Comments received on poems by David Wakeling
Song to Julie
sorenbarrett said:
This is a sad poem of a love doomed and a life lost. So nicely worked with chorus it well could be a song. A fave David
May 15th, 2026 06:29
sorenbarrett said:
This is a sad poem of a love doomed and a life lost. So nicely worked with chorus it well could be a song. A fave David
May 15th, 2026 06:29
The Pirate\'s Path
Tristan Robert Lange said:
David, this has such a weary, hard-earned view of love running through it. The pirate and sea imagery gives the whole poem a restless, doomed momentum that really fits the theme. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
May 14th, 2026 11:21
Tristan Robert Lange said:
David, this has such a weary, hard-earned view of love running through it. The pirate and sea imagery gives the whole poem a restless, doomed momentum that really fits the theme. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
May 14th, 2026 11:21
The Pirate\'s Path
sorenbarrett said:
David this is brilliant!! An atypical sonnet that lays it on the line. Powerful yet so well rhymed and put together. One I wish I had written it contains some amazing lines
\"Those who dare to Love follow the Pirate’s path,
Searching for a buried treasure that is not real.\"
To me this is a great opening that is a treasure itself such a jaunty start with its own buried treasure. We all search for our fantasies and find that they are not what we thought they would be.
\"The young girl wanting a baby falls for Love at first sight,
And sits by the fire with the other cold women filled with hate.\"
So many delusions of love ever after pulled down by dark reality (often with the birth of a child and its responsibilities that wedge themselves between the couple.
The next stanza is all too true and speaks for itself.
Such a great metaphor in the next stanza with the ocean a great image deep, dangerous, dark, and your final rhyme so well placed in the word ocean.
The last couplet is great advice and finishes it well. Very nicely done and if I could I would give it a second fave for its organization as well as its rhyme and message
May 14th, 2026 07:31
sorenbarrett said:
David this is brilliant!! An atypical sonnet that lays it on the line. Powerful yet so well rhymed and put together. One I wish I had written it contains some amazing lines
\"Those who dare to Love follow the Pirate’s path,
Searching for a buried treasure that is not real.\"
To me this is a great opening that is a treasure itself such a jaunty start with its own buried treasure. We all search for our fantasies and find that they are not what we thought they would be.
\"The young girl wanting a baby falls for Love at first sight,
And sits by the fire with the other cold women filled with hate.\"
So many delusions of love ever after pulled down by dark reality (often with the birth of a child and its responsibilities that wedge themselves between the couple.
The next stanza is all too true and speaks for itself.
Such a great metaphor in the next stanza with the ocean a great image deep, dangerous, dark, and your final rhyme so well placed in the word ocean.
The last couplet is great advice and finishes it well. Very nicely done and if I could I would give it a second fave for its organization as well as its rhyme and message
May 14th, 2026 07:31
Seeing beyond.
sorenbarrett said:
Haunting and well written David it carries a powerful message
May 13th, 2026 16:11
sorenbarrett said:
Haunting and well written David it carries a powerful message
May 13th, 2026 16:11
Seeing beyond.
Tristan Robert Lange said:
David, this feels immense…philosophical, spiritual, and almost prophetic all at once. The poem moves like a meditation on perception itself…who sees, who refuses to see, and what it costs to speak beyond the accepted script. “The light of the invisible fire” burns through the whole piece beautifully. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
May 13th, 2026 15:58
Tristan Robert Lange said:
David, this feels immense…philosophical, spiritual, and almost prophetic all at once. The poem moves like a meditation on perception itself…who sees, who refuses to see, and what it costs to speak beyond the accepted script. “The light of the invisible fire” burns through the whole piece beautifully. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
May 13th, 2026 15:58
Seeing beyond.
arqios said:
Breathtaking take of that ‘light of invisible fire’ 🙏🏻🕊️
May 13th, 2026 11:40
arqios said:
Breathtaking take of that ‘light of invisible fire’ 🙏🏻🕊️
May 13th, 2026 11:40
Sometimes it rains at night.
Tristan Robert Lange said:
David, this carries a powerful sense of existential dread throughout. I especially like how the poem moves from personal fear into something almost cosmic and theological…God absent, stars dying, the moon disappointed, nature itself becoming threatening after dark. And the final contrast between the beautiful daylight field and the terror hidden within it at night closes the piece with chilling force. Strong work, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️
May 12th, 2026 10:05
Tristan Robert Lange said:
David, this carries a powerful sense of existential dread throughout. I especially like how the poem moves from personal fear into something almost cosmic and theological…God absent, stars dying, the moon disappointed, nature itself becoming threatening after dark. And the final contrast between the beautiful daylight field and the terror hidden within it at night closes the piece with chilling force. Strong work, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️
May 12th, 2026 10:05
Sometimes it rains at night.
sorenbarrett said:
Here a dichotomy is painted in day and night calm and fear beauty and ugly. Nicely done
May 12th, 2026 05:09
sorenbarrett said:
Here a dichotomy is painted in day and night calm and fear beauty and ugly. Nicely done
May 12th, 2026 05:09
Sometimes it rains at night.
orchidee said:
Good write D. We best keep an umbrella by our bed in case we go out at night. lol.
May 12th, 2026 02:38
orchidee said:
Good write D. We best keep an umbrella by our bed in case we go out at night. lol.
May 12th, 2026 02:38
Karen Anne Carpenter (March 2 1950-February 4 1983)
Tristan Robert Lange said:
David, this is such a heartfelt remembrance. Karen wasn’t just technically gifted…there was an ache and sincerity in her voice that made people feel understood. \"Rainy Days and Mondays\" especially carries that quiet loneliness in a way few singers could deliver. And…what gifted a drummer she was too. Beautiful tribute, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
May 11th, 2026 19:24
Tristan Robert Lange said:
David, this is such a heartfelt remembrance. Karen wasn’t just technically gifted…there was an ache and sincerity in her voice that made people feel understood. \"Rainy Days and Mondays\" especially carries that quiet loneliness in a way few singers could deliver. And…what gifted a drummer she was too. Beautiful tribute, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
May 11th, 2026 19:24
Karen Anne Carpenter (March 2 1950-February 4 1983)
orchidee said:
Bit of french there - compadre?! heehee.
Good write D. Yes, she won\'t stop singing. :)
May 11th, 2026 11:58
orchidee said:
Bit of french there - compadre?! heehee.
Good write D. Yes, she won\'t stop singing. :)
May 11th, 2026 11:58
Karen Anne Carpenter (March 2 1950-February 4 1983)
sorenbarrett said:
Always loved the Carpenters even when it was not popular to do so. Nicely composed tribute to a most wonderful voice and singer.
May 11th, 2026 04:44
sorenbarrett said:
Always loved the Carpenters even when it was not popular to do so. Nicely composed tribute to a most wonderful voice and singer.
May 11th, 2026 04:44
Karen Anne Carpenter (March 2 1950-February 4 1983)
arqios said:
One of her most memorable. Used to know all the lyrics, even have the long-playing vinyl records.
May 11th, 2026 03:07
arqios said:
One of her most memorable. Used to know all the lyrics, even have the long-playing vinyl records.
May 11th, 2026 03:07
The New Commandments.
sorenbarrett said:
And as it was with all the others no one paid attention or kept them. Well written
May 10th, 2026 04:31
sorenbarrett said:
And as it was with all the others no one paid attention or kept them. Well written
May 10th, 2026 04:31
The Purpose and the Enslavement.
Katie B. said:
Beautifulk poem and wonderful message. Kudos
May 9th, 2026 17:18
Katie B. said:
Beautifulk poem and wonderful message. Kudos
May 9th, 2026 17:18
The Purpose and the Enslavement.
sorenbarrett said:
A wonderful poem in message and wording and a fave
May 9th, 2026 05:00
sorenbarrett said:
A wonderful poem in message and wording and a fave
May 9th, 2026 05:00
La La La
sorenbarrett said:
Surreal, satirical, personified a poem of metaphor enacted in poetic cartoon. Well written David
May 8th, 2026 04:03
sorenbarrett said:
Surreal, satirical, personified a poem of metaphor enacted in poetic cartoon. Well written David
May 8th, 2026 04:03
The Spirit and the Science
Friendship said:
A powerful story. Your story explores the devastating emotional turmoil of a mother faced with the premature birth of her child and the heart-wrenching decision of whether to allow her baby to pass away peacefully or to keep him on life support. It delves into themes of love, loss, faith, and the struggle for acceptance in the face of tragedy.
May 7th, 2026 08:46
Friendship said:
A powerful story. Your story explores the devastating emotional turmoil of a mother faced with the premature birth of her child and the heart-wrenching decision of whether to allow her baby to pass away peacefully or to keep him on life support. It delves into themes of love, loss, faith, and the struggle for acceptance in the face of tragedy.
May 7th, 2026 08:46
The Spirit and the Science
arqios said:
Touch situations make lives like a tumble dry ride 🕊️🙏
May 7th, 2026 06:39
arqios said:
Touch situations make lives like a tumble dry ride 🕊️🙏
May 7th, 2026 06:39
The Spirit and the Science
Katie B. said:
Moving illustration of the sorrow we experience in life. Excellent write.
May 7th, 2026 05:57
Katie B. said:
Moving illustration of the sorrow we experience in life. Excellent write.
May 7th, 2026 05:57
The Spirit and the Science
sorenbarrett said:
A sad dilema where choice is lifted and guilt reprieved. Well written David
May 7th, 2026 04:10
sorenbarrett said:
A sad dilema where choice is lifted and guilt reprieved. Well written David
May 7th, 2026 04:10
The Spirit and the Science
ms.divine said:
aware of the spiritual conscious mind and the knowing of life and death
May 7th, 2026 00:25
ms.divine said:
aware of the spiritual conscious mind and the knowing of life and death
May 7th, 2026 00:25
Sometimes the Ambulance comes to Pensive Street.
Katie B. said:
Moving and beautifully written.
May 6th, 2026 08:15
Katie B. said:
Moving and beautifully written.
May 6th, 2026 08:15
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