirred her rising pain.
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Author:
Michael Edwards (
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May that pain soon be eased
With truths that calm her soul
Lets hope so Andy.
A fine write and pic M.
Cheers Orchi
Wow! Thatās a powerful message, Michael, via words and visual! Has to be read more than once...for sure!
~Laura~
I do like short works - you can pack a real punch in them which can be lost in a longer piece. Thanks for your kind words Laura.
We are so deep inside someone here!
Very deep - is there a way out?
Meanwhile - I thought this would be about my singing. That's a rising pain (in the neck!) to people. heehee.
At least it's rising and not stuck in the a**e !!
A very provocative write Michael. Thanks for sharing.
Thank you AP.
How often we pick up the signals missed by those involved who may be blinded by their love and devotion. Hope i read this convoluted tale correctly. Very subtle.
I love writing these short pieces because, as I said above, they can pack a punch but, more than that, they tend to be very enigmatic - almost abstract. It means a lot that you have interpreted as you have - I'm sure it could be interpreted in other ways but that's the beauty of short verse. Thanks so much for looking in and taking the time to comment - actually I think your interpretation is pretty accurate but who knows?
Don't believe everything you hear, it might pain you.....as perceived by the one who lives along a remote, but not so responsive shore.
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