Comments received on poems by Dasim
Sunday
Paul Bell said:
One cup of coffee and the world becomes a better place.
Today will go to return tomorrow, get the kettle on.
October 21st, 2021 12:02
Paul Bell said:
One cup of coffee and the world becomes a better place.
Today will go to return tomorrow, get the kettle on.
October 21st, 2021 12:02
Ashes
L. B. Mek said:
but still, living-on in these words
tasked with capturing, a Life
impactful enough: whilst Alive
to be deserving of an epitaph...
thanks for sharing
October 21st, 2021 04:49
L. B. Mek said:
but still, living-on in these words
tasked with capturing, a Life
impactful enough: whilst Alive
to be deserving of an epitaph...
thanks for sharing
October 21st, 2021 04:49
Corner Friend.
L. B. Mek said:
There\'s a unique feel to your tone and flow
and there\'s both a surrealist, scenic depiction and a more sincere, introspective wording, of
making a connection, or finding a belonging to believe-in...
anyway, as you can tell I found this a really interesting read, and I thank you for choosing to share
September 24th, 2021 04:36
L. B. Mek said:
There\'s a unique feel to your tone and flow
and there\'s both a surrealist, scenic depiction and a more sincere, introspective wording, of
making a connection, or finding a belonging to believe-in...
anyway, as you can tell I found this a really interesting read, and I thank you for choosing to share
September 24th, 2021 04:36
Corner Friend.
rebmasters said:
A beautiful, delicate poem that\'s full of grace. I love the last 4 lines ❤️
September 24th, 2021 03:34
rebmasters said:
A beautiful, delicate poem that\'s full of grace. I love the last 4 lines ❤️
September 24th, 2021 03:34
Scared Eyes
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
A creatively artistically expressed unique poem on love.
Fickle young premarital love can vanish easily. Kudos!!!
Plz do read and comment my newest poem too.
May 8th, 2021 03:23
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
A creatively artistically expressed unique poem on love.
Fickle young premarital love can vanish easily. Kudos!!!
Plz do read and comment my newest poem too.
May 8th, 2021 03:23
The Sparrow and the Soup.
RDS said:
Nice imagery and poetry, a very pleasing read thanks.
J
December 8th, 2020 14:49
RDS said:
Nice imagery and poetry, a very pleasing read thanks.
J
December 8th, 2020 14:49
The Fountain Pen
Neville said:
a captivating read from one end to the other ...
November 21st, 2020 12:42
Neville said:
a captivating read from one end to the other ...
November 21st, 2020 12:42
The Fountain Pen
Doggerel Dave said:
Your\'e back! Disappeared there for a while...
An easy comfortable travel through early evening which I experienced to the full.
Mine a small attractive Bakelite container. Not quite the same, but the past still full of questions...
Regards Dave
November 20th, 2020 01:47
Doggerel Dave said:
Your\'e back! Disappeared there for a while...
An easy comfortable travel through early evening which I experienced to the full.
Mine a small attractive Bakelite container. Not quite the same, but the past still full of questions...
Regards Dave
November 20th, 2020 01:47
The Fountain Pen
Goldfinch60 said:
May each new day be filled with happiness.
Andy
November 20th, 2020 01:28
Goldfinch60 said:
May each new day be filled with happiness.
Andy
November 20th, 2020 01:28
Circles
Goldfinch60 said:
Very good emotive write, may those memories bring you happiness.
Andy
November 13th, 2020 01:44
Goldfinch60 said:
Very good emotive write, may those memories bring you happiness.
Andy
November 13th, 2020 01:44
Circles
Goddess of the Mist said:
Nicely done in presenting the passage of time in a sad and romantic way, including how our sense of smell can play such a big part in all that..
November 12th, 2020 23:53
Goddess of the Mist said:
Nicely done in presenting the passage of time in a sad and romantic way, including how our sense of smell can play such a big part in all that..
November 12th, 2020 23:53
Circles
jarcher54 said:
I love the simplicity and fluidity of this piece. It starts out a little predictably (not in a trite way), but when you compare the reminders of a person who has drifted out of your life to grown children returning only to remind you that they are gone, I was overcome by strong emotions, even a tear. A beautiful comparison, a bittersweet little poem!
November 12th, 2020 16:18
jarcher54 said:
I love the simplicity and fluidity of this piece. It starts out a little predictably (not in a trite way), but when you compare the reminders of a person who has drifted out of your life to grown children returning only to remind you that they are gone, I was overcome by strong emotions, even a tear. A beautiful comparison, a bittersweet little poem!
November 12th, 2020 16:18
Yellow Leaves
L. B. Mek said:
\'Dressed elegantly
To meet life.
Wearing a fine suede jacket
Bought long ago
On a happy day.
The yellow handkerchief
In his breast pocket
Matches the few late leaves
Stubbornly clinging
To the almost naked branches.\'
these ten lines above, taken as a stand-alone stanza, are some of the purest poetry lines I have read on MPS, they need nothing added to them
good write
November 12th, 2020 05:05
L. B. Mek said:
\'Dressed elegantly
To meet life.
Wearing a fine suede jacket
Bought long ago
On a happy day.
The yellow handkerchief
In his breast pocket
Matches the few late leaves
Stubbornly clinging
To the almost naked branches.\'
these ten lines above, taken as a stand-alone stanza, are some of the purest poetry lines I have read on MPS, they need nothing added to them
good write
November 12th, 2020 05:05
Yellow Leaves
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
Woww an awesome poem, I was admiring the Autumn imagery, great in metaphorical inspiration to \'letting go\" and moving on in all positive.
Kudos.
Plz pleez do read and comment my newest poem, but if it\'s difficult then just skip commenting.Sa
November 11th, 2020 01:40
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
Woww an awesome poem, I was admiring the Autumn imagery, great in metaphorical inspiration to \'letting go\" and moving on in all positive.
Kudos.
Plz pleez do read and comment my newest poem, but if it\'s difficult then just skip commenting.Sa
November 11th, 2020 01:40
Us
Aryal Allen said:
This poem took me on a journey. I am sure you already know how beautiful and timeless it is. Wonderfully well done! Congratulations, Mr!
October 26th, 2020 11:47
Aryal Allen said:
This poem took me on a journey. I am sure you already know how beautiful and timeless it is. Wonderfully well done! Congratulations, Mr!
October 26th, 2020 11:47
Us
L. B. Mek said:
bravely invasive in its level of detail and penned with its own winding flow - purposely,
38 years of marriage - amazing feat in today\'s divorce only dedicated courtroom time\'s, what a wonderful blessing you have been gifted, Congratulations!
October 26th, 2020 04:38
L. B. Mek said:
bravely invasive in its level of detail and penned with its own winding flow - purposely,
38 years of marriage - amazing feat in today\'s divorce only dedicated courtroom time\'s, what a wonderful blessing you have been gifted, Congratulations!
October 26th, 2020 04:38
Little Man
Hinnant said:
I loved the lines Loneliness Vanishing In Trivial Chores. It reminds me of my son who has depression and loneliness and only feels better when he works and keeps busy. Thank you for sharing.
October 25th, 2020 13:39
Hinnant said:
I loved the lines Loneliness Vanishing In Trivial Chores. It reminds me of my son who has depression and loneliness and only feels better when he works and keeps busy. Thank you for sharing.
October 25th, 2020 13:39
Daydream
Goldfinch60 said:
Super words Dasim, our dreams and reality can meet and bring such wonder to our lives.
Andy
October 24th, 2020 00:57
Goldfinch60 said:
Super words Dasim, our dreams and reality can meet and bring such wonder to our lives.
Andy
October 24th, 2020 00:57
Daydream
dusk arising said:
Now that is a beautiful piece of work sir! What wonderful things our dreams, be they daydreams or other, truly are. I marvel at the imagined places and people my dream self has constructed for i know i revisit them, pure fantasy as they are, time and again.
You really capture the mosaic of a dream with your snatches dreamworlds dance with one\'s senses here. I really really like this piece.
A MUST for my favourites. You\'ve made my day.
October 23rd, 2020 12:53
dusk arising said:
Now that is a beautiful piece of work sir! What wonderful things our dreams, be they daydreams or other, truly are. I marvel at the imagined places and people my dream self has constructed for i know i revisit them, pure fantasy as they are, time and again.
You really capture the mosaic of a dream with your snatches dreamworlds dance with one\'s senses here. I really really like this piece.
A MUST for my favourites. You\'ve made my day.
October 23rd, 2020 12:53
Afraid
Bragee said:
wonderful write.
All we can do is pour good into our children and hope that end they find their way to pour that good back out into the world.
October 23rd, 2020 11:55
Bragee said:
wonderful write.
All we can do is pour good into our children and hope that end they find their way to pour that good back out into the world.
October 23rd, 2020 11:55
Afraid
L. B. Mek said:
\'Or will your steps be heavy
With regret and loneliness as friends,
Always wondering, always longing
Perhaps a song or sudden light
Will show a way to that place
Where love and thoughts
Are tender friends.\'
wonderfully insightful and subtle in tone, underlining that tight rope parent\'s have to traverse: yearning to pass-on their hard-earned wisdom - fruits from their own mistakes, while being careful to not discourage or belittle the opportunities presented to their most cherished of treasures.
October 23rd, 2020 04:20
L. B. Mek said:
\'Or will your steps be heavy
With regret and loneliness as friends,
Always wondering, always longing
Perhaps a song or sudden light
Will show a way to that place
Where love and thoughts
Are tender friends.\'
wonderfully insightful and subtle in tone, underlining that tight rope parent\'s have to traverse: yearning to pass-on their hard-earned wisdom - fruits from their own mistakes, while being careful to not discourage or belittle the opportunities presented to their most cherished of treasures.
October 23rd, 2020 04:20
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