A CINQUAIN COLLECTION
Airless
Windows firm shut
Abandoned, neglected
Floating dust accumulating
Settling.
Lost hope
Stately fanes stood
Melting crowns fell on fire
Forgotten idols abandoned
World ends.
Hurt felt
sleep gives escape
in glowing tinted dreams
the discomposed demeanour lost
pain fades
A Cinquain is a short, usually unrhymed poem consisting of
twenty-two syllables distributed as 2, 4, 6, 8, 2, in five lines.
It was developed by the Imagist poet, Adelaide Crapsey.
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Author:
Michael Edwards (
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Wow - - what power in each of these cinquains Michael - - my favourite is the third but they all speak with force.
Thank you Fay - I've just made a slight alteration to number 3 - first and last lines were wrong way round.
Ooops I meant number 2
A fine set of writes and pic Michael. Did Miss Berles check all those syllables? Can't have one extra sneaking in!
Yes she came over on the Cilla Bus.
Did you call her, to come over on the bus? Did you say 'Coooeeee' (hi) - that's two syllables - when you met here?
And furthermore, why am I spouting rubbish?!
Do you like sprouts ? Cilla does.
Michael, your collection of cinquains are truth spoken in so few words.
A joy to read. 🙂
Thank you so much Tamara. I've been away for a few days and will be in and out for another week or so but will certainly look out your poetry while I'm still on-line.
Take your time, Michael.
There's no rush for my poetry. Enjoy your time at home. 🙂
I'm glad I found your poetry site and will be reading more of your poems later on today. 🙂
Really great set of cinquains Michael!
Thanks Christina
Formula belong in mathematics not in poetry in my book. 'You shall dream and express your feelings to the following formula my dear Robot'
Transgression will result in a circuit replacement, yes dear Robot we shall remove a chip off the old block.
Surely there is a place for all types of poetry which is what makes the art form so rich. Many of our leading poets wrote in classical forms including Shakespear et al . I love all forms and my poetry covers a wider variation in form and type than most - bit like my art work where I work in traditional semi-realism right through to total abstract. The ability to write in such a range is rare here on MPS - if I didn't take on all types I would soon get bored as I do with much of the personal therapy type of work that seems to predominate. It all reminds me of a friend who looked at some of my work and said 'That's not poetry - it doesn't rhyme' Come on dusk - open your mind and embrace all forms . You write some great stuff so lower the shutters and give it a go - please.
I can accept your comments, however.... my writings are all free of restriction by any convention. Perhaps, my initial comments would benefit from my own edit for i do see that within such 'formulae' you amongst a few others do produce good works. Sadly most here appear to be satisfied by getting just the arithmetic right.
Personally, if i lack inspiration i.e. something which moves me enough to write about it, then i won't use a formula somebody dreamed up as a substitute... for, like you, i am not one of those who HAS TO write something every day. For the time being, i'll do it my way.
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WELCOME UNCLE MICHAEL : We have missed your quirky Art and Odd Odes. I love this melancholy trio : I am nostalgic too missing "Autumn in Essex" September does not sit well with Spring. I have composed some KIWI CINQUAINS for tomorrow!
Your Trio deserve titles:
Abandoned House
Abandoned Honour
Abandoned Hope
Every blessing : Love ANGELA 🧡🧡🧡🧡
I'll be in Essex tomorrow - in the heart of Epping Forest - autumn colours are not quite with us yet but soon will be.
Thanks UNCLE MICHAEL ~ Enjoy Epping Forrest ~ Beautiful. There is some Autumn Colour appearing ~ should be a good year ! Please check ANGELA's CINQUAINS from AUCKLAND ~ Yours as always BRIAN.
a fine collection Michael.
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