Comments received on poems by rebeccasr5
Can\'t
dusk arising said:
These screens are like a drug we\'re hooked on aren\'t they. Depriving each of us from the other. Somehow we were more a part of each others life before screens robbed people away from us.
May 10th, 2021 15:13
dusk arising said:
These screens are like a drug we\'re hooked on aren\'t they. Depriving each of us from the other. Somehow we were more a part of each others life before screens robbed people away from us.
May 10th, 2021 15:13
Can\'t
Trenz Pruca said:
I know the feeling. A good image. And not of a screen no less.
May 10th, 2021 11:51
Trenz Pruca said:
I know the feeling. A good image. And not of a screen no less.
May 10th, 2021 11:51
Untitled II
Poetic Dan said:
I hope it gets better, it reminded me of the journey to live myself more.
Much peace and respect
Thank you for sharing this
June 11th, 2019 02:36
Poetic Dan said:
I hope it gets better, it reminded me of the journey to live myself more.
Much peace and respect
Thank you for sharing this
June 11th, 2019 02:36
Without you
Neville said:
Say it like it is and stay both proud and true.... very much enjoyed on this side of the Pond.....
Neville
June 7th, 2019 23:27
Neville said:
Say it like it is and stay both proud and true.... very much enjoyed on this side of the Pond.....
Neville
June 7th, 2019 23:27
Untitled I
Andrew Charles Forrest said:
Great honest piece I hope it helped
Be the change
June 1st, 2019 06:05
Andrew Charles Forrest said:
Great honest piece I hope it helped
Be the change
June 1st, 2019 06:05
Halfway
Mark Maginn said:
I really like this truncated message of never reaching \"all the way.\"
The only change I might consider is this: Halfway. That\'s what I keep feeling no matter how hard I try
That\'s how far I can reach
and I was tired
I crawled
I clawed
and all I reached...halffway.
I suggest the reduced language to create the sense of absence in the reader, the absence of just \"halfway.\"
Nice work with lots of possibilities you can explore.
April 1st, 2019 16:52
Mark Maginn said:
I really like this truncated message of never reaching \"all the way.\"
The only change I might consider is this: Halfway. That\'s what I keep feeling no matter how hard I try
That\'s how far I can reach
and I was tired
I crawled
I clawed
and all I reached...halffway.
I suggest the reduced language to create the sense of absence in the reader, the absence of just \"halfway.\"
Nice work with lots of possibilities you can explore.
April 1st, 2019 16:52
Where do we start
Mark Maginn said:
If I don\'t remember your touch
how can I capture happy?
I start here as it seems to me that not remembering an important person\'s touch is simply devastating. Should \"happy\" precede the loss of the memory of this much needed touch?
I suppose the answer lies in what unconscious thread you found in the re-write.
Good work, keep at it, this poem, I suspect, wants to open up into a deadening experience that just might be universal. Nice start!
April 1st, 2019 16:42
Mark Maginn said:
If I don\'t remember your touch
how can I capture happy?
I start here as it seems to me that not remembering an important person\'s touch is simply devastating. Should \"happy\" precede the loss of the memory of this much needed touch?
I suppose the answer lies in what unconscious thread you found in the re-write.
Good work, keep at it, this poem, I suspect, wants to open up into a deadening experience that just might be universal. Nice start!
April 1st, 2019 16:42
Invisible
Poetic Dan said:
Wow. This hit me hard! Well expressed with a killer of an end.
If these feelings are yours, know even a little light can remain in the gloom. Listening to the words from you, thank you for sharing this!
March 30th, 2019 04:46
Poetic Dan said:
Wow. This hit me hard! Well expressed with a killer of an end.
If these feelings are yours, know even a little light can remain in the gloom. Listening to the words from you, thank you for sharing this!
March 30th, 2019 04:46
Ashes
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
Thanks for another Poem REBECCA its all Greek to US !
When we look back @ the past it is in effect ~ All Ashes ~ of boats that have already been burnt ! Angela & I try ~ NOT to live in the shadows of a past life ~ We have to come to terms with the present ~ even though it is clouded by the past ~ we do have to clear our minds !
Every Blessing for the Future
BRIAN & ANGELA 🧡🧡
ANGELA is my Fiancee ~ OK
February 25th, 2019 17:12
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
Thanks for another Poem REBECCA its all Greek to US !
When we look back @ the past it is in effect ~ All Ashes ~ of boats that have already been burnt ! Angela & I try ~ NOT to live in the shadows of a past life ~ We have to come to terms with the present ~ even though it is clouded by the past ~ we do have to clear our minds !
Every Blessing for the Future
BRIAN & ANGELA 🧡🧡
ANGELA is my Fiancee ~ OK
February 25th, 2019 17:12
Just for one second
Poetic Dan said:
Great writing I could feel the tenderness, ending as if I had it!
Very precious we all are, thank you
February 24th, 2019 18:09
Poetic Dan said:
Great writing I could feel the tenderness, ending as if I had it!
Very precious we all are, thank you
February 24th, 2019 18:09
Just for one second
dusk arising said:
All hearts are fragile. Needy of tender loving care.... good luck.
February 24th, 2019 17:53
dusk arising said:
All hearts are fragile. Needy of tender loving care.... good luck.
February 24th, 2019 17:53
I trusted you
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
WELCOME REBECCA ~ Fortunately I did GREEK at School ~ so I fully understand the circumstances of your POEM !
It happens ~ but in a God Fearing Society it should NOT ~ Especially an older Man stealing the innocence of a Child who trusted Him ! The lowest form of depravity ~ it makes one ashamed to be a MAN !
Your hurt is echoed in the fact that you transliterated this to GREEK before you published it ! I trust you found sharing it cathartic. Your last two lines are very poignant.
Thinking of you ~
Blessings BRIAN & ANGELA.
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February 22nd, 2019 19:47
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
WELCOME REBECCA ~ Fortunately I did GREEK at School ~ so I fully understand the circumstances of your POEM !
It happens ~ but in a God Fearing Society it should NOT ~ Especially an older Man stealing the innocence of a Child who trusted Him ! The lowest form of depravity ~ it makes one ashamed to be a MAN !
Your hurt is echoed in the fact that you transliterated this to GREEK before you published it ! I trust you found sharing it cathartic. Your last two lines are very poignant.
Thinking of you ~
Blessings BRIAN & ANGELA.
Please check our site.
February 22nd, 2019 19:47
