New Notions.
The clock-face of midnight, assaulted
and pierced by block
waits looking askance at my inky pen
when witching hour stops.
Labour's oil long burnt out leaves me
still making verse
while shaping new notions so Calliope
I bid you have mercy.
My mind may finally yield to sleep for
words dunked in rhyme
strung on short lines flicker as caution
re-views one more time.
Soon now and dawn will be brushing
my window to see
me yearning for rest when todayness
stirs and tries to shake me.
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Author:
Fay Slimm. (
Offline) - Published: October 24th, 2018 04:19
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Ah and so to bed to rest your active mind. For your past works reveal the dawning is such a creative time within your soul.
Awake refreshed and dazzling. Seeing as only you see. Writing as only you. Creating within us your vivid pictures as if a scent were transporting us.
Sleep perchance to awaken creative.
Bravo - sleep tight Fay
A good write Fay. Erm, goodnight!
THANK YOU FAY : For sharing something of your process from idea to draft to finished Poem. Yours are always perfect as presented ! I always learn something about poetic form from your posts ! Today you have presented four balanced quatrains with an xaxa xbxb etc rhyme & half-rhyme pattern. It reads and recites well which is the hallmark of a good Poem ! In my todays POEM (which I have called a 6 4 4 Sonnet !) The content SUNRISE : SUNSET alas overtook a consistent Rhyme Pattern (BRIAN is teaching me to be a better poet) : He did not edit this one because I wanted to surprise him. I treat MPS as a Poetry School and I learn from ALL the Poets I comment on ! Please check Sunrise Sunset.
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Beautiful write Fay.
I have a picture of Calliope looking down at me where I write my words, her inspiration is is valuable.
I have often been impressed with the way your poems look, obviously less important than the way they read and sound, but nevertheless, I think important... This is not only a grand sounding poem, but a fine example of a good looker too..... Neville
Yes - I like the lines to stagger and in order and sometimes this harms the metre but for me it is worth the adjustment -- and anyway a Good Looker is bound to make her poems look good as well !! - says she with a wry smile.............. thanks a load for resurrecting this oldie Nev................. x
my pleasure..
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