Comments received on poems by PrEm Ji
I AM YOURS
L. B. Mek said:
\'seek the right Questions
never, suppose
those inferable equation\'s
can anchor
you, to those foundations
of life\'s: choices....\'
(an intriguing read
even devoid of its theological merits
thanks for sharing, my friend)
January 18th, 2022 05:25
L. B. Mek said:
\'seek the right Questions
never, suppose
those inferable equation\'s
can anchor
you, to those foundations
of life\'s: choices....\'
(an intriguing read
even devoid of its theological merits
thanks for sharing, my friend)
January 18th, 2022 05:25
PILGRIM\'S PROGRESS (Short story)
L. B. Mek said:
I,
am the accumulation
of all those
who, invested in me
with their words
with their gifts
with their Time
and most of all
with the lessons, of life
they allowed me to glean
before I too
had to take that blind, leap
and learn to dream...
(such a delectable way
to plate
your proverbs and insight\'s, dear Poet
a serving of wisdom
to be mused over and appreciated..
thank you!
January 18th, 2022 05:19
L. B. Mek said:
I,
am the accumulation
of all those
who, invested in me
with their words
with their gifts
with their Time
and most of all
with the lessons, of life
they allowed me to glean
before I too
had to take that blind, leap
and learn to dream...
(such a delectable way
to plate
your proverbs and insight\'s, dear Poet
a serving of wisdom
to be mused over and appreciated..
thank you!
January 18th, 2022 05:19
AKELAMA (Short story)
L. B. Mek said:
what vivid imagery
and how entertainingly
you worded this succinct parable,
I like the idea of our deities
getting along, while we
kill each other in their name,
just goes to show
if people aren\'t willing to heed
even the efforts of martyrs
be they deity or flesh
are deemed: obsolete...
a wonderful read, thanks for sharing
December 13th, 2021 03:53
L. B. Mek said:
what vivid imagery
and how entertainingly
you worded this succinct parable,
I like the idea of our deities
getting along, while we
kill each other in their name,
just goes to show
if people aren\'t willing to heed
even the efforts of martyrs
be they deity or flesh
are deemed: obsolete...
a wonderful read, thanks for sharing
December 13th, 2021 03:53
AKELAMA (Short story)
Paul Bell said:
It sure wasn\'t a good investment in that field for poor Judas. Still, a smile is a smile.
December 10th, 2021 13:36
Paul Bell said:
It sure wasn\'t a good investment in that field for poor Judas. Still, a smile is a smile.
December 10th, 2021 13:36
BIRTHDAY INSIDE AN EXPRESS TRAIN (Short story)
L. B. Mek said:
\'Alarm, set in the mobile phone,
started ringing exactly at 3 am.
These machines
don’t have souls! Love too!\'
\'Life is a journey for daily bread
for you and me, dear brothers!
But, how many of us
understand this simple truth?\'
\'The past four days,
we were running
like greased machines
to realize, our dream…\'
\'‘He wants to talk to you,’ my heart told me.\'
(and one, day
if karma is Just
and in hope, we intrust
all your good deeds, in life
will be repaid, tenfold
in the good fortune of your own \'lovely boys\'
that will be lucky to inherit, half
of the gleaned wisdom
you share, in this poetically didactic short stories)
a Great read!
November 9th, 2021 04:56
L. B. Mek said:
\'Alarm, set in the mobile phone,
started ringing exactly at 3 am.
These machines
don’t have souls! Love too!\'
\'Life is a journey for daily bread
for you and me, dear brothers!
But, how many of us
understand this simple truth?\'
\'The past four days,
we were running
like greased machines
to realize, our dream…\'
\'‘He wants to talk to you,’ my heart told me.\'
(and one, day
if karma is Just
and in hope, we intrust
all your good deeds, in life
will be repaid, tenfold
in the good fortune of your own \'lovely boys\'
that will be lucky to inherit, half
of the gleaned wisdom
you share, in this poetically didactic short stories)
a Great read!
November 9th, 2021 04:56
BIRTHDAY INSIDE AN EXPRESS TRAIN (Short story)
spilleronsheet said:
It’s not easy to trust others maybe
And news and some crime serials make us more frightened about the unknown and in such situations we end up being suspicious and hurting others unknown
So truly depicted dear author
November 8th, 2021 14:28
spilleronsheet said:
It’s not easy to trust others maybe
And news and some crime serials make us more frightened about the unknown and in such situations we end up being suspicious and hurting others unknown
So truly depicted dear author
November 8th, 2021 14:28
BIRTHDAY INSIDE AN EXPRESS TRAIN (Short story)
spilleronsheet said:
What a wonderful story
It’s so beautiful
Initially the sad part of family being divided thanks to earning bread it was sad
Sometimes happiness requires money in pocket
And then your encounter so accurate
Lovely read dear author
Well penned
November 8th, 2021 14:26
spilleronsheet said:
What a wonderful story
It’s so beautiful
Initially the sad part of family being divided thanks to earning bread it was sad
Sometimes happiness requires money in pocket
And then your encounter so accurate
Lovely read dear author
Well penned
November 8th, 2021 14:26
CANDLE IN THE WIND (Short story)
L. B. Mek said:
\'She has to
\'groom\'
herself, to face any tough situations
in life!\'..
(the reader who understands your purposed choice in utilising the modern connotations in the meaning of \'grooming\',
is the reader who will work through
the morbid ugliness, in the topics you introduce
which they usually put a lot of effort in denying its very existence,
let alone accepting it as a part of \'their\' - reality,)
an important subject, an impressive display of wordsmith delicateness, in the tender way, you address issues boldly
but never crudely,
or dramatized for that theatrical \'shock effect\'.
I laud the empathy, in you even attempting such a nuanced write.
Brilliant!
thank you for sharing, I read and learn, dear Poet
October 18th, 2021 06:39
L. B. Mek said:
\'She has to
\'groom\'
herself, to face any tough situations
in life!\'..
(the reader who understands your purposed choice in utilising the modern connotations in the meaning of \'grooming\',
is the reader who will work through
the morbid ugliness, in the topics you introduce
which they usually put a lot of effort in denying its very existence,
let alone accepting it as a part of \'their\' - reality,)
an important subject, an impressive display of wordsmith delicateness, in the tender way, you address issues boldly
but never crudely,
or dramatized for that theatrical \'shock effect\'.
I laud the empathy, in you even attempting such a nuanced write.
Brilliant!
thank you for sharing, I read and learn, dear Poet
October 18th, 2021 06:39
LIFE-SKILLS (Short story)
L. B. Mek said:
you should name this:
\'Wisdom\'s Rivers
clogged, by that collective
Intellectual Intolerance\'..
(an important topic
I really like how you explored
all the different perspectives
and in such a short write
managed to give each one, a voice;
as usual a lot of lessons
to be learnt if we invest our time to read and unfurl your message)
a great write!
thanks for sharing, dear poet
October 12th, 2021 03:46
L. B. Mek said:
you should name this:
\'Wisdom\'s Rivers
clogged, by that collective
Intellectual Intolerance\'..
(an important topic
I really like how you explored
all the different perspectives
and in such a short write
managed to give each one, a voice;
as usual a lot of lessons
to be learnt if we invest our time to read and unfurl your message)
a great write!
thanks for sharing, dear poet
October 12th, 2021 03:46
RAW YOUTH (Short story)
Fay Slimm. said:
What a captivating story Prem and with a wonderfully happy ending too - -- good things often appear when we are helping others and how well that applies to Saju and Sushama. Thank you for sharing their story with us.
October 5th, 2021 08:57
Fay Slimm. said:
What a captivating story Prem and with a wonderfully happy ending too - -- good things often appear when we are helping others and how well that applies to Saju and Sushama. Thank you for sharing their story with us.
October 5th, 2021 08:57
RAW YOUTH (Short story)
L. B. Mek said:
I think this may need age restriction my friend,
because you\'ve woven the nuances of your meaning a little too subtle, and if the reader loses that element, then some of its wording is a little concerning..
but personally as a lover of Feodor Dostoevsky, I found this a wonderful reimagining of his themes and ideas, although given a more modern facelift..
a thought provoking read, thanks for sharing, dear poet
October 5th, 2021 04:30
L. B. Mek said:
I think this may need age restriction my friend,
because you\'ve woven the nuances of your meaning a little too subtle, and if the reader loses that element, then some of its wording is a little concerning..
but personally as a lover of Feodor Dostoevsky, I found this a wonderful reimagining of his themes and ideas, although given a more modern facelift..
a thought provoking read, thanks for sharing, dear poet
October 5th, 2021 04:30
CITIZEN \'CANE\'
L. B. Mek said:
so many \'bastards\'
I guess if we call everyone bastards, eventually the original meaning will be lost
and it can maybe evolve into something less, negative..
as a \'bastard\' reader, I thank you for sharing such a \'wonderfully\' bastard story, dear \'bastard\' Poet
(lol, forgive me
I couldn\'t help but try and have a little fun..)
October 5th, 2021 04:21
L. B. Mek said:
so many \'bastards\'
I guess if we call everyone bastards, eventually the original meaning will be lost
and it can maybe evolve into something less, negative..
as a \'bastard\' reader, I thank you for sharing such a \'wonderfully\' bastard story, dear \'bastard\' Poet
(lol, forgive me
I couldn\'t help but try and have a little fun..)
October 5th, 2021 04:21
THE LAW OF SPACE (Short story)
L. B. Mek said:
wonderfully insightful, a poignant dedication to a genuine Poet and brave commentary,
a good read
thanks for sharing, dear poet
October 5th, 2021 04:08
L. B. Mek said:
wonderfully insightful, a poignant dedication to a genuine Poet and brave commentary,
a good read
thanks for sharing, dear poet
October 5th, 2021 04:08
FISSION, FUSION AND ELIMINATION (Short story)
Trenz Pruca said:
Wow. It struck me in the gut like the kick of a mule. Good write. Thank you
September 27th, 2021 17:45
Trenz Pruca said:
Wow. It struck me in the gut like the kick of a mule. Good write. Thank you
September 27th, 2021 17:45
SENSATIONAL NEWS (Short story)
PrEm Ji said:
Thank you dear friend... Thank you so much...
July 24th, 2021 11:38
PrEm Ji said:
Thank you dear friend... Thank you so much...
July 24th, 2021 11:38
SENSATIONAL NEWS (Short story)
L. B. Mek said:
you have such a way: at tugging on heartstrings
showcasing nuanced insight, while
empathising with each character\'s point of view
and still able to weave such an intriguing read;
easily my second favourite
of the write\'s you\'ve shared so far
thank you, dear poet..
\'you have no right to write about Ayyappa Das...
If you do that... that\'s called sensational journalism...
A journalist is not a hunter... but a fighter...
Do have empathy on anything or anyone...
about whom you write,’ Namboodiri Sir told,
with an unexpected glow on his face.\'
Amen!
July 15th, 2021 03:45
L. B. Mek said:
you have such a way: at tugging on heartstrings
showcasing nuanced insight, while
empathising with each character\'s point of view
and still able to weave such an intriguing read;
easily my second favourite
of the write\'s you\'ve shared so far
thank you, dear poet..
\'you have no right to write about Ayyappa Das...
If you do that... that\'s called sensational journalism...
A journalist is not a hunter... but a fighter...
Do have empathy on anything or anyone...
about whom you write,’ Namboodiri Sir told,
with an unexpected glow on his face.\'
Amen!
July 15th, 2021 03:45
ART IS CRUEL (Short story)
Fay Slimm. said:
Such a good read Prem - - ghost writers world over are ever shocked when the crunch comes and Surendran was no exception - but there are also many Ulpals too lurking behind their pretence - the story outlined the outcome with a phrase I agree with entirely - - \" dog will remain as a dog even on the top of Mt.Everest!’- -- a factual conclusion to make and thank you for sharing this questionable part of the film industry with us.
July 12th, 2021 13:28
Fay Slimm. said:
Such a good read Prem - - ghost writers world over are ever shocked when the crunch comes and Surendran was no exception - but there are also many Ulpals too lurking behind their pretence - the story outlined the outcome with a phrase I agree with entirely - - \" dog will remain as a dog even on the top of Mt.Everest!’- -- a factual conclusion to make and thank you for sharing this questionable part of the film industry with us.
July 12th, 2021 13:28
ART IS CRUEL (Short story)
L. B. Mek said:
reads like a memoir from a long suffering
film industry stalwart
with bitingly crude commentary
and cynically - seething, depictions
of those perpetrators, who defiled
his idolised perception of \'Art\'
that he believed-in, a little too - naively...
(we must dream, yes
we must hope, yes
but, we must do so with our eyes
brave enough:
to look at reality and realise
there is no such thing, as a \'Must Be\'
there is only
what is
what could be
and what we are striving, to achieve;
if we \'Assume\', our guaranteed rewards
we only, make ourselves vulnerable
to that guarantee of disappointment...
So let us, instead
walk our path in life, with our eyes \'Open\'
to the the \'Inevitability of Hardship\'
whilst still, cherishing our ability
to believe - in, and hope-for: that yearning
for goodness to prevail - over
the abundant trials, in our lives!)..
A wonderful write, immersive in detail
and showcasing a wide scope
of insightful social commentary.
thanks for sharing, dear poet
a Great read, truly!
July 12th, 2021 03:55
L. B. Mek said:
reads like a memoir from a long suffering
film industry stalwart
with bitingly crude commentary
and cynically - seething, depictions
of those perpetrators, who defiled
his idolised perception of \'Art\'
that he believed-in, a little too - naively...
(we must dream, yes
we must hope, yes
but, we must do so with our eyes
brave enough:
to look at reality and realise
there is no such thing, as a \'Must Be\'
there is only
what is
what could be
and what we are striving, to achieve;
if we \'Assume\', our guaranteed rewards
we only, make ourselves vulnerable
to that guarantee of disappointment...
So let us, instead
walk our path in life, with our eyes \'Open\'
to the the \'Inevitability of Hardship\'
whilst still, cherishing our ability
to believe - in, and hope-for: that yearning
for goodness to prevail - over
the abundant trials, in our lives!)..
A wonderful write, immersive in detail
and showcasing a wide scope
of insightful social commentary.
thanks for sharing, dear poet
a Great read, truly!
July 12th, 2021 03:55
TWISTED (Short story)
L. B. Mek said:
“Somebody tried to rape Noorji yesterday, when nobody was there at home.”
*** “So?...\" ***
this: miniscule - single syllable of a word, is why
“Complaints are of no use when the culprit is from: within...\"
...
and this is why, no matter what horror\'s the world projects
there is no person
who can judgementally Act: horrified, without acknowledging
that they too, in a different way - maybe, posses
the potential, to inflict the same horror;
in that one moment, of alarmed anxiousness from witnessing
\'the heart-breaking tears of a wife or loved one\'s\';
and so - that seemingly inconsequential: \"So,...\": represents
what our crude - raw, unfiltered selves, are capable of
and that\'s
from one of the most insightful and empathetic, writer\'s
I have ever come across..
what a sobering realisation, that we of humanity
have to fight - against, our \'Learned\' capacity
for such depthless levels (momentary, as it may be for some)
of self-serving: wilful Ignorance!
(firstly, dear Poet
I hope you don\'t take my observation of this one - tiny, point
in your wide-lensed, scope
of insightfully and painstakingly edited, didactive short story
as any indictment on you, as a person or writer
merely, I wanted (however feebly)
to capitalise on an opportunity to exemplify
just how unaware
we sometimes become of our subconscious
and the lessons it strives: to teach us...!
*Secondly and most pertinently:
I hope you know, you\'ve just *Planted
that \'Proustian - biscotti Madeleine\'
in your \'Premjian - Murukku snack\'
of inked wisdom
that, one day: your children will *Read and *Taste
to *Sprout: reminiscing mementos
of their Parent\'s, devoted sweetness of selfless love)
an Exceptional write of unquestionable Brilliance!
keep perfecting, striving and growing, dear Poet
because I for one, can\'t wait to witness
your limitless potential being realised
into that pristine
of accessibly polished: artistic prowess!
in my humble opinion
June 28th, 2021 05:48
L. B. Mek said:
“Somebody tried to rape Noorji yesterday, when nobody was there at home.”
*** “So?...\" ***
this: miniscule - single syllable of a word, is why
“Complaints are of no use when the culprit is from: within...\"
...
and this is why, no matter what horror\'s the world projects
there is no person
who can judgementally Act: horrified, without acknowledging
that they too, in a different way - maybe, posses
the potential, to inflict the same horror;
in that one moment, of alarmed anxiousness from witnessing
\'the heart-breaking tears of a wife or loved one\'s\';
and so - that seemingly inconsequential: \"So,...\": represents
what our crude - raw, unfiltered selves, are capable of
and that\'s
from one of the most insightful and empathetic, writer\'s
I have ever come across..
what a sobering realisation, that we of humanity
have to fight - against, our \'Learned\' capacity
for such depthless levels (momentary, as it may be for some)
of self-serving: wilful Ignorance!
(firstly, dear Poet
I hope you don\'t take my observation of this one - tiny, point
in your wide-lensed, scope
of insightfully and painstakingly edited, didactive short story
as any indictment on you, as a person or writer
merely, I wanted (however feebly)
to capitalise on an opportunity to exemplify
just how unaware
we sometimes become of our subconscious
and the lessons it strives: to teach us...!
*Secondly and most pertinently:
I hope you know, you\'ve just *Planted
that \'Proustian - biscotti Madeleine\'
in your \'Premjian - Murukku snack\'
of inked wisdom
that, one day: your children will *Read and *Taste
to *Sprout: reminiscing mementos
of their Parent\'s, devoted sweetness of selfless love)
an Exceptional write of unquestionable Brilliance!
keep perfecting, striving and growing, dear Poet
because I for one, can\'t wait to witness
your limitless potential being realised
into that pristine
of accessibly polished: artistic prowess!
in my humble opinion
June 28th, 2021 05:48
VILLAGE OF LOVE (Short story)
Fay Slimm. said:
That village of Love sounds like a magical world Prem but what a tragedy for Arun and Amritha - true love is certainly deathless - a very well told and memorable read.
June 16th, 2021 16:19
Fay Slimm. said:
That village of Love sounds like a magical world Prem but what a tragedy for Arun and Amritha - true love is certainly deathless - a very well told and memorable read.
June 16th, 2021 16:19
CHILD IS THE FATHER OF MAN (Short story)
L. B. Mek said:
\'daughter of a multimillionaire
and naturally,
a snob herself,
due to lack of proper education.\'
there\'s two snobs in this line
one - formed of opinionated bias
the other: blatant
if objectivity\'s spectacles, utilised...
let us choose empathy and humility
over judgement and ridicule
whenever possible
June 11th, 2021 03:59
L. B. Mek said:
\'daughter of a multimillionaire
and naturally,
a snob herself,
due to lack of proper education.\'
there\'s two snobs in this line
one - formed of opinionated bias
the other: blatant
if objectivity\'s spectacles, utilised...
let us choose empathy and humility
over judgement and ridicule
whenever possible
June 11th, 2021 03:59
CHILD IS THE FATHER OF MAN (Short story)
Fay Slimm. said:
Meera and girls like that will have to learn and absorb the real life and become as awake to realities of wealth however accumulated --- the child has to experience the unity in diversity too - another piece of food for thought Prtem.
June 10th, 2021 12:32
Fay Slimm. said:
Meera and girls like that will have to learn and absorb the real life and become as awake to realities of wealth however accumulated --- the child has to experience the unity in diversity too - another piece of food for thought Prtem.
June 10th, 2021 12:32
ONE AMONG NOBODY (Short story)
Fay Slimm. said:
A fine and upbuilding account of how even troublesome people need someone to care for their welfare and the story of how Ranju went at first down to rock bottom in self-worth and then through kindness shown by an understanding teacher she made in the end first grade and gained so much confidence - a lesson for us all in this well told experience which I take it was your own dealings with one of the students Prem - - your pen expertly tells of how challenging life can be when those made responsible have the position to help though involving at times family dis-function . Thank you for sharing it.
June 4th, 2021 15:44
Fay Slimm. said:
A fine and upbuilding account of how even troublesome people need someone to care for their welfare and the story of how Ranju went at first down to rock bottom in self-worth and then through kindness shown by an understanding teacher she made in the end first grade and gained so much confidence - a lesson for us all in this well told experience which I take it was your own dealings with one of the students Prem - - your pen expertly tells of how challenging life can be when those made responsible have the position to help though involving at times family dis-function . Thank you for sharing it.
June 4th, 2021 15:44
LOVE IS A DOUBLE-EDGED SWORD (Short story)
L. B. Mek said:
\'Born fighters they are!\'
\'But, machines don’t have that something… Guts… Courage…\'
\'especially a Gurkha in love\'..
none of us, can ever be categorised: as \'born fighter\'s\'
we are all born, as empty shell\'s
it is the world and our surrounding\'s, that teach us
and it is pure luck, where and when we are born
that dictates what lessons: we learn..
so before we depict and assume
each other\'s characterisation, we must first acknowledge
but, by the fate of chance:
we could all - have lived, each other\'s lives
and that\'s a truth, we must accept..
so empathy, begins
by acknowledging a blood soaked, soldier
is capable of the Purest form of Love
and
that unassumingly selfless, socially compassionate cleric
is capable of the most, horrendous crimes...
there are no absolute\'s in existence!
just the choices we make
and the faith we choose to invest-in
while facing-up, to accountability\'s lessons: of life...!
(thanks for sharing, dear poet)
May 31st, 2021 05:42
L. B. Mek said:
\'Born fighters they are!\'
\'But, machines don’t have that something… Guts… Courage…\'
\'especially a Gurkha in love\'..
none of us, can ever be categorised: as \'born fighter\'s\'
we are all born, as empty shell\'s
it is the world and our surrounding\'s, that teach us
and it is pure luck, where and when we are born
that dictates what lessons: we learn..
so before we depict and assume
each other\'s characterisation, we must first acknowledge
but, by the fate of chance:
we could all - have lived, each other\'s lives
and that\'s a truth, we must accept..
so empathy, begins
by acknowledging a blood soaked, soldier
is capable of the Purest form of Love
and
that unassumingly selfless, socially compassionate cleric
is capable of the most, horrendous crimes...
there are no absolute\'s in existence!
just the choices we make
and the faith we choose to invest-in
while facing-up, to accountability\'s lessons: of life...!
(thanks for sharing, dear poet)
May 31st, 2021 05:42
LOVE IS A DOUBLE-EDGED SWORD (Short story)
Jerry Reynolds said:
Good story, Premji. I could really get a feeling for your culture. Thank you. If you want a glimpse of mine go to
http://www.artandadvertising.com/public/HaibunOdyssey.pdf
May 30th, 2021 14:30
Jerry Reynolds said:
Good story, Premji. I could really get a feeling for your culture. Thank you. If you want a glimpse of mine go to
http://www.artandadvertising.com/public/HaibunOdyssey.pdf
May 30th, 2021 14:30
EVERYTHING HAS A PRICE (Short story)
L. B. Mek said:
an interesting point I observed in your writing
not necessarily negative, I must stress..
just that
when we use ourselves as narrators
or The: protagonist
it seems every other character in the story
but ourselves, is being judged
a literary Freudian-slip, I presume: what an oddity...
maybe that\'s why most
prefer using fake characters, even in real stories
or anecdotal life experienced, accounts..
still, what a wonderful read
thank you for sharing, dear poet
May 28th, 2021 05:32
L. B. Mek said:
an interesting point I observed in your writing
not necessarily negative, I must stress..
just that
when we use ourselves as narrators
or The: protagonist
it seems every other character in the story
but ourselves, is being judged
a literary Freudian-slip, I presume: what an oddity...
maybe that\'s why most
prefer using fake characters, even in real stories
or anecdotal life experienced, accounts..
still, what a wonderful read
thank you for sharing, dear poet
May 28th, 2021 05:32
EVERYTHING HAS A PRICE (Short story)
Fay Slimm. said:
The truth outs in this interesting account of all things having a price including a film-star\'s presence - another absorbing read dear Prem and thank you for sharing it with us here on MPS.
May 28th, 2021 04:45
Fay Slimm. said:
The truth outs in this interesting account of all things having a price including a film-star\'s presence - another absorbing read dear Prem and thank you for sharing it with us here on MPS.
May 28th, 2021 04:45
WRATH OF LETTERS (Short story)
rosiedm said:
Is this a true story. It happened? And writing about it here has it helped?
May 19th, 2021 17:17
rosiedm said:
Is this a true story. It happened? And writing about it here has it helped?
May 19th, 2021 17:17
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