No Time......
As each ebbing tide seaward out-pours
to leave its remembrance
on sand's empty spaces,
as the breakers slip back to clasp shores
before again parting
my thoughts turn to gone embraces.
As life's rollers drag me, heedlessly
back thru' tears unforeseen
to where no dry eye dwells,
on-moving tides bring me no release
from mournful regret
for we had no time for any farewells.
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Fay Slimm. (
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What heartbreak Fay! Beautiful and soulful...........
Based on experience this was a difficult piece to write Lorna - - thank you for the read and comment.
I know how hard goodbyes are and I feel deeply for you.
Bittersweet
Your one word summed up the whole experience well and thanks for commenting R.J.
I’m reading this beautiful but sad write with a heavy-heart, my dear Fay! The imagery is remarkable! It conveys the message of the agonizing pain of missing a loved one. It can be so unbearable at times!
~Laura~
Thank you dear Laura reading the verse and for seeing through the imagery used - not being able to have time for farewells brings its own anguish which I tried to portray.
You portrayed it very well, my dear Fay!
Super structure and use of simile/metaphor
My thanks to you Michael for your supportive comments on tricky subjects I try to verse.
brilliant work! ww
Ah - thank you for the visit and read - greatly appreciated Willy.
A sensitive write Fay.
Meanwhile - some wish there was no time to hear me sing. But oh, there's always time for that, unfortunately! lol.
A write on a subject like this has to be dealt with in a sensitive style and thanks for noticing that Orchi.
Thanks for caring & sharing FAY ! I can empathise ~ even in my short life I remember situations where a GOOD BYE was not possible and it still hurts. BUT ~ like you ~ I have many sweet Memories of those who have been "Called Home" ~ sometimes tragically. The memories have softened my loss and th lack of opportunity to say A REAL GOOD BYE ! Gone but never forgotten ! Yours Friend as always ~ BRIAN
Wow.. As it all sank in I began well up, thank your sharing a beautifully hard write. You are wonderful soul of light
Ooooh bless you dear Dan -- just going to shut down for the night and in comes this lovely comment - - I am must humbled by your tender assessment of my mind at work - - and thank you for the visit and read of a piece which was a challenge to write.
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