Comments received on poems by Dhanya
Gift of Songs
Rocky Lagou said:
Wow Dhanya this was truly a powerful a piece. I mean the analogies you incorporate like the sea and the sky and the whole general meaning of this is spectacular. \"To trust the sky, is to trust you and to trust you is to trust me.\" I mean WOW that is truly some profound but wise advice right there. I would love to help you and give constructive criticism so I\'ll start with a line towards the end, \"I will write that now to myself and to you.\" I find it hard to \"critique\" other\'s work since poetry is truly a subjective thing and everyone expresses themselves differently, however, I feel that this line maybe is missing a little specificity. Now once again, since I\'m not the one writing this poem, I can\'t tell you whether or not this was intentional since sometimes poets leave out details in order to leave room for ambiguity and interpretation. But perhaps stating or maybe describing the \"that\" a little more will help support the strength of your message. This was great Dhanya! 💖
March 9th, 2022 10:54
Rocky Lagou said:
Wow Dhanya this was truly a powerful a piece. I mean the analogies you incorporate like the sea and the sky and the whole general meaning of this is spectacular. \"To trust the sky, is to trust you and to trust you is to trust me.\" I mean WOW that is truly some profound but wise advice right there. I would love to help you and give constructive criticism so I\'ll start with a line towards the end, \"I will write that now to myself and to you.\" I find it hard to \"critique\" other\'s work since poetry is truly a subjective thing and everyone expresses themselves differently, however, I feel that this line maybe is missing a little specificity. Now once again, since I\'m not the one writing this poem, I can\'t tell you whether or not this was intentional since sometimes poets leave out details in order to leave room for ambiguity and interpretation. But perhaps stating or maybe describing the \"that\" a little more will help support the strength of your message. This was great Dhanya! 💖
March 9th, 2022 10:54
Me in the Sea
Rocky Lagou said:
Wow Dhanya this was really beautiful! I felt the emotion your poem conveys and the line where you say that tears are the truest ink is so powerful. It\'s also so true. Bravo on the poem! 💖
February 28th, 2022 13:20
Rocky Lagou said:
Wow Dhanya this was really beautiful! I felt the emotion your poem conveys and the line where you say that tears are the truest ink is so powerful. It\'s also so true. Bravo on the poem! 💖
February 28th, 2022 13:20
Ever Wears
Dhanya said:
Heart Shaped Poem:
( I can only publish one poem a day this site says, but it does not work that way. )
I\'m a heart shaped star
and I\'m not sorry for who I am
I rock my life as a star should
A heart shaped star knows this is only how it could
A star made of money
Can\'t buy you
so there is more to see than you need to
A heart shaped star figures out since it knows
What all the hearts can\'t express because they are too much at rest
A heart that moves is one that cannot be moved easily
Like the sun where it shines
Star of our lives
A heart burns for you
And a heart knows what\'s true
Find in peace what you already knew
The heart always finds it new
A star shaped heart cannot break
A star shaped heart that I and any other being can most certainly make
With or without life\'s mistakes
But it grows out of this
out of nothing but bliss
Be aware of my kiss
to what you know could be your emptiness
January 16th, 2022 14:22
Dhanya said:
Heart Shaped Poem:
( I can only publish one poem a day this site says, but it does not work that way. )
I\'m a heart shaped star
and I\'m not sorry for who I am
I rock my life as a star should
A heart shaped star knows this is only how it could
A star made of money
Can\'t buy you
so there is more to see than you need to
A heart shaped star figures out since it knows
What all the hearts can\'t express because they are too much at rest
A heart that moves is one that cannot be moved easily
Like the sun where it shines
Star of our lives
A heart burns for you
And a heart knows what\'s true
Find in peace what you already knew
The heart always finds it new
A star shaped heart cannot break
A star shaped heart that I and any other being can most certainly make
With or without life\'s mistakes
But it grows out of this
out of nothing but bliss
Be aware of my kiss
to what you know could be your emptiness
January 16th, 2022 14:22
Dear you
spilleronsheet said:
Loyal and faithful are those lines
Selfless love defined beautifully in those lines
January 11th, 2022 03:47
spilleronsheet said:
Loyal and faithful are those lines
Selfless love defined beautifully in those lines
January 11th, 2022 03:47
Dear you
woundedheart said:
A very beautiful message within the last 4 lines of a sweet poem.
January 6th, 2022 06:54
woundedheart said:
A very beautiful message within the last 4 lines of a sweet poem.
January 6th, 2022 06:54
