Comments received on poems by Lili Ahlam
Us by the river
Nicholas M. Langford said:
The repetition of \"without you\" creates a beautifully dreamy, simple, and folky vibe. Do you refer to Leonard Cohen?
October 28th, 2020 00:00
Nicholas M. Langford said:
The repetition of \"without you\" creates a beautifully dreamy, simple, and folky vibe. Do you refer to Leonard Cohen?
October 28th, 2020 00:00
Us by the river
Goldfinch60 said:
May that thought come back to reality.
Andy
October 27th, 2020 02:11
Goldfinch60 said:
May that thought come back to reality.
Andy
October 27th, 2020 02:11
The beat of your tune
Goldfinch60 said:
May those words that created you be seen from that creation you have become.
Very good words Lili.
Welcome to MPS.
Andy
October 26th, 2020 01:52
Goldfinch60 said:
May those words that created you be seen from that creation you have become.
Very good words Lili.
Welcome to MPS.
Andy
October 26th, 2020 01:52
The beat of your tune
MendedFences27 said:
A couple of ideas are offered up here; on the one hand is the power of words, and on the other is the lack of self-determination. An author creates characters not living humans. Words should not be used to control people for ones self-interest. People must have enough self control to resist intimidation. Your poem highlights both and as such is a provocative write. Keep writing, there is power in your words. - Phil A.
October 25th, 2020 19:59
MendedFences27 said:
A couple of ideas are offered up here; on the one hand is the power of words, and on the other is the lack of self-determination. An author creates characters not living humans. Words should not be used to control people for ones self-interest. People must have enough self control to resist intimidation. Your poem highlights both and as such is a provocative write. Keep writing, there is power in your words. - Phil A.
October 25th, 2020 19:59
The beat of your tune
Fay Slimm. said:
Welcome to M.P.S Lili and with this haunt of a read on the power of created control in the name of love your words will be relatable of that I am sure - an inventive style written with honesty which reminds me of those I have known in the same situation.......... hoping to read more of your work soon. - - warmly from Fay
October 25th, 2020 05:27
Fay Slimm. said:
Welcome to M.P.S Lili and with this haunt of a read on the power of created control in the name of love your words will be relatable of that I am sure - an inventive style written with honesty which reminds me of those I have known in the same situation.......... hoping to read more of your work soon. - - warmly from Fay
October 25th, 2020 05:27
The beat of your tune
dusk arising said:
Close the distance and bring us more.
Please.
October 25th, 2020 05:19
dusk arising said:
Close the distance and bring us more.
Please.
October 25th, 2020 05:19
