Comments received on poems by audraburwell
Eclipse
Ryszard said:
Tender sensitivity entwined with stunning imagery. Great flow and a beautiful ending.
September 26th, 2022 14:35
Ryszard said:
Tender sensitivity entwined with stunning imagery. Great flow and a beautiful ending.
September 26th, 2022 14:35
Torn Between Two Worlds
GON said:
your grip on form is absolutely solid, but your figurative language is a little too abstract to be considered from more than one point of view. for instance, in the first stanza when you describe a metaphor for something might have more impact if you dropped the reference to the metaphor and just give us the metaphor as such.
September 1st, 2022 20:22
GON said:
your grip on form is absolutely solid, but your figurative language is a little too abstract to be considered from more than one point of view. for instance, in the first stanza when you describe a metaphor for something might have more impact if you dropped the reference to the metaphor and just give us the metaphor as such.
September 1st, 2022 20:22
Tenuous Threads
Rocky Lagou said:
\"Our receptors coded to self-destruct upon / Successful procreation...\"
This line literally grabbed me by the throat and made me spit out my kidney.
Geez this is one heck of a poem.
The way you epitomized humanity in such gloomy and terrifying ways is spectacular.
Brava dear poet!
August 18th, 2022 10:32
Rocky Lagou said:
\"Our receptors coded to self-destruct upon / Successful procreation...\"
This line literally grabbed me by the throat and made me spit out my kidney.
Geez this is one heck of a poem.
The way you epitomized humanity in such gloomy and terrifying ways is spectacular.
Brava dear poet!
August 18th, 2022 10:32
Solace of the Sea
L. B. Mek said:
maybe she\'s looking in the wrong place
we often look outwards, when
all our answers exist, within us..
(great imagery, again
thanks for sharing)
August 5th, 2022 02:25
L. B. Mek said:
maybe she\'s looking in the wrong place
we often look outwards, when
all our answers exist, within us..
(great imagery, again
thanks for sharing)
August 5th, 2022 02:25
Metamorphosis
L. B. Mek said:
I think this is missing the transformative part, to go with the title
\'the rebirth\' if you like..
still, this is packed with striking imagery;
an intriguing read on stages and finality
of a shattered heart\'s demise;
thanks for sharing, dear poet
August 4th, 2022 02:12
L. B. Mek said:
I think this is missing the transformative part, to go with the title
\'the rebirth\' if you like..
still, this is packed with striking imagery;
an intriguing read on stages and finality
of a shattered heart\'s demise;
thanks for sharing, dear poet
August 4th, 2022 02:12
Lucentra
Morgan B said:
Great to see another dragon refusing to succumb to the macho heroics of humanity :)
July 28th, 2022 21:22
Morgan B said:
Great to see another dragon refusing to succumb to the macho heroics of humanity :)
July 28th, 2022 21:22
Gunmetal Gray
L. B. Mek said:
\'Wrapped in resilience,
You bend but do not break.
Your eyes blaze with luster,
Setting free the light,
Trapped within molten metal,
A once-concealed ferocity,
Plundering the battlefield,
Of my stone-cold heart.\'
these lines, are a poem
on-to themselves..
really well written, thanks for sharing
dear poet
July 21st, 2022 01:43
L. B. Mek said:
\'Wrapped in resilience,
You bend but do not break.
Your eyes blaze with luster,
Setting free the light,
Trapped within molten metal,
A once-concealed ferocity,
Plundering the battlefield,
Of my stone-cold heart.\'
these lines, are a poem
on-to themselves..
really well written, thanks for sharing
dear poet
July 21st, 2022 01:43
Blood of Creation
Paul Bell said:
This feels like a fight with your alter ego with no overall winner in sight.
You feel the house of cards coming down.
June 30th, 2022 12:36
Paul Bell said:
This feels like a fight with your alter ego with no overall winner in sight.
You feel the house of cards coming down.
June 30th, 2022 12:36
Autopsy
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
(beware what yield, you ask
of hindsight
for in that rear view, mirror
where, all
is grotesque levels of transparent
truth itself, is distorted
into whirlwinds of plaguing, regret
undo, redo or delete
options
don\'t exist, in reality
even forgiveness, comes
with stipulations and gangrene
heart\'s
so if your crimes are as heinous
as that reflection, that greets you
then, may you be tormented
till the end of days
for
the memories, you cursed
your victims, with
will continue to tear them apart
till, their very last
while they strive to survive..
\'You trace the constellation of scars that
Line my thighs, a map of brutality, a tale
Of survival, decades of memories
Preserved in the ink staining my skin,
Secrets housed in their black outlines. \')
just a great write, forgive me
I couldn\'t help but scribble a little
something in reply
to show you, how your words
impacted me
thanks for sharing, dear poet
June 30th, 2022 03:29
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
(beware what yield, you ask
of hindsight
for in that rear view, mirror
where, all
is grotesque levels of transparent
truth itself, is distorted
into whirlwinds of plaguing, regret
undo, redo or delete
options
don\'t exist, in reality
even forgiveness, comes
with stipulations and gangrene
heart\'s
so if your crimes are as heinous
as that reflection, that greets you
then, may you be tormented
till the end of days
for
the memories, you cursed
your victims, with
will continue to tear them apart
till, their very last
while they strive to survive..
\'You trace the constellation of scars that
Line my thighs, a map of brutality, a tale
Of survival, decades of memories
Preserved in the ink staining my skin,
Secrets housed in their black outlines. \')
just a great write, forgive me
I couldn\'t help but scribble a little
something in reply
to show you, how your words
impacted me
thanks for sharing, dear poet
June 30th, 2022 03:29
Autopsy
Jaxxie said:
I loved the horrific imagery in this poem. You placed the perfect amount of edge and detail between each and every line. Excellent work.
June 29th, 2022 21:22
Jaxxie said:
I loved the horrific imagery in this poem. You placed the perfect amount of edge and detail between each and every line. Excellent work.
June 29th, 2022 21:22
Autopsy
Raven333 said:
All though it was a little scary and very descriptive I liked this poem. nice job
June 29th, 2022 18:53
Raven333 said:
All though it was a little scary and very descriptive I liked this poem. nice job
June 29th, 2022 18:53
