Freshness after rain
Day-cool pathways in shadow
Long sunlit fingers
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B******s carry seed
They should be venerated
Do not hang them out.
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Points of contention
Framed in written narrative
Discussion ensues.
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Unknown in annals
Declared without modesty
Silent verdicts reached
- Author: Michael Edwards ( Offline)
- Published: November 5th, 2018 01:02
- Category: Unclassified
- Views: 86
- Users favorite of this poem: Laura🌻
Comments7
Four more good ones Michael.
Thanks Andy
A fine set of writes Michael. with a swoony one too - you know the one! heehee.
Was it the third one? Anyway I did mark it 18+ so no need for Fido to get all barky!
If I'm reading second correctly, it should be "X" rated.... or my mind should... ha ha
It should be X rated - hope it's not an omen for my surgery tomorrow - I could end up with a couple of aubergines
Nothing but bliss and warm blankets for you tomorrow
Wonderfully done. Good luck tomorrow!
Thanks for your wishes Christina
THANKS UNCLE MIKE ~ A fine trio of GEESE followed by a fine quartet of HAIKU !
1. Raining on my Pathway
2. In praise of Spherical Objects
3. Contending ~ Framing ~ Discussing
4. Unknown ~ Brazen ~ Vindicated
My fave is THREE because I love a DEBATE
Thanks for sharing ~ BRIAN
Our Prayers are with YOU MANANA - B & A 🧡🧡🧡🧡
Thanks B&A - I do appreciate all your comment s a nd when it comes to No3 I might have no choice later today lol. 😒
Michael,
Great haikus!
Love the geese!
It looks like one of them is left out of the “conversation” or is bored and leaving!😉
All the best to you!
~Laura~
Thanks so much Laura - I'll be back soon.
I think each of these four little gems more than adequately make up the full set... not sure why you have rated this page 18 + though.. and if it was me, I would lose the full stop at the end of the two middle haiku's... Neville
I think I rated it thus when first drafted with bollocks in full. As for the two full stops if I take them out what will I do with them? Thanks for taking the time to comment.
primary school kids use far worse language and always have done.. if you removed those full stops, maybe you could keep them as spares...
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