Comments received on poems by Tooway
Pretender
NinjaGirl said:
Guilt and impostor-syndrome are so real, it\'s difficult to remember to take control of our own lives. I really like the unique format of this poem.
September 5th, 2025 14:16
NinjaGirl said:
Guilt and impostor-syndrome are so real, it\'s difficult to remember to take control of our own lives. I really like the unique format of this poem.
September 5th, 2025 14:16
Pretender
sorenbarrett said:
Time an illusion no beginning or end and we in the middle by definition. Better to pretend it does not exist another human misconception. Inside outside all the same another delusion being who you are is the only solution. A fine write
September 5th, 2025 12:32
sorenbarrett said:
Time an illusion no beginning or end and we in the middle by definition. Better to pretend it does not exist another human misconception. Inside outside all the same another delusion being who you are is the only solution. A fine write
September 5th, 2025 12:32
Lucky, If Only for an hour
sorenbarrett said:
This poem sends me feelings of broken concentration, a feeling of falling and loss of control. Panicky
September 4th, 2025 18:24
sorenbarrett said:
This poem sends me feelings of broken concentration, a feeling of falling and loss of control. Panicky
September 4th, 2025 18:24
Is Poetry Salvation
Cheeky Missy said:
Funny, concluding as you have, I\'ve now this image of trying impossibly to force a soft and squishy shapeless thing into a rigid, cubical box which is evidently too small, painfully too small for the same. Dunno why. Beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and a poignancy which seems charmingly frank. Thank you for sharing.
August 23rd, 2025 23:36
Cheeky Missy said:
Funny, concluding as you have, I\'ve now this image of trying impossibly to force a soft and squishy shapeless thing into a rigid, cubical box which is evidently too small, painfully too small for the same. Dunno why. Beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and a poignancy which seems charmingly frank. Thank you for sharing.
August 23rd, 2025 23:36
Is Poetry Salvation
arqios said:
Your poem reads like a wandering hand brushing through a crowd — catching fragments of truth, deception, connection, and the quiet hope that conversation might stitch meaning into the noise. It also declares salvation isn’t a single revelation — it’s the act of looking, prying, sharing, hoping. The “path” at the end feels tentative, not yet paved, but still worth seeking. There’s a sense that poetry isn’t a final answer so much as a lantern we pass between us in the dark. The Author\'s note appears to be a key: saying, \'Despite all the mess we just traced through, you matter to me.\' It doesn’t erase the questions but coexists with them, like a lantern held up in the fog. In a way, it’s the poem’s last line without being in the poem at all, the aftertaste that lingers and quietly answers: \'if there’s any salvation here, it’s connection.\'
August 18th, 2025 23:32
arqios said:
Your poem reads like a wandering hand brushing through a crowd — catching fragments of truth, deception, connection, and the quiet hope that conversation might stitch meaning into the noise. It also declares salvation isn’t a single revelation — it’s the act of looking, prying, sharing, hoping. The “path” at the end feels tentative, not yet paved, but still worth seeking. There’s a sense that poetry isn’t a final answer so much as a lantern we pass between us in the dark. The Author\'s note appears to be a key: saying, \'Despite all the mess we just traced through, you matter to me.\' It doesn’t erase the questions but coexists with them, like a lantern held up in the fog. In a way, it’s the poem’s last line without being in the poem at all, the aftertaste that lingers and quietly answers: \'if there’s any salvation here, it’s connection.\'
August 18th, 2025 23:32
Is Poetry Salvation
Poetic Licence said:
A sense of trying very hard to make a relationship work and asking for a bit more understanding, nicely expressed and written
August 18th, 2025 20:21
Poetic Licence said:
A sense of trying very hard to make a relationship work and asking for a bit more understanding, nicely expressed and written
August 18th, 2025 20:21
Is Poetry Salvation
sorenbarrett said:
A poem of relationships and striving to make things work. Nicely done
August 18th, 2025 18:05
sorenbarrett said:
A poem of relationships and striving to make things work. Nicely done
August 18th, 2025 18:05
Here God Lies – In the Eyes of a Failure
Poetic Licence said:
An interesting and enjoyable read, everything and one has flaw\'s, nicely expressed and written
August 18th, 2025 00:13
Poetic Licence said:
An interesting and enjoyable read, everything and one has flaw\'s, nicely expressed and written
August 18th, 2025 00:13
Here God Lies – In the Eyes of a Failure
sorenbarrett said:
A great perception of creation no better that the creator. Nicely done
August 17th, 2025 18:47
sorenbarrett said:
A great perception of creation no better that the creator. Nicely done
August 17th, 2025 18:47
Failed a failure
NinjaGirl said:
Failed but not a failure.. I considered myself a failure for the inability to take my own life, but perhaps I\'ve been successful at one thing, failing. And maybe with those failures we can build something more--a perspective nobody else has. Beautiful write
November 11th, 2024 21:56
NinjaGirl said:
Failed but not a failure.. I considered myself a failure for the inability to take my own life, but perhaps I\'ve been successful at one thing, failing. And maybe with those failures we can build something more--a perspective nobody else has. Beautiful write
November 11th, 2024 21:56
Not even a dead muse could do more (Things hurt, mentally and physically)
𓆩Mase𓆪 said:
It\'s BEAUTIFUL!!!❤️🙏🌹
June 5th, 2024 00:07
𓆩Mase𓆪 said:
It\'s BEAUTIFUL!!!❤️🙏🌹
June 5th, 2024 00:07
