Comments received on poems by Elizabeth Locorriere
Purple Lake
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Well AMELIA I did promise ! I love Poetry that is Raw & Real ~ straight from you loving HEART and not your cool HEAD ! I love this poem and the Invitation ! Purple is my fave colour ~ i\'m in purple & grey today ! UV has much more energy than IR (infrared) and Purple Lakes ~ Mountains ~ Skies are the choice of SF and Royalty and Spirituality ~ POWERFUL ! V1. Paints an awesome (as in your visual) picture of an ethereal & eternal Planet V2. Deep Purple light and a Journey V3. Plea for a Tryst and a Promise of Love ! V4. Rejection of Fantasy (purple) cri de coeur for PINK or any colour ! Your only desire is to Have Him at the Lake ! V5. Plea for a Meeting ~ or a Betrothal ~ V6. Desire to be brighter than PINTEREST (BRIGHTER ? OMG it\'s my fave site !) V6. Purple Wire (or should that be WINE ?) Letter but not speech ~ rejection ? V7. I love your FLEXIBILITY (for love) BUT is it enough ? In this dynamic poem you pen a Perfect story of Purple but Unrequited love ! Thanks for sharing ~ excellent ~ Poetic Hugs for a new & exciting Poet ~ Yours Brian
September 12th, 2017 11:34
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Well AMELIA I did promise ! I love Poetry that is Raw & Real ~ straight from you loving HEART and not your cool HEAD ! I love this poem and the Invitation ! Purple is my fave colour ~ i\'m in purple & grey today ! UV has much more energy than IR (infrared) and Purple Lakes ~ Mountains ~ Skies are the choice of SF and Royalty and Spirituality ~ POWERFUL ! V1. Paints an awesome (as in your visual) picture of an ethereal & eternal Planet V2. Deep Purple light and a Journey V3. Plea for a Tryst and a Promise of Love ! V4. Rejection of Fantasy (purple) cri de coeur for PINK or any colour ! Your only desire is to Have Him at the Lake ! V5. Plea for a Meeting ~ or a Betrothal ~ V6. Desire to be brighter than PINTEREST (BRIGHTER ? OMG it\'s my fave site !) V6. Purple Wire (or should that be WINE ?) Letter but not speech ~ rejection ? V7. I love your FLEXIBILITY (for love) BUT is it enough ? In this dynamic poem you pen a Perfect story of Purple but Unrequited love ! Thanks for sharing ~ excellent ~ Poetic Hugs for a new & exciting Poet ~ Yours Brian
September 12th, 2017 11:34
Time
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Welcome EMILA ~ Thnaks for your first Poem which is excellent ! When I comment on a Poem ~ I never mention SPELLING (UK & American is different any way !) or GRAMMAR ~ Modern Poetry follows neither ! What I do comment on is the Shape of the Poem and its SUBJECT. Both yours are excellent ! TIME (as you point out) is elusive and for LADIES each moment is a precious jewel and for MEN just passing ~although it does dominate SPORT ! You repeat the MANTRA \"I fear time\" and your reasons are well stated in Verse 1. You want \"Making Love\" to slow down and for every beautiful thing to last forever ~ Quickies are anathema ! V2. In my experience all ladies are aware of \"The Ticking (Biological) Clock ~ for men time is just a convenient inconvenience ! I have never worn a watch my World (A College) is saturated with CLOCKS ! V3. The Men\'s perspective ~ we live in a very active World where 5 minutes Foreplay is adequate ~ whereas my GF Angela ~ prefers an hour (as do all ladies !). love you final line it sum up the TIME difference beween YIN & YANG ! On more than one occasion ANGELA has said to ME \"Brian You look at TIME differently from Me\" so i can empathise ! Thanks for caring & sharing ~ more please ~ BRIAN (UK) Please check my poems ~ Thanks B.
September 12th, 2017 06:28
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Welcome EMILA ~ Thnaks for your first Poem which is excellent ! When I comment on a Poem ~ I never mention SPELLING (UK & American is different any way !) or GRAMMAR ~ Modern Poetry follows neither ! What I do comment on is the Shape of the Poem and its SUBJECT. Both yours are excellent ! TIME (as you point out) is elusive and for LADIES each moment is a precious jewel and for MEN just passing ~although it does dominate SPORT ! You repeat the MANTRA \"I fear time\" and your reasons are well stated in Verse 1. You want \"Making Love\" to slow down and for every beautiful thing to last forever ~ Quickies are anathema ! V2. In my experience all ladies are aware of \"The Ticking (Biological) Clock ~ for men time is just a convenient inconvenience ! I have never worn a watch my World (A College) is saturated with CLOCKS ! V3. The Men\'s perspective ~ we live in a very active World where 5 minutes Foreplay is adequate ~ whereas my GF Angela ~ prefers an hour (as do all ladies !). love you final line it sum up the TIME difference beween YIN & YANG ! On more than one occasion ANGELA has said to ME \"Brian You look at TIME differently from Me\" so i can empathise ! Thanks for caring & sharing ~ more please ~ BRIAN (UK) Please check my poems ~ Thanks B.
September 12th, 2017 06:28
Time
Gary Edward Geraci said:
Your poem\'s final line sums up, quite classically, the paradigm of the \"non-committed\" lover: free spirited and empty of feelings for another in a short period of \"Time\". This is not the design of true love that we were created for; that you or me were created for. We deserve much better: a nobler and permanent love where with the passing of time, there are no fears and love grows stronger. Your poem is honest and follows this out to its logical conclusion. Thank you for your honesty.
September 11th, 2017 23:04
Gary Edward Geraci said:
Your poem\'s final line sums up, quite classically, the paradigm of the \"non-committed\" lover: free spirited and empty of feelings for another in a short period of \"Time\". This is not the design of true love that we were created for; that you or me were created for. We deserve much better: a nobler and permanent love where with the passing of time, there are no fears and love grows stronger. Your poem is honest and follows this out to its logical conclusion. Thank you for your honesty.
September 11th, 2017 23:04
Time
Mugsdaddy said:
Amazing, sureal, Beautiful. You truly conveyed just what a treasure every single moment is.
Mugsdaddy
September 11th, 2017 19:56
Mugsdaddy said:
Amazing, sureal, Beautiful. You truly conveyed just what a treasure every single moment is.
Mugsdaddy
September 11th, 2017 19:56
