Comments received on poems by Dasim
Afraid
dusk arising said:
Between your words is the dilemma of caring when someone chooses a path into a place we would not go. But there should be no holding back of another soul, each must tread their path as well as they see fit and if there be such a thing as destiny, then that destiny is theirs alone.
I hope it turns out well for your daughter.
October 22nd, 2020 10:04
dusk arising said:
Between your words is the dilemma of caring when someone chooses a path into a place we would not go. But there should be no holding back of another soul, each must tread their path as well as they see fit and if there be such a thing as destiny, then that destiny is theirs alone.
I hope it turns out well for your daughter.
October 22nd, 2020 10:04
Little Man
L. B. Mek said:
like Dusk Arising mentioned already, I like the beat to your writes - even if by design, it feels so natural: a cascading flow - all of its own
October 22nd, 2020 04:50
L. B. Mek said:
like Dusk Arising mentioned already, I like the beat to your writes - even if by design, it feels so natural: a cascading flow - all of its own
October 22nd, 2020 04:50
Night Visit
L. B. Mek said:
like the unfolding thought patterns in your write, wonderful imagery and some insightfully witty commentary on our perception of self: juxtaposed with other\'s perception of ourself, contemplating what qualities may be prioritised in the eyes of love
October 22nd, 2020 04:01
L. B. Mek said:
like the unfolding thought patterns in your write, wonderful imagery and some insightfully witty commentary on our perception of self: juxtaposed with other\'s perception of ourself, contemplating what qualities may be prioritised in the eyes of love
October 22nd, 2020 04:01
Little Man
dusk arising said:
Most evocative of the hum-drum pattern we can fall into without realising.
Very good writing.
October 22nd, 2020 02:31
dusk arising said:
Most evocative of the hum-drum pattern we can fall into without realising.
Very good writing.
October 22nd, 2020 02:31
Late
L. B. Mek said:
wonderful flow, it reads like a refreshing stream paving its own path down a hill, smoothly traversing one line at a time,
good read
October 20th, 2020 02:45
L. B. Mek said:
wonderful flow, it reads like a refreshing stream paving its own path down a hill, smoothly traversing one line at a time,
good read
October 20th, 2020 02:45
Late
Goldfinch60 said:
Love is the strongest of emotions and will always be there.
Andy
October 20th, 2020 00:46
Goldfinch60 said:
Love is the strongest of emotions and will always be there.
Andy
October 20th, 2020 00:46
The Face
L. B. Mek said:
it is necessary to look for meaning, to confront the reality of not fitting-in within the community you have cultivated for yourself,
but as your write clearly identifies, there is a lot of interpretation involved in our definition of those elements that shape our lives - we sometimes take for granted,
not all bird songs are cheerful, the Sun can bake as easily as nurture and refresh, friends can be as poisonous as they can be angelic
and that mirror reflection is not the only way you have of identifying yourself, look: in the in those eyes that look upon you with kindness and try to find answer to the \'why\' -
why do they fight by your side, when you have given up?
in-fact why do they bother at all?
Because they don\'t know any better? or maybe - just maybe because you - made an effort at some point, to insure you matter: in their eyes and you just need to find a tether to hold-on to, long enough for this storm to pass...
however bleak, your write was a good read
October 19th, 2020 02:13
L. B. Mek said:
it is necessary to look for meaning, to confront the reality of not fitting-in within the community you have cultivated for yourself,
but as your write clearly identifies, there is a lot of interpretation involved in our definition of those elements that shape our lives - we sometimes take for granted,
not all bird songs are cheerful, the Sun can bake as easily as nurture and refresh, friends can be as poisonous as they can be angelic
and that mirror reflection is not the only way you have of identifying yourself, look: in the in those eyes that look upon you with kindness and try to find answer to the \'why\' -
why do they fight by your side, when you have given up?
in-fact why do they bother at all?
Because they don\'t know any better? or maybe - just maybe because you - made an effort at some point, to insure you matter: in their eyes and you just need to find a tether to hold-on to, long enough for this storm to pass...
however bleak, your write was a good read
October 19th, 2020 02:13
Ocean Walk
Goldfinch60 said:
Very fine words dasim, that love will be forever with you.
Andy
October 14th, 2020 00:49
Goldfinch60 said:
Very fine words dasim, that love will be forever with you.
Andy
October 14th, 2020 00:49
Winter
Crowns4Christ said:
brilliantly worded,great job!welcome to the mps family
October 9th, 2020 21:09
Crowns4Christ said:
brilliantly worded,great job!welcome to the mps family
October 9th, 2020 21:09
Winter
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
ANGELA HERE - Good Evening Friend - Welcome to MPS it is a Proactive Site & operates by Reading (& Commenting if you wish) on each others Poems ! Thanks for your first Poem - Free Verse - Excellent in Rhythm & Subject (Memories in Winter). We are in the UK (near LONDON) but our experience is that Winter comes Early in the Northern States ! As I look back on the past (Im 32) I remember *Love given & Love recieved* especially in the Winter ! I have been married to BRIAN for 6 Months - but prior to that I would relive Lessons Learned in discarded dreams ! This often led to morning tears ! This is a beautiful *Love Poem* which I am sure many will empathise with - Thanks for sharing. Please visit our site - Thanks !
Blessing & Peace & Joy to You & Yours
Angela - Brian & Smokey Cat ! ! !
October 9th, 2020 17:30
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
ANGELA HERE - Good Evening Friend - Welcome to MPS it is a Proactive Site & operates by Reading (& Commenting if you wish) on each others Poems ! Thanks for your first Poem - Free Verse - Excellent in Rhythm & Subject (Memories in Winter). We are in the UK (near LONDON) but our experience is that Winter comes Early in the Northern States ! As I look back on the past (Im 32) I remember *Love given & Love recieved* especially in the Winter ! I have been married to BRIAN for 6 Months - but prior to that I would relive Lessons Learned in discarded dreams ! This often led to morning tears ! This is a beautiful *Love Poem* which I am sure many will empathise with - Thanks for sharing. Please visit our site - Thanks !
Blessing & Peace & Joy to You & Yours
Angela - Brian & Smokey Cat ! ! !
October 9th, 2020 17:30
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