Comments received on poems by Vipassana
the end of history
sorenbarrett said:
Most creative, your line, endings and beginnings we’ve this poem from line to line stanza to stanza. It tells its tail in an almost surreal manner. Well written.
April 7th, 2026 02:47
sorenbarrett said:
Most creative, your line, endings and beginnings we’ve this poem from line to line stanza to stanza. It tells its tail in an almost surreal manner. Well written.
April 7th, 2026 02:47
Loss
sorenbarrett said:
I see that this may be taken in two different ways one fantastic and alien and the other microscopic and the creation of bacteria. In either case the poem expresses a sense of horror at what might be inside the closet an alien object or being or something rotting and decomposing. An ugly surprise either way. Well done
April 3rd, 2026 04:01
sorenbarrett said:
I see that this may be taken in two different ways one fantastic and alien and the other microscopic and the creation of bacteria. In either case the poem expresses a sense of horror at what might be inside the closet an alien object or being or something rotting and decomposing. An ugly surprise either way. Well done
April 3rd, 2026 04:01
The invention of history.
Friendship said:
Nicely said. Your poem explores the juxtaposition of the mundane and the absurd, highlighting the unpredictability of life and the often surreal nature of existence.
April 2nd, 2026 18:47
Friendship said:
Nicely said. Your poem explores the juxtaposition of the mundane and the absurd, highlighting the unpredictability of life and the often surreal nature of existence.
April 2nd, 2026 18:47
The invention of history.
sorenbarrett said:
This story builds line upon line as if different people were asked to add the next piece they seem free floating thoughts each connected to the last in an absurd world where proximity is all that counts. It is clever in its construction presenting one thought per line as if each line is a lego brick all of different colors stacked and woven into a tower. The end does bring us back though and puts the last brick in place. Well done
April 2nd, 2026 04:19
sorenbarrett said:
This story builds line upon line as if different people were asked to add the next piece they seem free floating thoughts each connected to the last in an absurd world where proximity is all that counts. It is clever in its construction presenting one thought per line as if each line is a lego brick all of different colors stacked and woven into a tower. The end does bring us back though and puts the last brick in place. Well done
April 2nd, 2026 04:19
The invention of history.
Doggerel Dave said:
Dunno about history and it\'s invention here, but a very surreal and entertaining little ride.
April 2nd, 2026 01:02
Doggerel Dave said:
Dunno about history and it\'s invention here, but a very surreal and entertaining little ride.
April 2nd, 2026 01:02
after the empire collapses
sorenbarrett said:
A most unusual format to this poem that\'s lines continue from one stanza to the next in irregular breaks. It has surreal imagery that adds to the dream like feel. Well done
April 1st, 2026 03:47
sorenbarrett said:
A most unusual format to this poem that\'s lines continue from one stanza to the next in irregular breaks. It has surreal imagery that adds to the dream like feel. Well done
April 1st, 2026 03:47
When nothing makes sense anymore.
sorenbarrett said:
It reads with some grit and I love the jargon included that makes it all the more real. It grinds the bone along with the tooth and leaves the reader drooling as well. It feels real. Well done
March 31st, 2026 20:00
sorenbarrett said:
It reads with some grit and I love the jargon included that makes it all the more real. It grinds the bone along with the tooth and leaves the reader drooling as well. It feels real. Well done
March 31st, 2026 20:00
When nothing makes sense anymore.
marissa said:
A person in their mid life crisis ,or a freshly 19 year old girl should read this.
March 31st, 2026 19:39
marissa said:
A person in their mid life crisis ,or a freshly 19 year old girl should read this.
March 31st, 2026 19:39
Nine words scrambled in the wind.
sorenbarrett said:
This one seems posed as a puzzle of humanity and as I see it a commentary on humanity and our ability or rather inability to govern ourselves. Well done
March 29th, 2026 05:05
sorenbarrett said:
This one seems posed as a puzzle of humanity and as I see it a commentary on humanity and our ability or rather inability to govern ourselves. Well done
March 29th, 2026 05:05
Nine words scrambled in the wind.
Demar Desu - 德马尔·德苏 said:
I’m curious to why you put a period on planet?
March 29th, 2026 04:21
Demar Desu - 德马尔·德苏 said:
I’m curious to why you put a period on planet?
March 29th, 2026 04:21
Haunted House
Katie B. said:
Clever!!! Great read and enjoyable charcters. Thanks for sharing!
March 28th, 2026 06:46
Katie B. said:
Clever!!! Great read and enjoyable charcters. Thanks for sharing!
March 28th, 2026 06:46
Haunted House
sorenbarrett said:
So many souls involved in this poem and one must ask if there is a skeleton in the closet or did he come out of the closet long ago. A fun read that one must ask is it all fun or is there deeper meaning here.
March 28th, 2026 03:46
sorenbarrett said:
So many souls involved in this poem and one must ask if there is a skeleton in the closet or did he come out of the closet long ago. A fun read that one must ask is it all fun or is there deeper meaning here.
March 28th, 2026 03:46
April
sorenbarrett said:
Beauty ignored is April her name. A very nice write of deeper meaning that is initially evident. Like the rain it needs to sink in. Well done
March 27th, 2026 04:13
sorenbarrett said:
Beauty ignored is April her name. A very nice write of deeper meaning that is initially evident. Like the rain it needs to sink in. Well done
March 27th, 2026 04:13
Home
Friendship said:
Well written. Your poem focuses on a fly buzzing around a room, interacting with its environment, and ultimately finding a momentary pause in a painting. This imagery serves as a metaphor for life’s impermanence and the small moments of stillness we experience amid the chaos.
March 26th, 2026 19:27
Friendship said:
Well written. Your poem focuses on a fly buzzing around a room, interacting with its environment, and ultimately finding a momentary pause in a painting. This imagery serves as a metaphor for life’s impermanence and the small moments of stillness we experience amid the chaos.
March 26th, 2026 19:27
Home
sorenbarrett said:
Clever writing I hope the painting wasn\'t damaged with the funeral. A fun read
March 26th, 2026 03:41
sorenbarrett said:
Clever writing I hope the painting wasn\'t damaged with the funeral. A fun read
March 26th, 2026 03:41
the poet’s construction
sorenbarrett said:
A short snapshot in time without explanation it briefly dips us into reality only to be awakened from the dream by a slap. Very nice
March 25th, 2026 03:46
sorenbarrett said:
A short snapshot in time without explanation it briefly dips us into reality only to be awakened from the dream by a slap. Very nice
March 25th, 2026 03:46
I am a verb.
sorenbarrett said:
Very nice meter control in syllables, a great transmission of images all painting a vision. Nicely done
March 24th, 2026 04:15
sorenbarrett said:
Very nice meter control in syllables, a great transmission of images all painting a vision. Nicely done
March 24th, 2026 04:15
Radiantly Blue
sorenbarrett said:
This poem takes the seasons of life as matter of fact and is quite dry in delineating its plans. Well done
March 22nd, 2026 03:52
sorenbarrett said:
This poem takes the seasons of life as matter of fact and is quite dry in delineating its plans. Well done
March 22nd, 2026 03:52
How it starts.
sorenbarrett said:
Parts of speech like people all take different forms in this poem. A great metaphor it speaks to the reader about the care that must be exercised by us as writers in choosing our friends when writing. Very nicely done
March 21st, 2026 04:00
sorenbarrett said:
Parts of speech like people all take different forms in this poem. A great metaphor it speaks to the reader about the care that must be exercised by us as writers in choosing our friends when writing. Very nicely done
March 21st, 2026 04:00
Constellation
sorenbarrett said:
The poem leaves the reader knowing that there were many detours taken. Well done
March 20th, 2026 03:46
sorenbarrett said:
The poem leaves the reader knowing that there were many detours taken. Well done
March 20th, 2026 03:46
The original sin.
sorenbarrett said:
This to me is one of you best it carries indications of deeper meaning buried and its images are intriguing with a dark sense of mystery. The second to the last stanza of a butcher wearing a white apron over a dead man\'s snappy gray suit tells me a lot. Cosmetic cover ups as a shield for bloody hands and the gray suit seems very business like and proper. Very nice
March 19th, 2026 04:31
sorenbarrett said:
This to me is one of you best it carries indications of deeper meaning buried and its images are intriguing with a dark sense of mystery. The second to the last stanza of a butcher wearing a white apron over a dead man\'s snappy gray suit tells me a lot. Cosmetic cover ups as a shield for bloody hands and the gray suit seems very business like and proper. Very nice
March 19th, 2026 04:31
The original sin.
Katie B. said:
Well written. Great read. Thank you for sharing!
March 19th, 2026 01:59
Katie B. said:
Well written. Great read. Thank you for sharing!
March 19th, 2026 01:59
Vernal equinox.
sorenbarrett said:
Quite the scene set with vivid images. I am not sure of the metaphor here if there is one but it feels very worldly and full of flesh whether it be sex or cadavers
March 17th, 2026 18:34
sorenbarrett said:
Quite the scene set with vivid images. I am not sure of the metaphor here if there is one but it feels very worldly and full of flesh whether it be sex or cadavers
March 17th, 2026 18:34
Winter
Durdica Porobija said:
The poem is appealing and can be read on two levels: on the realism of childhood snowy joys and on the other hand on the level of the theme of the transience of human beings, and indeed, the erasure of every trace of existence.
March 4th, 2026 12:41
Durdica Porobija said:
The poem is appealing and can be read on two levels: on the realism of childhood snowy joys and on the other hand on the level of the theme of the transience of human beings, and indeed, the erasure of every trace of existence.
March 4th, 2026 12:41
March
sorenbarrett said:
An alert that calls out and then settles down to peace. Nicely done
February 27th, 2026 17:33
sorenbarrett said:
An alert that calls out and then settles down to peace. Nicely done
February 27th, 2026 17:33
Still life.
sorenbarrett said:
A painter\'s pallet of colors boldly run through this poem. It is vivid and bright most easy to see. The color alone gives it emotion and it shouts fave
February 25th, 2026 04:29
sorenbarrett said:
A painter\'s pallet of colors boldly run through this poem. It is vivid and bright most easy to see. The color alone gives it emotion and it shouts fave
February 25th, 2026 04:29
Still life.
thinkerbell said:
The imagery in this poem is so good..loved it🥰
February 25th, 2026 02:34
thinkerbell said:
The imagery in this poem is so good..loved it🥰
February 25th, 2026 02:34
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