Comments received on poems by LaRose
Sweet Dreams
Severus Alexander said:
The only practice which is absolutely necessary for good poetry is honesty; to speak from one's heart. I admire the message of your poem, but I fin it lacking in symmetry. You should attempt to create regular notes of assonance, or fully commit to the discordant notes which are already present. In addition, while I myself have practiced a free style similar to this, I would advise the use of a specific meter for beginning poets, such as yourself, to stimulate fluidity for the reader. However, as poetry is primarily a tool for introspection, for the expression of wonder and beauty in the world around us, and in our minds, hearts, and souls, there is really no truly right way to write poetry. You should write in whichever way feels the most true to your heart.
March 24th, 2016 08:13
Severus Alexander said:
The only practice which is absolutely necessary for good poetry is honesty; to speak from one's heart. I admire the message of your poem, but I fin it lacking in symmetry. You should attempt to create regular notes of assonance, or fully commit to the discordant notes which are already present. In addition, while I myself have practiced a free style similar to this, I would advise the use of a specific meter for beginning poets, such as yourself, to stimulate fluidity for the reader. However, as poetry is primarily a tool for introspection, for the expression of wonder and beauty in the world around us, and in our minds, hearts, and souls, there is really no truly right way to write poetry. You should write in whichever way feels the most true to your heart.
March 24th, 2016 08:13
Awakening Me
MsMermaid said:
There's a saying, "Taking poetic license". That is supposed to cover many grammatical and other type errors. However, it doesn't cover everything, and "you've did" and "you come" in your poetry lines are two of them. If you remove the 've, from "You've did" and put it on the "You come", it would be grammatically correct, less distracting, and more pleasurable to read. The thoughts you penned are very cool otherwise.
March 22nd, 2016 07:24
MsMermaid said:
There's a saying, "Taking poetic license". That is supposed to cover many grammatical and other type errors. However, it doesn't cover everything, and "you've did" and "you come" in your poetry lines are two of them. If you remove the 've, from "You've did" and put it on the "You come", it would be grammatically correct, less distracting, and more pleasurable to read. The thoughts you penned are very cool otherwise.
March 22nd, 2016 07:24
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