Comments received on poems by David Wakeling
Giving up the fight
Goldfinch60 said:
Keep smiling David, life is good.
Andy
October 26th, 2024 01:17
Goldfinch60 said:
Keep smiling David, life is good.
Andy
October 26th, 2024 01:17
Giving up the fight
sorenbarrett said:
You have hit upon an often neglected issue recognizing our past mistakes. The metaphor of the parrot was masterful and well crafted as well as poetic. The contrast of white at night was one thing, a parrot flighing at night is out of the normal and to be lost for a bird would only be understandable at night. It serves as a great symbol here. Returning to the past life and becoming content recognizing what one once had, Gratitude such a commonly neglected issue. Very nicely constructed with a good message.
October 25th, 2024 18:22
sorenbarrett said:
You have hit upon an often neglected issue recognizing our past mistakes. The metaphor of the parrot was masterful and well crafted as well as poetic. The contrast of white at night was one thing, a parrot flighing at night is out of the normal and to be lost for a bird would only be understandable at night. It serves as a great symbol here. Returning to the past life and becoming content recognizing what one once had, Gratitude such a commonly neglected issue. Very nicely constructed with a good message.
October 25th, 2024 18:22
The Tide has gone out.
Goldfinch60 said:
So very true foe many people David but it just should not be this way.
Andy
October 25th, 2024 01:06
Goldfinch60 said:
So very true foe many people David but it just should not be this way.
Andy
October 25th, 2024 01:06
The Tide has gone out.
Cheeky Missy said:
Wow. This is awesome. Like by line loaded to effect in charmingly rhymed alternating couplets communicating a mouthful, the impact resonates beyond this page, so excellently rendered with superb imagery. Thank you so very much for sharing.
October 24th, 2024 08:45
Cheeky Missy said:
Wow. This is awesome. Like by line loaded to effect in charmingly rhymed alternating couplets communicating a mouthful, the impact resonates beyond this page, so excellently rendered with superb imagery. Thank you so very much for sharing.
October 24th, 2024 08:45
The Tide has gone out.
sorenbarrett said:
That was good stuff. Both the poem and what ever you smoked before you wrote it. Full of wild images that fell out like a drunk from a phone booth. Lovely
October 24th, 2024 05:53
sorenbarrett said:
That was good stuff. Both the poem and what ever you smoked before you wrote it. Full of wild images that fell out like a drunk from a phone booth. Lovely
October 24th, 2024 05:53
Fallujah Iraq April 2007
Doggerel Dave said:
The price of war I know. Explores the personal heart of it.
October 24th, 2024 00:35
Doggerel Dave said:
The price of war I know. Explores the personal heart of it.
October 24th, 2024 00:35
Fallujah Iraq April 2007
sorenbarrett said:
Vivid, haunting, sad this poem as a letter to mother is heart rending.
October 23rd, 2024 18:12
sorenbarrett said:
Vivid, haunting, sad this poem as a letter to mother is heart rending.
October 23rd, 2024 18:12
Dad and the creaky window.
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful sad words David.
Andy
October 23rd, 2024 01:33
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful sad words David.
Andy
October 23rd, 2024 01:33
Dad and the creaky window.
sorenbarrett said:
A most interesting tribute so to speak. It has that tongue in cheek kind of attitude.
October 22nd, 2024 20:21
sorenbarrett said:
A most interesting tribute so to speak. It has that tongue in cheek kind of attitude.
October 22nd, 2024 20:21
The Hand.
Goldfinch60 said:
Touch is so important in many ways in our lives DAvid.
Andy
October 22nd, 2024 01:46
Goldfinch60 said:
Touch is so important in many ways in our lives DAvid.
Andy
October 22nd, 2024 01:46
The Truth
sorenbarrett said:
The first sentence is my favorite line. Powerful and unexpected but rings true. An unconventional look at the issue of God or no God and what follows psychologically. Very well done
October 21st, 2024 05:08
sorenbarrett said:
The first sentence is my favorite line. Powerful and unexpected but rings true. An unconventional look at the issue of God or no God and what follows psychologically. Very well done
October 21st, 2024 05:08
The Hand.
sorenbarrett said:
Tribute to a part of us we often take for granted unil we loose it. Some powerful lines (a tool to pluck the eye when sorrow is past thought) great use of opposites (and build by its destruction) Very nicely done.
October 20th, 2024 17:16
sorenbarrett said:
Tribute to a part of us we often take for granted unil we loose it. Some powerful lines (a tool to pluck the eye when sorrow is past thought) great use of opposites (and build by its destruction) Very nicely done.
October 20th, 2024 17:16
The Lion and The Lily.
Bobby O said:
You are such a tremendous wordsmith
Lion stood supreme
The way you engage the reader with magnetically designed cadence.
Many props my friend
October 20th, 2024 02:40
Bobby O said:
You are such a tremendous wordsmith
Lion stood supreme
The way you engage the reader with magnetically designed cadence.
Many props my friend
October 20th, 2024 02:40
The Lion and The Lily.
Teddy.15 said:
May I say absolutely stunning a pleasure to read and most enjoyed. Imagery splendid. 🌹
October 19th, 2024 15:16
Teddy.15 said:
May I say absolutely stunning a pleasure to read and most enjoyed. Imagery splendid. 🌹
October 19th, 2024 15:16
The Lion and The Lily.
sorenbarrett said:
This poem with a moral reads smooth as silk with its meter and rhyme. Nicley done
October 19th, 2024 05:23
sorenbarrett said:
This poem with a moral reads smooth as silk with its meter and rhyme. Nicley done
October 19th, 2024 05:23
The Heart.
arqios said:
There is that certain beauty that puts our wanting to rest! Spot on DW!
October 18th, 2024 07:34
arqios said:
There is that certain beauty that puts our wanting to rest! Spot on DW!
October 18th, 2024 07:34
The Heart.
sorenbarrett said:
\"Even a noble lighthouse can not shine upon itself\" great line as is that whole stanza. Very nice David
October 18th, 2024 05:04
sorenbarrett said:
\"Even a noble lighthouse can not shine upon itself\" great line as is that whole stanza. Very nice David
October 18th, 2024 05:04
The Love Note
sorenbarrett said:
A very complicated relationship here.Love/hate (disapointment)
October 17th, 2024 20:44
sorenbarrett said:
A very complicated relationship here.Love/hate (disapointment)
October 17th, 2024 20:44
Same Sky Different Rain.
NafisaSB said:
lovely poem...no words to describe the impact it had..
October 17th, 2024 06:27
NafisaSB said:
lovely poem...no words to describe the impact it had..
October 17th, 2024 06:27
Same Sky Different Rain.
Dan Williams said:
This is first class work on a worthy subject. Nice phrasing and imagery.
October 16th, 2024 21:02
Dan Williams said:
This is first class work on a worthy subject. Nice phrasing and imagery.
October 16th, 2024 21:02
Same Sky Different Rain.
arqios said:
A differing rain however the variance of method, for myself a ‘poetic corroboree’ online in what could be deemed as a digital desert of sorts in some areas. Forgive the tangent, tracing a parallel of visualisation.
October 16th, 2024 06:55
arqios said:
A differing rain however the variance of method, for myself a ‘poetic corroboree’ online in what could be deemed as a digital desert of sorts in some areas. Forgive the tangent, tracing a parallel of visualisation.
October 16th, 2024 06:55
Same Sky Different Rain.
sorenbarrett said:
Written with care and feeling this fine poem brings me to the location. Some great lines are contained in this work of art. \"the place where love waits for its time\" \"The long walk from their dreaming\" \"They turn the logs for love is a burning whose warmth lies beneath\" Even the title is a great line. The rhyme pattern melts into this poem and is covered by the imagery and great lines. Although never having been there I feel that I have
October 16th, 2024 05:40
sorenbarrett said:
Written with care and feeling this fine poem brings me to the location. Some great lines are contained in this work of art. \"the place where love waits for its time\" \"The long walk from their dreaming\" \"They turn the logs for love is a burning whose warmth lies beneath\" Even the title is a great line. The rhyme pattern melts into this poem and is covered by the imagery and great lines. Although never having been there I feel that I have
October 16th, 2024 05:40
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