Comments received on poems by Spencer Wilhelm
Life
arqios said:
I like it as it is. But should you seek further consideration, here are a few observations: Clarify Imagery: Some lines could benefit from more clarity. For instance, \"Seen on patrol nigh every day\" might be rephrased to better convey the man\'s daily routine and its impact on him.
Consistency in Tense: Ensure that the tense is consistent throughout the poem. For example, \"He\'s sought to fix his wrong\" and \"How does he stand so long?\" could be adjusted for tense consistency.
Expanding Themes: You could delve deeper into the themes of honour and redemption. Adding a few more lines or stanzas to explore the man\'s internal conflict and his motivations could enhance the emotional depth of the poem. Just a few thoughts.
January 24th, 2025 21:57
arqios said:
I like it as it is. But should you seek further consideration, here are a few observations: Clarify Imagery: Some lines could benefit from more clarity. For instance, \"Seen on patrol nigh every day\" might be rephrased to better convey the man\'s daily routine and its impact on him.
Consistency in Tense: Ensure that the tense is consistent throughout the poem. For example, \"He\'s sought to fix his wrong\" and \"How does he stand so long?\" could be adjusted for tense consistency.
Expanding Themes: You could delve deeper into the themes of honour and redemption. Adding a few more lines or stanzas to explore the man\'s internal conflict and his motivations could enhance the emotional depth of the poem. Just a few thoughts.
January 24th, 2025 21:57
Life
TobaniNataiella said:
I am no expert at all, but i like this piece of poetry, you feel the desperation and the fear of the man as you read through the poem, i enjoyed the read
January 24th, 2025 17:42
TobaniNataiella said:
I am no expert at all, but i like this piece of poetry, you feel the desperation and the fear of the man as you read through the poem, i enjoyed the read
January 24th, 2025 17:42
Dialogue
arqios said:
Very moving and very visually appealing as well! 🙏🏻👍🏻🕊
January 23rd, 2025 16:37
arqios said:
Very moving and very visually appealing as well! 🙏🏻👍🏻🕊
January 23rd, 2025 16:37
What is poetry?
vicecream said:
I recently heard someone say something along the lines of poetry being the use of language not shackled by its own rules
December 12th, 2024 09:38
vicecream said:
I recently heard someone say something along the lines of poetry being the use of language not shackled by its own rules
December 12th, 2024 09:38
What is poetry?
Cheeky Missy said:
Read, read, read the poets of centuries ago, if you listen closely, you may discover why I insist the poets came from the ancient prophets. Yes, I\'d call your post poetry, but I carnot delineate why. Hopefully that still makes elusive sense.
December 12th, 2024 02:05
Cheeky Missy said:
Read, read, read the poets of centuries ago, if you listen closely, you may discover why I insist the poets came from the ancient prophets. Yes, I\'d call your post poetry, but I carnot delineate why. Hopefully that still makes elusive sense.
December 12th, 2024 02:05
What is poetry?
TobaniNataiella said:
My perspective all writings can be considered poetry, poem raises a good point because a lot people do ask that question, enjoyed the read.
December 11th, 2024 03:23
TobaniNataiella said:
My perspective all writings can be considered poetry, poem raises a good point because a lot people do ask that question, enjoyed the read.
December 11th, 2024 03:23
Midterms
arqios said:
Even scholastic overstimulation has a detrimental effect on quite every scholar, both seasoned and ill equipped.
December 6th, 2024 14:48
arqios said:
Even scholastic overstimulation has a detrimental effect on quite every scholar, both seasoned and ill equipped.
December 6th, 2024 14:48
Confession
TobaniNataiella said:
You can feel the sentiment in every word, good read
December 2nd, 2024 21:12
TobaniNataiella said:
You can feel the sentiment in every word, good read
December 2nd, 2024 21:12
Exhaustion
2781 said:
The Sabbath was made for man, not man for the Sabbath.
November 10th, 2024 00:29
2781 said:
The Sabbath was made for man, not man for the Sabbath.
November 10th, 2024 00:29
Homeless
rebellion_in_sanity said:
Fantastic poem, so glad I chanced upon it
November 5th, 2024 06:58
rebellion_in_sanity said:
Fantastic poem, so glad I chanced upon it
November 5th, 2024 06:58
Puff of Wind
Cheeky Missy said:
Hmm, seems yours truly has been dancing on the edge of the same for years...the warning in conclusion now begins to haunt me. Fascinating and excellently rendered with haunting poignancy and perfect imagery. Thank you for sharing.
October 27th, 2024 16:22
Cheeky Missy said:
Hmm, seems yours truly has been dancing on the edge of the same for years...the warning in conclusion now begins to haunt me. Fascinating and excellently rendered with haunting poignancy and perfect imagery. Thank you for sharing.
October 27th, 2024 16:22
