Comments received on poems by Tooway
Is Poetry Salvation
arqios said:
Your poem reads like a wandering hand brushing through a crowd — catching fragments of truth, deception, connection, and the quiet hope that conversation might stitch meaning into the noise. It also declares salvation isn’t a single revelation — it’s the act of looking, prying, sharing, hoping. The “path” at the end feels tentative, not yet paved, but still worth seeking. There’s a sense that poetry isn’t a final answer so much as a lantern we pass between us in the dark. The Author\'s note appears to be a key: saying, \'Despite all the mess we just traced through, you matter to me.\' It doesn’t erase the questions but coexists with them, like a lantern held up in the fog. In a way, it’s the poem’s last line without being in the poem at all, the aftertaste that lingers and quietly answers: \'if there’s any salvation here, it’s connection.\'
August 18th, 2025 23:32
arqios said:
Your poem reads like a wandering hand brushing through a crowd — catching fragments of truth, deception, connection, and the quiet hope that conversation might stitch meaning into the noise. It also declares salvation isn’t a single revelation — it’s the act of looking, prying, sharing, hoping. The “path” at the end feels tentative, not yet paved, but still worth seeking. There’s a sense that poetry isn’t a final answer so much as a lantern we pass between us in the dark. The Author\'s note appears to be a key: saying, \'Despite all the mess we just traced through, you matter to me.\' It doesn’t erase the questions but coexists with them, like a lantern held up in the fog. In a way, it’s the poem’s last line without being in the poem at all, the aftertaste that lingers and quietly answers: \'if there’s any salvation here, it’s connection.\'
August 18th, 2025 23:32
Is Poetry Salvation
Poetic Licence said:
A sense of trying very hard to make a relationship work and asking for a bit more understanding, nicely expressed and written
August 18th, 2025 20:21
Poetic Licence said:
A sense of trying very hard to make a relationship work and asking for a bit more understanding, nicely expressed and written
August 18th, 2025 20:21
Is Poetry Salvation
sorenbarrett said:
A poem of relationships and striving to make things work. Nicely done
August 18th, 2025 18:05
sorenbarrett said:
A poem of relationships and striving to make things work. Nicely done
August 18th, 2025 18:05
Here God Lies – In the Eyes of a Failure
Poetic Licence said:
An interesting and enjoyable read, everything and one has flaw\'s, nicely expressed and written
August 18th, 2025 00:13
Poetic Licence said:
An interesting and enjoyable read, everything and one has flaw\'s, nicely expressed and written
August 18th, 2025 00:13
Here God Lies – In the Eyes of a Failure
sorenbarrett said:
A great perception of creation no better that the creator. Nicely done
August 17th, 2025 18:47
sorenbarrett said:
A great perception of creation no better that the creator. Nicely done
August 17th, 2025 18:47
Failed a failure
NinjaGirl said:
Failed but not a failure.. I considered myself a failure for the inability to take my own life, but perhaps I\'ve been successful at one thing, failing. And maybe with those failures we can build something more--a perspective nobody else has. Beautiful write
November 11th, 2024 21:56
NinjaGirl said:
Failed but not a failure.. I considered myself a failure for the inability to take my own life, but perhaps I\'ve been successful at one thing, failing. And maybe with those failures we can build something more--a perspective nobody else has. Beautiful write
November 11th, 2024 21:56
Not even a dead muse could do more (Things hurt, mentally and physically)
𓆩Mase𓆪 said:
It\'s BEAUTIFUL!!!❤️🙏🌹
June 5th, 2024 00:07
𓆩Mase𓆪 said:
It\'s BEAUTIFUL!!!❤️🙏🌹
June 5th, 2024 00:07
