Comments received on poems by smileeshellyy



JD
Goldfinch60 said:

Powerful write, may that time be erased as your life goes on into your better world.

September 5th, 2020 00:09

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L. B. Mek said:

beautiful in its artistic ambition while exploding with raw untameable emotion from line to line,
I like how, what seemed like two voices eventually merged into a consensus of the same awareness,
\'In a different world I would be a lion.
In a perfect world we would all be antelope.
In my world it is always dusk.
Never sunny, never pitch black.\'

August 18th, 2020 03:02

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Seek said:

A piece of work that does not fail to move. May that rain from the pain disappear and let in much needed light in a soul that richly deserves it.

August 18th, 2020 01:32

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Goldfinch60 said:

A wonderful emotive write, you will always wake up in your life as your love for your children will keep you alive.
Welcome to MPS.

Andy

August 18th, 2020 00:32

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ANGELA & BRIAN said:

HI SHELLY - ANGELA HERE - I share this site with my Husband of 4 months - Welcome to MPS - thanks for your first Poem ! I trust it is NOT autobiographical as it would belie both your picture & your name ! It is written in a challenging style enabling us to *Read between the lines !* which are the lines in BOLD. The lines (not in BOLD) presnt a picture of how it might have been ? Loved every line - a very poignant poem ! It does not ring a bell with Brian & I we are still on our HONEYMOON ! More poems please - please visit our SITE - Thanks A & B

Love - Joy & Peace
Angela & Brian 💛💛💛

August 17th, 2020 15:04

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dusk arising said:

Dark, sad and mysterious with a lot of depth. Easy to relate to. Good stuff!
Welcome to MPS a friendly place to let it all pour out.
This place workd best if we comment upon each others pieces and gradually we get to know a little about other poets and their styles.
Please feel free to rip into any of my pieces.

August 17th, 2020 14:25