Comments received on poems by idunnoman
Since you decided to be young and dead.
willyweed said:
its a good story line
say as much a you can
with less verbage and crisp rhyme
you have a diamond in the rough here. could be a shined up killer.
just saying cause you asked.
January 7th, 2017 12:59
willyweed said:
its a good story line
say as much a you can
with less verbage and crisp rhyme
you have a diamond in the rough here. could be a shined up killer.
just saying cause you asked.
January 7th, 2017 12:59
Since you decided to be young and dead.
Phoenix8523 said:
Eloquently written. It\'s so hard to see things from the survivor\'s point of view when we\'re struggling so much to just manage the next moment. When we\'ve written off ourselves, someone is sure to be left with a hole. -- phoenix
January 7th, 2017 11:16
Phoenix8523 said:
Eloquently written. It\'s so hard to see things from the survivor\'s point of view when we\'re struggling so much to just manage the next moment. When we\'ve written off ourselves, someone is sure to be left with a hole. -- phoenix
January 7th, 2017 11:16
my god has this girl told me im ugly
omgoli said:
Great first poem! Just a bit of advice.. Careful about how much rhyme you use, sometimes it can sound like a tongue twister!
January 6th, 2017 14:23
omgoli said:
Great first poem! Just a bit of advice.. Careful about how much rhyme you use, sometimes it can sound like a tongue twister!
January 6th, 2017 14:23
my god has this girl told me im ugly
willyweed said:
Welcome to the noodle factory
idunnoman.! good first crack I like to see another,
January 6th, 2017 14:20
willyweed said:
Welcome to the noodle factory
idunnoman.! good first crack I like to see another,
January 6th, 2017 14:20
my god has this girl told me im ugly
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME IDM ~ Thanks for your first poem ~ which is quite a challenge. UGLY is a relative term and additionally BEAUTY / UGLINESS is also in the EYE of the Beholder ! Your opening suggests you had been playing RUGBY or are a BUILDER or FARM WORKER when we never look our best. My GF tells me I scrub up well and she always loves me straight out of the SHOWER. There are lots of things we can do to make us \"more presentable\" so I trust your poem and your own opinion of yourself is a passing phase ! Great pom by the way ! Please check my poems ~ Thanks BRIAN (UK)
January 6th, 2017 12:04
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME IDM ~ Thanks for your first poem ~ which is quite a challenge. UGLY is a relative term and additionally BEAUTY / UGLINESS is also in the EYE of the Beholder ! Your opening suggests you had been playing RUGBY or are a BUILDER or FARM WORKER when we never look our best. My GF tells me I scrub up well and she always loves me straight out of the SHOWER. There are lots of things we can do to make us \"more presentable\" so I trust your poem and your own opinion of yourself is a passing phase ! Great pom by the way ! Please check my poems ~ Thanks BRIAN (UK)
January 6th, 2017 12:04
