Climbing.
Stormforce confronts the tail-end
of innocence and carefree
calm hurled away, fire's mind-set
lights departure's legacy.
Life in the wake of changes acts
out a merciless course,
composure alters as hurtful facts
faced loathe being absorbed.
Scarring of hope exposes wounds
and festers turn raw
as lover's lost trust starts to ooze
bile inside heart's disorder.
Lies like turbulence cause offence
to trust's wiser claim
and truth strikes hard when sense
perceives their waywardness.
Gathering a last frenzied strength
rage floods thru resistance,
forces entry, flails then quenches
a taste for forgiveness.
Now dry-eyed the lady fights on
safer ground, well-shaken
but wiser and still climbing from
his bitter betrayal.
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Author:
Fay Slimm. (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Thoughts after reading the quote - - hope the words help those undergoing the shock of betrayal.
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This was so good in so many ways is so hard to gain trust again, I had this thought yesterday and can't wait to share with you.
Your ending is so powerful, shaken but on solid ground with wiser hands.
Thank you for this and the quote with a little cry 😉
Ah - so pleased to have your input Dan -- shall look forward to reading your views on how to gain trust again. Thanks for your visit and comment.
A fine write Fay.
Thank you dear Orchi.
A lost love through betrayal is more injurious than a loss, and your poem paints the repercussions exactly. Fighting "on safer ground" with "a taste for forgiveness" is the best result. Keep "climbing" - Phil A.
I agree Phil that betrayal is the worst of challenges yet a taste for forgiveness gives the best result. Thanks ever so much for your comment.
I enjoyed this very much. A very descriptive read on the subject.
Nicely written.
Best regards!
Ah - many thanks for your comment Nick and am so pleased you found the write interesting. Warm regards to you too from Cornwall U.K. where here we are enjoying the waking of Spring.
Super write Fay
Thanks a load Michael.
GOOD NIGHT FAY : Its gone 12 noon (Thursday) here & my Clinic is 2 pm ! BETRAYAL is a big word and a denial of all that BRIAN & I stand for ! WE have been separated by 11,500 miles for Eight Months and because we have found TRUE LOVE and a bit more mature (30 & 35) the absence has made us stronger. We both wear engagement rings which helps and most KIWIS & MAORIS respect my status. A few have asked me for a date but I have always refused ! I either go out with RUTH or in a Group and I know BRIAN would never be unfaithful ~ AMEN
Each of the verses in your Perfect Poem expresses a betrayal of TRUST. I know Couples who have faced "Bitter Betrayal by their Partner : some have survived : but others have ended the relationship and ended up SADDER but WISER Betrayal is something People have to climb out of or PERISH ! Brian and I keep in regular touch and lots of the Poems we post are COLLABORATIONS. We never do (and never will !) take each other for granted. Thanks for posting this poem as a salutary wraning to any would-be BETRAYERS !
Blessings & Love in the Spirit
ANGELA 🧡🧡🧡🧡🧡
My dear Fay,
As the expression goes...
—Been there, done that—
The end result of it all is extraordinary!
It has made me stronger, independent, and best of all experience a love deeper than ever before! The love we experienced for one another when we first met will always be there! No more doubts!
This great line truly describes how I felt at the time...
“Life in the wake of changes acts
out a merciless course”...
Thank you for sharing this outstanding write! You are truly a poetess I very much admire!
~Laura~
Such a wonderful write Fay.
Experience cannot be taught but once learned can take us so much further in our lives.
indeed it is true, nothing stings quite like the smarting sting left in the wake of betrayal... any kind of betrayal in my mind.. another great write from a delicate & dedicated pen.... yours truly... A fan.....
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