I've watched the world parading by
Through ramparts built around me
I only let the drawbridge down
When I am sure of safety
I smile and wave concealed above
Though wary of your presence
I would not wish you go away
But will not grant you access
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Author:
Lorna (
Offline) - Published: February 26th, 2018 04:17
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- Users favorite of this poem: Michael Edwards, Jamie, Accidental Poet.
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Comments9
Brilliant - even better with the second verse - this is a real gem - big thanks for posting it here.
You're the best - thank you Michael...........
Lorna, this is a great poem. So many people are exactly like that and you expressed it very eloquently. A beautiful poem about the human condition, where each stanza could actually stand on its own, but as Michael said, are much better together.
Thank you Fred - this site makes it easier to let the drawbridge down! lol.......
Nicely penned Lorna, so much said in such a short piece. Nice to let the 'drawbridge down' and open up in when it feels comfortable
Michael 🙂
Softly softly catchee monkee............
Not easy trusting people these days Lorna, but I agree it's easier here at MPS. I think that's because here at MPS we're all poets with respect for each other. Great write Lorna.
Yes...... nice people!
I am not sure the ramparts will keep us safe, but they sure keep others away. Wonderful piece to read.
Thanks MM
Very good write.
Ta!
A stunning verse of mysterious allure dear Lorna. - first class writing.
This seemed to resonate with people - I'm surprised at the attention it got. Thanks Fay
Biding ones time until the feeling is right..... some people would call it 'romancing an idea' ..... others 'once bitten, twice shy'.
I'd call it succinct and very good.
Thanks Dusk - appreciated........
Wow ....excellent!
Mottakeenur! Thank you very much.............
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