Comments received on poems by PrEm Ji

WRATH OF LETTERS (Short story)
L. B. Mek said:

see, as dramatic a tool - \'death\', can be utilised for
in a narrative with purposed ambitions, to shock
and shake-loose
the many, from wilful ignorance\'s: safe
shallow waters of obliviousness..
rarely, does it do true justice, to those
who bravely choose to cope, gripping their lifeline methodologies
for mere daily survival..
many a song is sang of the dramatized, caricatures
for suffering\'s literary depicted, victim heroes..
but let us also - I beg, take note
of the Many, who simply \'bare with it\'..
no, their tales aren\'t enticingly and harrowingly romantic - a read
but their lifetime of unvoiced suffering, is worthy
of any Poet\'s: empathetically worded story
that: I guarantee...

May 19th, 2021 06:03

MINDFULNESS (Short story)
Fay Slimm. said:

So uplifting to read the result of mindfulness found in a sweet nurse toward a dying patient - - your story becomes alive with interest as each day unfolds a reason to open the heart to happiness even when in such dire circumstance. Empathy and compassion are highlighted as traits which can affect both the sufferer and the whole family - - a gem of a girl who adopts a father and becomes a surrogate daughter for those last precious days. Warm hugs to Shanthi who eased Uncle\'s passing.

May 14th, 2021 15:40

MINDFULNESS (Short story)
L. B. Mek said:

(another wonderful read, dear poet)
there is Beauty in All life, shining - even through
that monstrous weakness we call addiction
and its resultant nemesis, titled: cancerous risk..
and we need little to identify it, in the moment
but an experienced professional guiding us through it
unassuming in their diligent professionalism..
clocking-off at the end of the day, changing
from their heroic cape uniforms
to that commoner mirage they cosplay - as, so others in their lives
can treat them with that familial ease..
but, if we squint and peak in our slipstream of intuitive vision
we see, there\'s a stillness of grandeur that surrounds them
and a warmth of understanding, exuding from them
so tangible: we can almost - reach out our hands
and hug it, goodnight...

May 14th, 2021 06:37

L. B. Mek said:

another wonderfully woven tale, dear poet
(and thanks for inspiring my own little scribbled reply)..
\'I am for temperate: in all things, including temperate - itself
literally everything, in moderation
and yeah, that includes lifeline nights of \'manic drunkenness\'
in celebration or sorrowful desperation...
see, the more we box ourselves
into caricature: identity - tropes, of self-worth
the less manoeuvrability we afford ourselves, in the face
of all those random hailstorms: Existence
has the kindness, to grace us with...\'

May 11th, 2021 04:46

Fay Slimm. said:

Another most interesting and engaging read on life when alcohol takes any hold - you are a storyteller extraordinaire my friend.

May 10th, 2021 13:26

BLOSSOMS OF LIFE (Short story)
mahathi said:

This is not just a story. This has a scientific background and something everyone has to read for developing positive thinking.

May 8th, 2021 10:26

PrEm Ji said:

Thank you... life is very simple when kindness leads you... thanks for reading

May 7th, 2021 11:56

L. B. Mek said:

\'he informed her like corpse just got up from the morgue.\'
“You may be… But, I cannot leave a helpless child like that…” my wife replied stubbornly. “I will pick him from the school along with my boys in the evening… and he will study in company of them. But, no more medicines from today onwards…”
in the near future, when we\'ve all forgotten
the meaning to the word \'humane\', I hope
parables and didactive literary brilliance, like yours..
will still be around: to help us find our way back, dear poet
truly what a gift you choose to share! thank you

May 7th, 2021 06:35

MATHS WIZARD (Short story)
L. B. Mek said:

an important message - globally! excavated thoroughly
taking note of the layered and intertwined, obstacles: in-play..
brilliantly executed!
(except for the \'Gulf-widows\' sidebar joke,
I think something was lost in translation,
was it generic commentary
on Arab\'s use of India\'s medical facilities?)
sorry dear poet, just found this hard to understand without context

May 6th, 2021 04:28

MATHS WIZARD (Short story)
Fay Slimm. said:

An eye-opener of a read Prem - and agree with the need to cross-check prescriptions given by doctors in this drug-menaced world.

May 6th, 2021 02:15

DESTINED TO WIN (Short story)
L. B. Mek said:

I think, this write is on that brink, where
that age restriction button and the author\'s notes section
might need to be utilised, my friend..
see if like me, they choose to comprehend
your light-hearted usage of dark humour
this is another enjoyable read..
but - for those that don\'t or lack the capacity: to do so
maybe because such a triggering subject, hits too close to home
for them to simply, read and forget
then, some form of pre-emptive warning may need to be utilised
(but what do I know? this is your: Art
display it as you see best, but please
don\'t mistake my overzealous and opinionated commenting
as some form of entitled posturing
from one who thinks he knows better
that\'s just - too far, from the realms of possible
for me to contemplate, as evidenced
by the depth of insightful empathy, you display
in every didactive write
you\'ve chosen to share, thus far dear poet)

May 4th, 2021 06:04

L. B. Mek said:

\'Who cares for moth
while sitting inside a huge metal-beast!\'
\"Yes... The tear-drop of a mother
can illumine a million Suns!”..
(I couldn\'t help but highlight these two lines
because within them, exists the potential
for insightfully - incisive, Nature Poetry
as eye opening: commentary)..
a truly gripping and emotive story you\'ve weaved, dear Poet
I especially like your depiction of how Faith, can overcome
the naturally human faults of its religion\'s clerics, to deliver
the answer, those who choose to believe - are searching for,
that kind of stark-reality based, open minded choice - to invest
in your chosen belief system, in-spite of the weaknesses
of those entrusted with running it,
is so much more convincing, and enticing than the usual
overtly impassioned quotation\'s of go-to: passages and parables
(for me):
“Welcome dear son… Who is this?”
‘She is my sister.”
“Prem… Your sister-in-law had promised me some funds for our special orphanage…”
“I know… She has been busy trying among friends and relatives…”
“Daughter… Please wait for us a couple of minutes…” Father Solomon told Anitha.
And we started walking towards an unfinished building.
“When you both… Father Solomon and you… had left, I happened to meet a very old woman by some hidden plan of Holy Mother. She had been helping the Father...\'

May 4th, 2021 03:52

KINGDOM OF GOD (Short story)
L. B. Mek said:

‘Stupid! This world will remain capitalistic until money dies... What to do!’..
how we quickly - choose to forget
that same \'Capitalism: in its organically devised - purest form\'
freed: entire Generations
from assuming that life, was meant to be lived
within the cyclical constraints of inherited circumstance
conveniently interpreted as valid, consequence
to foster that victim mentality
we collectively hide behind, endlessly..
(was it not those capitalism merchant\'s, that originally
fast-tracked the break-down of an entire continents
various forms of culturally accepted caste-system\'s
by that flawed logic of ill-fated birth: alone?)
\'any tool, that services the evolutionary need of humanity
will inevitably, be corrupted
as a utility for showcasing those hidden elements
of countless vices, we each harbour willingly\'..
so then, why waste our time
raging, pointlessly against society\'s latest \'craze\'
adding to our collective demise;
better I think
to accept and \'Empathise\', than \'Judge\' and disown
those very same humans, we like to project
all our frustrations - towards..
(what, do my words - read
so foolishly unrealistic? maybe
that\'s where the disconnect
between those
with \'curated\' belief systems, lecturing
impossibly judgemental, far-fetched ideal\'s
and other\'s, who
see the calamity, of crimson inked deeds
manufactured into reality, with blind faith\'s: zealotry
throughout humanity\'s pages, of blood-soaked history\'...

May 3rd, 2021 07:18

KINGDOM OF GOD (Short story)
PrEm Ji said:

But, many clergymen are unaware of it

May 2nd, 2021 19:32

KINGDOM OF GOD (Short story)
mahathi said:

Real socialism we find in the God\'s kingdom.

May 2nd, 2021 01:50

PrEm Ji said:

Great news... please write... I love to follow your works

April 30th, 2021 21:09

MOURNING STAR (Short story)
PrEm Ji said:

Thanks Prema....
It will be very refreshing for you to spend half an hour here on daily basis... poets from all over the world...

April 30th, 2021 21:07

MOURNING STAR (Short story)
Prema said:

Essence of life is thrown in the story... Love is beautiful trapping element of life. Only one sweet heart? Such a beautiful tone in felt in the word \'only one\'

April 30th, 2021 13:37

Prema said:

I feel worthy of spending time in reading your stories... When we were in training, u asked me to write... Now i really feel like to scribble... Simple story line and yet the way u narrated is pleasing... The topic given to this story is appealing...

April 30th, 2021 13:24

MOURNING STAR (Short story)
Fay Slimm. said:

I once again became enraptured with your story of family togetherness and how vital it is to learn how to promote that closest of feelings - first rate writing dear Prem.

April 29th, 2021 12:37

MOURNING STAR (Short story)
L. B. Mek said:

“Just one! And now also: JUST ONE!”
that proud exclamation of the lucky, few
that treasured and learnt, early
whilst learning love\'s song, in-step
with their treasured ONE, and only
discovering answers to their yearning\'s: sincerity
that life: so - fit, to gift
delivered, ribbon wrapped with that grace of longevity..

April 29th, 2021 05:47

L. B. Mek said:

“Now, anyone can tamper with the crest jewel of art!”..
\'Look deep into your mind, yourself,
than looking into the painted faces of others\'..
\'Candles never worry about their life!\'...
(another delicately intertwined tale, you\'ve penned
so enticingly accessible my friend
and thanks for inspiring my little scribbled reply)
who cares, if progress equates to an endless que of scribblers
titling ourselves \'Poet\': without a single bit of poetry - written
to stand the test of time;
instead, what matters most - is that we used, our voice
in the now - before, regret
and by doing-so we validate
every drop of blood, that paid the price
for this poetic freedom, we choose to express
loud and unflinchingly: proud!
\'be stubborn in your determination
to ensure: nobody but yourself
can determine your worth
and you\'ll soon find, my fellow scribblers
the true value
within each treasured breathe\'

April 29th, 2021 04:24

L. B. Mek said:

\'It doesn’t just kill now, it kills later, and it could kill centuries kills generations\'..
simply brilliant! dear poet

April 27th, 2021 05:11

L. B. Mek said:

fantastic detail, sadly however thorough your background study I fear there\'s an element of the story lost to the winds of time,
rarely can scholarly creativity match the absurdity of ill-fated reality..
I laud your literary ambition, I commend the integrity and respect you imbued into your delicately balanced write and mostly, I appreciate you choosing to share your unquestionable talent, thank you!

April 27th, 2021 03:32

SILENT SIGNS (Short story)
L. B. Mek said:

‘Anxiety, thy name is Mom!’ I told myself.
‘No my boys... My eyes are drenched by the unexpected rain.’
Pain, thy name is life!
(this is a rustic presentation, of insightfully enlightening wisdom, dear poet)..
\'indeed, we realise - far too late: just how much \'good luck\' - resides
in each unperturbed breath, we blink-quick and forget...

April 26th, 2021 05:10

SCENT OF A WOMAN (Short story)
L. B. Mek said:

firstly your title is the name of a film I really like, (Pacino\'s best performance if you ask me)
in which one of the memorable moments is when he addresses the absurd spineless politics within a school, if you\'re interested below is a link to the speech or better yet, check out the film to get the full context of the moment:
As for the great read you chose to share with us, I think the most impressive aspect of your style is how you manage to jump right into the storms-eye of the plot and grab your readers attention, before unfurling the meaningful message you want to convey,
I don\'t think that kind of natural skill can be learnt in a class, only earned: from those \'trial and error\' toils of an artist, struggling for the love of their Art!
thank you for choosing to share, dear poet

April 23rd, 2021 04:15

SCENT OF A WOMAN (Short story)
Fay Slimm. said:

A trial indeed escapes from your pen here that takes the reader along with the tragedy and need of handlling the young deceased....... the story title intrigued me before I began reading - what an apt and clever usage dear Prem - thank you for sharing this saddest of scenes when respect is most needed. .

April 22nd, 2021 13:40

STARDUST (Short story)
L. B. Mek said:

\'Anger is a dirty form of energy, which will retrace the origin\'

\'Woman looks so beautiful when she is angry! Try to make her laugh then! If possible, she will never leave you!\'..
again, such a wonderful read dear poet
meaningful in scope, depicting our everyday dance
between that potential we harbour, simultaneously
for both ying and yang..
thanks for sharing!

April 22nd, 2021 04:01

STARDUST (Short story)
Fay Slimm. said:

A compelling story Prem and told with your usual talent for making a tale from personal experience - interesting too that your neighbour Mamma asked you to write about her disappointing meeting with a would-be star who now lives by \"defooling\" - - thanks for sharing it on M.P.S.

April 21st, 2021 13:34

CALIPH AND THE MAID  (Short story)
L. B. Mek said:

so much to unpack, so little time to invest
let me surmise my assumptive initial reaction by simply stating: you Sir, have a gift for modernising didactic writing into an artform - all on its own..
thank you for choosing to share your wonderful talent

April 20th, 2021 04:52

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